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the parasprite


Let me be your albatross, then.

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Twilight Sparkle goes to a conference and talks with some ponies about some numbers.

Cover art is by dreamingnoctis.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 176 )

Kaidan may have brought me here, but Dreaming Noctis convinced me to stay.

4901642 NOT NEARLY HYPE ENOUGH
YOU'RE NOT EVEN TALKING IN ALL CAPS

4901627

I believe the word you're looking for is "moist" :rainbowkiss:

Hype got.

Twilight is making me feel intensely uncomfortable. She's still her, but... sort of more efficient. If you see what I mean.

Heil Celestia! Para, you're a literary fucking genius. This is straight up Nazi Equestria.

Isn't Cz pronounced tch?

4901780

It is, thanks for catching my linguistic failure. Originally I was just trying to make it sound slightly foreign with no regard to anything else. =P

And away we gooooooo!

This was truly epic to watch form up!

~Skeeter The Lurker

Majin Syeekoh
Story Approver

Knowing somewhat of the story behind this, I find this quietly chilling.

Good show.

“Alright, alright!” Nejiste snapped. “I-I suppose it has my approval.”
“Thank—”
Just keep me out of that from now on,” she added, almost warningly.

Missing quotation mark, I believe.

4901811

I invoke Christ's name at those too :raritydespair: Fucking hate it when that shit happens, man.

Fixed.

Oh shit, it's here.

There's still something human (for lack of a better word) in Twilight, but she chooses to set that aside in order to do what is "necessary." It's a very rational approach for accomplishing her goals. Too bad those goals are wrong.

This is not going to be a fun ride, of course, but I knew that coming in. I really hope this Twilight decides to re-examine her choices in life.

And then this will go on for about another 3-5 chapters or so, and then you'll forget about it and stop writing for about 2-4 months before finally picking up on this story(or another) after that time is done.

4901833

Actually, the reason I've been inactive for the last 8 months or so is that I was planning/writing this story.

4901853 So it would seem...

Maybe...

Or maybe not...

...

Cake is nice.

Is there going to be anything that distinguishes this setting from Nazi Pony Germany?

4901830

I really hope this Twilight decides to re-examine her choices in life.

Would that negate the choices she's already made, though? She made it clear this isn't the first time she's organized something like this to get rid of a large number of changelings in an area.

There are no brakes on the Nazi death train? :fluttercry:

Will this be a long, ebin story?

When you think about it, Nejiste isn't any better than the rest of them; she may feel uncomfortable with what's happening but has no problems with proceeding as long as she is kept in the dark.

I suppose the same could be said of many Nazi officials at the time.

On a different note, this Twilight kind of creeps me out, she's like canon-Twilight in enough ways to invoke a sense of familiarity, but there's just enough different to completely throw everything off and send her plummeting into the uncanny valley.

Hessaneigh is still infested changelings

I have have been given

Might want to fix those as well.

4901925 Huh. Now how many times does that make me being called that...

Hard to remember with what I go through.

4901876

Well, they think it's okay2bgay. It also has a lot of minor differences that would be important to someone like me (because I'm a historyfag) but probably irrelevant to other people, like the absence of the Führerprinzip (although Twilight does invoke Celestia's royal authority as a basis for overriding higher-ranking ponies) and the fact that most of their racism is based on the as-yet unexplained concept of "harmoniousness" being hereditary.

But as for things that matter to you: yeah, there are differences. I still have a lot of worldbuilding to do.

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4901816

I've just spent the past ten minutes trying to write a comment that both accurately conveys my feelings for the effort and mastery of character that went into this story, as well as dishes out the adequate (and thus very long-winded) praise that this story deserves.

As of 9:43 PM EST, I've solidly failed in my attempt.

This chapter-- and by extension, this story-- is incredible. Twilight was driven to a conference, and talked with some ponies about numbers. In the span of those actions, you've successfully rendered the cold, dark, emotional world of this modern Equestria and you're not even finished. I'm in awe. I'm disgusted, intrigued, and thoroughly impressed.

Of the stories you've written, this is definitely going to be the most difficult to swallow, and I love that.

