Edit: This is an old story, you have been warned.
Spawn 666, Nickname: Skid.
Just a regular one of the hive until he was blasted the farthest away from the hive mother and now has to think for himself for the first time in his life. He has to think on his feet and make a disguise for himself based on his imagination of a pony he crafted in haste. He now has one job: Infiltrate Ponyville for his Liege, his queen. But being away from the hive means he is going to develop a personality, and that is something someone in the hive should be without, except in smaller doses. Will his new life affect his job, or will he forsake the innocent ponies for the one he is supposed to serve?
[R] Means the chapter is entirely revised.
[SR] Means it had been slightly revised, but is not the final copy. This means there is likely plot holes and information missing.
And then there is romance! Too much damn shipping!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Actualy, there is no plan for any shipping. However I was browsing the changeling stories already around and one of them said
'Romace Tab up there because Changelings after all feed on love'
Let me say this one and once only.
I WILL NEVER, IN FACT I BLATANTLY REFUSE TO, EVER WRITE A SHIPPING FIC
except when it's only in jest or part of a challenge.
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PENGUINS
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............ Can you give any bribes? Or bribe accessories?
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Too easy
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And that is why I win
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No matter what else happens, the guards will always be grateful for everything you've done!
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Psh, they'd never let a wolf in otherwise.
which reminds me
I AM DISSAPOINT IN QUALITY OF WOLF FICS ON THIS PONY SITE
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"Ermm, what the hell are you doing?"
'Oh I'm just... Searching this wolf, yea that's right... Searching'
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Please, this is 'everyone' rated so I expect the comments to be of a smiliar rating too plox.
1685979 BAH windhelm guards have better pride then tiny riftens
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I assumed this was Skyrim, but if it's not which game is it?
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Don't cross me, troll
1686065 Aye it is the great land of skyrim
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Never played the game just reconised the graphics.
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Not bad so far, have a fav and thumb. Have to say though, there is a slight problem with flow. It really feels like one second he's here, the next he's there. I'm all for short and sweet, but a lot of stuff came at me too fast. Transistions almost didn't happen at all, which made it a bit confusing to read.
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Alright, I'll try to pace it more next chapter.
1686098 You win this time Riften.
i must go. Windhelm needs me
ROARCOPTER ACTIVATE!
First
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Everytime someone comments first, a CMC cries
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Haha! Windhelm wins this victory
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Who?
1692408it involes skyrim with me and Riften Guard
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Hmmm
D
D
D
When I press D I EXPECT A D TO APPEAR DAMNIT
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A wild D appears.
D
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It's super effctive
Story got errors
Last 2 chapters were better than the first in terms of flow. Still need to work on it a bit. I see you use a triple space to make separations, why not use [ hr] <- without the space between [ and h, or something like ------- etc?
And what's with you and the word 'hand'??
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Well I used enter once, got told it was too close together so started using enter twice for seperations when speaking and a third when the story is changing scenes or something like that
what does this do?
Oh wow, that could be usefull
1697172 lol
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Yeah
I
could
use
something
like
this
very
much
I guess this is filler.
I guess I'm just busy
I guess I'm just lazy
The last section was kinda confusing. I had to read it several times before i got it
-Shadow F.
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Sorry, you mean the battle?
When I have more time I'll edit it and try and make it less confusing.
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I just didn't know what was fully happening. The way you don't clearly (Personally) indicate who's talking is what mostly catches me off guard.
But, its' the fight sence at the end,
--Shadow F.
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Ok I'll redo the entire thing, when I'm not caught up in real life problems.
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Don't worry bout it. I'm sure it's just me being slow (Mentally)
-Shadow Flare
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Or maybe the chapter does seem rushed and m y work can often get confusing.
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*Shrugs, before flying around in circles waiting for the next chapter*
-Shadow Flare
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WHAT!? YOU WANT ANOTHER ONE?
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Well, the story is damn good, so i don't see why there wouldn't be another chapter.
Or was the sarcasm?
-Shadow F
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Half sarcasm, half happines, half annoyance, half-
Wait a second...
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HHHMmmmmm...
-Shadow F.
Enjoy a half chapter, I bone tired right now
Also don't ask me why Shid and Rd talked about that, I just put them together and let a conversation happen.
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well this aint going to end well