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Agent Everfree


Names Everfree, I am a dragon... or wait a pony? Okay so I have many different bodies but all you need to know is that I'm just some bad writer who never knows when to quit

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A few years ago my kind attacked this land and its rulers, but they were stopped. But the Princesses did not stop there, they made sure that all of my kind were removed from this world for good, this did not surprise many. But it surprised me. But in the end it comes down...to one simple question: What are you prepared to sacrifice?

When Twilight Sparkle came to me, I sacrificed my story, my memory to become something better then another monster

But change costs. Every time, you pay a little more.

but will they Remember me......

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 54 )

You need to captilize all those "i"s.

When i was young i

Should be; "When I was young I "

Continue captilizing for the rest of the story.

Also, get a editor, a few spelling mistakes here and there.

Other than that, I wait for more.

Wow, this is way more awesome than the original version :pinkiehappy:
It kinda reminds me a bit of Far Cry 3... :rainbowhuh:

3694292 Hmm never played the game so i wouldn't know :rainbowhuh:
but thank you :twilightsmile:

:pinkiegasp: ITS BACK!!! :pinkiehappy:
I'm love'n the story already can'y wait for more.

So this is the rewrite of this?

Nice, but you should change "On hiatus" to "Incomplete", since you are actually writing :twilightsmile:

this is going another way than the original. I like it :twilightsmile:

3711208 Didn't want to make the same mistake I did last time with Twilight in the Original

is this going to be from Mr. Forest guy's point of view or is it gonna be all switchin it up, know what I mean?
Just curious.

3711904 No It's his memory he's walking about

CIA

I Shall name him Einzelgänger

I'm enjoying this so far. I will call the changeling "Zin".

I just wonder how ponyville will react to Zin.

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and i wonder how Zin will react to ponyville.

3733433 Why is everyone calling him zin?

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well this guy under me called him zin, so to reply i gotta use this name as well.
I have no idea really.

3734381 IDK why I chose the name I just thought it fit him.

so the next one will be out soon like a day or two

3738072 Hard to say at the moment as I go back to college monday and work is going to start getting hard again

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ok, it's fine with me.

welp. shit. . .:twilightoops:

time to freak out and run away, eh scar?:fluttershyouch:

i never foresaw the story panning out that direction, but i enjoy it.:trollestia:

MOAR PLEEZ!:pinkiehappy:

3D animation of this? HELL YEAH! :pinkiehappy:

I am speckles on how good this is so hear is my best shot; it was the best I have read in a long time

The romance felt more rushed that it should.

3807662 Was kinda the point, but I didn't want to tell a story of love

3807143 yes it is one of the best I have read in a while

You REALLY rushed the romance to quick and to early.

3808089 I know, I was gonna cut the romance all together. I still not sure why I didnt

:pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy: Did you use "Zin" on purpose? I didn't think that would get in the story!

A shame the story ended soon. Still an awesome story!

Would love to see a 3d animation!

Taking my like back and fave back this was nothing like the first story that was on here.

Overall great story. It could have a sequel though I would say.

I read the description...

They used to call me Scar, Remember me...

Am I the only one who replaced 'Scar' with 'Prophet'?

i have a feeling this going to be heart breaking :pinkiesad2:

scar that sounds like a total badass

oh shit this is not going to end well

Well I'll admit it was a good story, but the style just doesn't suit me. It felt very rushed as well, I'm more for the slower build-up. Don't mind me though, from some of the other comments it seems that there are others who enjoy your stuff enough for a sequel.

Hope I didn't get you down.

5744950 Not really I feel like it was rushed as well, I felt like I wanted to make up for my poor story attempt with
the original story but I only ended up making a rushed mess in the end.

Best theme song for this.

We built this city on rock n roll

Meh c: Don't chu remember me we built this city on rock n rollll...

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When I say in my head "Remember me" I always hear it with Prophet's voice.

I was simply searching through the site for a good or even great story. When i came across this i thought Might as well. So after reading it, i thought it was a veeeerrrrry great story. You good sir, earned yourself a compliment :P
P.s to add to the compliment, this deserves a sequel

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