Were these ponies human, I could see a meeting like this one happening all those years ago, when the Final Solution was being circulated through the Nazi ranks.

o7

4901937

Is the changeling on the cover Rainbow Dash? She looks eerily familiar...

I am really enjoying this story and cannot wait for more.

Well, having now read this chapter, I'm hooked. You've done an excellent job here Para, and I'm loving the universe you've created. The strong nazi vibes from Equestria in this has me deeply intrigued. All I can say is I'm dying to see where this story will lead. Bravo.

I've been waiting to read this from you for quite some time, from just the first chapter alone, I'm liking it. You've set it up nicely and I can't wait for more of this.

Splinterwood isn't at all ominous. Or difficult to grasp at its true design. :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

I wonder at the roles in the future are to be?

4901945

I've just spent the past ten minutes trying to write a comment that both accurately conveys my feelings for the effort and mastery of character that went into this story, as well as dishes out the adequate (and thus very long-winded) praise that this story deserves.

As of 9:43 PM EST, I've solidly failed in my attempt.

You know, half the people I first told about the idea were left speechless as well, but I'm not sure it was for the same reason

This chapter-- and by extension, this story-- is incredible. Twilight was driven to a conference, and talked with some ponies about numbers. In the span of those actions, you've successfully rendered the cold, dark, emotional world of this modern Equestria and you're not even finished. I'm in awe. I'm disgusted, intrigued, and thoroughly impressed.

Part of what I wanted to accomplish with this was a sequence where there was no action, no violence, and no lurid descriptions of horrible things--to prove that something can be engaging without appealing to the absolute lowest common denominator.

Of the stories you've written, this is definitely going to be the most difficult to swallow, and I love that.

I think that stories dealing with war and the holocaust and things like that should be held to a higher standard than usual, even if they are about talking ponies. Solitary Locust was just my take on a fad (that got really popular because of its timing). Listen and Learn was a trollfic based on my dislike of "coming out romances". I feel this story is different, and I want to write it correctly.

Were these ponies human, I could see a meeting like this one happening all those years ago, when the Final Solution was being circulated through the Nazi ranks.

You give me way too much credit. There are also two movies about Wannsee--the first one is West German and it's really well done, although I tried to avoid copying it when I was writing this. The second one is Canadian or something and it's just a bunch of overacting and Nazi cliches.

4901994

No, she's a changeling character I created specifically for the story.

Czabreske

Weird word. Does it mean something?

This mare seemed to be part-crystal and part-pegasus.

Normally I would frown upon such things - this kind of racial mix usually is a trademark sign of bad stories with mary sue OCs (apart from black&red alicorns). I understand that in this story races in general are a big thing, so I guess existence of a half-half pony is justified.

Stabęle

What is this? :pinkiegasp:

Speaking of genocide and stuff, you may find this interesting.

4901922

When you think about it, Nejiste isn't any better than the rest of them; she may feel uncomfortable with what's happening but has no problems with proceeding as long as she is kept in the dark.

I'm glad people are picking up on that. I didn't want to portray her as a hero, just someone who found the idea horrifying and didn't want to see it realized.

I suppose the same could be said of many Nazi officials at the time.

I think in a lot of cases the Nazis were extremely squeamish too. IIRC all the top SS guys thought of Rudolf Höss as a hero because he was tasked with one of the most horrible jobs imaginable and still did it efficiently. Gassing was developed partly to spare the SS people the ethical unpleasantness of having to shoot women and children personally and thus feel responsible for it (because the Einsatzgruppen guys were then drinking heavily and acting like retards, occasionally causing serious public relations issues).

On a different note, this Twilight kind of creeps me out, she's like canon-Twilight in enough ways to invoke a sense of familiarity, but there's just enough different to completely throw everything off and send her plummeting into the uncanny valley.

Comments like this really please me.

4902210

Wiss's first name. It's a play on "Stable Vice". Get it? There was originally more indication that Wiss and Nejiste were somewhat friendly outside the meeting, but I removed it because it was too much of a tangent. Anyway, I thought I'd removed all instances of his first name, but I guess I missed one. Thanks.

4902235

Oh yeah, also there were some non-English sounds in the names of a few of the OC ponies, but I took a lot of that out because I felt people would find it too confusing and pretentious.

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