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Night Spark

I am here for a singular purpose. I live to serve friendship and magic. I will bring both serious/fun FIC to this site. I will not however, perverse this great show. If you want that then go burn...


War is upon Equestria. Queen Chrysalis is back along with her changeling horde. However this time she is different. The Changelings are being fueled by something else. The Equestrian Forces must prepare for battle. How will the ponies of Equestria fair without the elements? A new hope flourishes in an unexpected form. Shortly after the town of Appaloosa is destroyed a changeling surrenders to its few remaining inhabitants. Who is this changeling? Why is he helping the ponies? Is this new hope nothing more than a deceptive trap? Or he is simply a Changeling who has had a change of heart?

Chapters (22)
Comments ( 250 )

Honestly, I'm a bit torn about this. The dialog during the early section in Ponyville just felt off (mostly Twilight). You ought to review the grammar and keep dialog from different characters separate, specifically with that last conversation between Spike and Flutters. The story picked up a lot more when Celestia arrived, and I found myself grinning when Celestia had already made an insane list of lists. Discord felt about right, and the concept intrigues me. I love changelings, and I think this has a lot of potential as an epic (literally) war story.

I think it could do with some smoothing and a bit of revision, but so far it's not bad and I remain optimistic. I'll be keeping an eye on this to see how it progresses. I'm looking forward to see just what Discord does, and how well you can blend drama with comedy in the same chapters if you go that route.

I'm excited to see what will be coming next... I favorited. :twilightsmile:

3612795 Thanks for reading! I went back and re-read the dialogue you mentioned and I agree it doesn't flow well. I will make sure to fix that for upcoming chapters. I'm not to sure on what you meant by Twilight sounding off. I guess I just need more practice writing for her. She will have some more dialogue in Chapter 2 and I will try to get her down better. I'm glad you enjoyed the Celestia bit.:trollestia: As the story goes on there will be more moments like that. Discord and changelings are very interesting to me. I have always wondered how a battle between the two would go down. He can change them into anything...but they could change back. While a Discord chapter isn't until later I can assure that it will be epic.:derpytongue2: I will give you a heads up. Chapter two is going to be a bit darker than this one. It will definitely be more on the side of drama. I will be introducing my OC.

3613353 A lot is coming next! My OC, drama, action, and a bit more of the overall plot. Thanks for the fav!!!

Lol! that author's note:rainbowlaugh:

But as for my review of this chapter I did enjoy it, I don't read changeling stories too often but this chapter gives them a little more character then just being mindless drones to their queen. I'm interested in Night Spark and i do wanna see what the mane 6's reaction to him will be. Though I'm sure it'll be something like this:rainbowhuh::pinkiegasp::twilightangry2::raritycry::fluttershbad::applejackunsure: or something along those lines. You wrote Braeburn pretty well, even when he's fighting I could easily hear his voice saying those things as I read. (my opinion) I'm looking forward to the next chapter. :moustache:

This is actually the first story I've read where a changeling goes rogue. Not sure why I never looked into one before. An interesting chapter that works pretty well. Changelings are always interesting to me in fan works because there's a lot of ways they can be interpreted. I'm interested in seeing more about how they work in this story, as well as having a closer look into this particular changeling's motivation and learning more about him in general. Something tells me it's not a ruse, but you never can be sure with changelings, eh?

My attention remains.

3616269 Thank you! I am also into the changelings. I feel they can be so much more than what the show depicted. I plan to explore the limits of their magic and their connection to Queen Chrysalis. To me there is a lot of unexplored emotional potential in changelings (specifically my OC). I plan to explore his feelings on many things (ponies, cutiemarks, other changelings, self worth, the princesses, side characters,etc.). I haven't read much fic for this show as I literally got into it last month. From what I have read we generally get the emotions and feelings of the main 6 and the popular side characters. I want to give readers Equestria from a different perspective. :derpyderp1:

3614837 I assure you the the main 6 will be more like :ajbemused::flutterrage::pinkiegasp::rainbowhuh::raritydespair::twilightangry2: lol but you'll see....or....read....yea.....lol

3630063 THANK YOU!!! I am so happy you thought so! Stay tuned because I am typing away at chapter 3 right now. More great changeling awesomeness to come. :derpytongue2:

Amazing story so far. Will be faving. Keep up the good work :heart:

Whoa! Massive amounts of back story for a Changeling? That was incredibly interesting! I have never seen so much history and back ground for changelings. Seeing Princess Luna's change of heart was nice, I'm curious to see what the future chapters hold for Equestria's newest ally! keep up the good work! Spike offers you a mustache for the good work so far! :moustache:

Yes. I like this. very much...

3667148 Who knows? Maybe you will find out? :ajsmug:

3664150 I glad that you like it!!!! :twilightsmile:

3662146 Thanks a lot! Yea I am trying to flesh out the changelings because I think the best enemies are the ones you know and maybe even like a bit. I don't want them to just be some generic LOTR Orcs army rip off. They have so much potential. If you like the history I have made up so far keep reading I may do some chapters about the olden days when they were close friends with ponies. I WILL TAKE THE SPIKE-STASH!!! :moustache:

An interesting development. The best villains are the ones that make you think and really question whether they are truly evil or misguided. I remain curious to see where all this goes.

lemme ask you somethin.

Do you feel in charge?

Yay! Holiday chapter! I actually loved how this chapter had a good amount of cuteness and adorableness, but had its serious moments still. I wont mention other things I enjoyed at the risk of spoiling things for readers who haven't read it and see my comment first. otherwise great chapter! Way to add festivity to your epic story, even when there is a war going on, Ponies still gotta celebrate Hearts Warming Eve and remember how it all began! :pinkiehappy:
lol... spirits... I see what you did there :raritywink:

Mane six felt little OOC. Some parts was bit rushed. But overall not bad

BAHAHAHAHA!!! I was eating a muffin when he met miss Doo. :rainbowlaugh::derpytongue2:

I think it may be a while before the main six really accept him. I know that I would certainly be suspicious. Nice chapter, nice character building for Spark, nice use of Ditzy. Miss Doo and Night Spark? I'd ship that.

TO THE MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

3698617 Thanks Im glad you liked it!

3698687 I appreciate your feedback. LOL I will admit when writing this I was rushing just a tad to try to get it out a little after Christmas. I decided last minute that I would attempt a holiday chapter because some of the ones I read were so DARN GOOD!!! As far as the mane six go...I would love if you could kindly point out to me what may have felt off. If it is their interactions with Night Spark then I guess I may not change that just yet. I do not want them to do what they have done in the show as far as non-friends or villains go. After a short time they are all buddies!! I want them to react to Night Spark how most people would during a war. They have every reason not to give him the benefit of the doubt as they did with others. Twilight's family and child hood friend were endangered by Chrysalis. Applejack just lost plenty of folks that she knew and plenty of good trees. How would American civilians treat innocent Japanese or Germans refugees or turned troops. I would assume not very nice. Of course some people give the benefit of the doubt....people like Derpy....we need more derpy in the world....muffins.... lol

3698855 WAS IT A BLUEBERRY MUFFIN?! those are my favorite......:derpytongue2:

3699164 I think you may be right. Although what I hope to show in upcoming chapters is that you can respect someone you do not like. As far as Miss Doo goes? Well....I just don't know what might happen! :derpytongue2::heart:

3704783 Welcome TO THE MOOOOOOONNNNN!!!!! Would you like a Moon burger with thousand years sauce? Maybe a Frozen elements shake? NightMare tots? lol

Luna fries with a frozen elements shake loyalty flavor to go please.

3738065 Your comment? Best thing so far this new year. Thank you very much for your kind words. :derpytongue2:

WOW! this is one of the first stories that happened to catch my eye on this website so far, and its pretty awesome! how you juggle the serious moments and then take a break to have a little holiday fun was great. i really hope you continue this story, and maybe derpy can finally have a romantic connection with someone? :raritywink: Looking forward to the next chapter for sure! :pinkiesmile:

3756209 Sorry for the late reply. Thanks so much for the kind words. I am happy you enjoyed it! :derpytongue2:

Okay, wow. I'm seriously eating this up right now. The characterization seems pretty good to me, and the whole story has really picked up since it started. It took a little bit, but now it's got a great groove going. I don't even remember how I discovered this, but I'm glad that I did. I can't wait to see where this goes next, and I'm really liking Night Spark.

2:00AM gets up groggy and tired and signs on to fimfiction.net
2:01AM notices update for story, instantly wakes up.

Yeah I have to agree with the few others, This chapter had so much more character development for Night Spark. Its like every chapter you put out we learn something new about his feelings/personality and power. really really good. I speak for myself and Big Mac when I say Eeyup. :eeyup: You've been doing a really great job my friend!

Lol cant wait to see what happens next.

3779201 Thank you very much. I don't know how you stumbled across it either but your comments always push me write more. :derpytongue2:

3780220 Darn I am sorry for waking you up...lol. :derpytongue2:

3780992 :pinkiesad2: Don't worry while tragedy and war are going to pick up I still plan to throw in a good amount of happy stuff....and by happy I mean muffins. :derpytongue2:

3781499 Thanks man! The development will continue to flourish for Night Spark. He is far from being completely "known" if that makes sense. I can't wait to start developing others like Twilight and Derpy. :twilightsmile:

I also have a Discord chapter in the works. I am not sure when I will post it as it is something I go to when I have a little writers block...strangely typing for him is like breathing.:trollestia:

3790719 And I will continue to support you as you have supported me. :rainbowwild:

I look forward to the next thing you post! I think it'll be super sweet. :twistnerd:

nice new picture by the way... it is quite cool. Spike's mustache once again approves :moustache:


3790732 Bittersweet hmmm? well.... um.... I guess we will see... :trollestia:

Oh and THANK YOU!!! I spent quite a bit of time making that picture!!! That background is something cool google gave me and that is Night Spark with Rainbows Wings. I think he likes them better than his own...:derpytongue2:

Hmm... this is good. That fact the first chapter actually gives me the fire to going is a good thing. So I will favorite this. You also have my upvote. The dialog and pace I think was great by the way.

3790824 Thank you very much friend!!! :twilightsmile:

I am glad you enjoyed it! :derpytongue2:

Awesome! It came out great! Glad I can help bud. I look forward to assisting you with the next chapter! :pinkiehappy:

You forgot the changeling tag

3858362 I had to put the other tags first because while my OC is a changeling most the story is going to be from his perspective which will be around ponies more than changelings...I like you avatar btw....lol Night Spark's brother looks very similar! :derpytongue2:

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