Hello, everypony! My name is Silver Rose. I'm new at writing MLP fanfiction, but not new at writing altogether ;) I mostly write stories that involve diapers, so please be aware of that.
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After a scooter injury leaves Scootaloo physically disabled and incontinent, Diamond Tiara takes her bullying too far. Though it's not anything new, it's the last straw for Cheerilee. Since punishment isn't doing anything for the filly bully, she tries a lesson in empathy instead, putting Diamond Tiara in Scootaloo's hooves for a few days, but will either of them be prepared for the consequences? (warning: diapers and some diaper usage - nothing graphic or sexual, some bullying)
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FIRST!! All jokes aside, this story looks good. I didn't notice any grammar/ spelling/ punctuation errors. One thing though. Instead of just typing thoughts in normal font, put them in italics. This makes the thoughts much more distinguishable in the long run. I wish you the best of luck with this story!
~OG. .-:`
God, I despise DT, but this seems very interesting.
Do keep going!
Not bad. Not bad at all! I could hardly even tell that this was your first story. Good job!
EMPATHY, EMPATHY, PUT YOURSELF IN THE PLACE OF ME!
Hmmm, intriguing. Go on.
The flow was amazing and the setup was great can't wait for more!
Not bad, looking forward to seeing Diamond Tiara learn her lesson.
Very good can't wait for more and to see what they will do to DT.
(evil grin) the scribe finds this story most enjoyable indeed
I enjoy any story that has Diamond Tiara stop being a bitch and brat.
Its a nice story, can't wait to see the next chapter.
I'll keep an eye on this for now.
There are some errors here and there, so you should probably work with an experienced prereader.
You're right in saying that Diamond Tiara isn't very popular, but as long as you're making her suffer, it's fine by me.
Oh shit... ya know what I would've done?
Thrown her in a closet for 2 days without food or water
HA! Take that, Diamond Twit!
Awesome chapter and even awesomer punishment! 
To Applebloom and Sweetie Belle I say this. You think it's funny right now but think about the last pony who wore diapers and now picture her in Diamond Tiara's position will you stoop that low and make fun of her or will you be bigger and move on from such petty insults.
Diamond Tiara you're a fool to accept that bet, karma will see to it that you fail. Or some classmate will decide they don't care about the punishment and target you. You can't win.
well loyalty means nothing to Silver Spoon.
Diamond is going to lose that bet. Now for first impressions...
I don't like it. And no, I'm not pull the "I LOVE IT" card. I've been building my views on what makes a good fanfiction in this fandom, and one of those thing is a majority of writers can't, or don't know how to, write good original characters. Loving Care is not that interesting. If she's the one involved in this little prank, I expected her to have some personality to go with whatever role you want to give her. You need to invest some characteristics into this pony because I don't read stories for blank slates.
Also, the premise. I'm probably the only person who finds the idea of Diamond bullied in this situation morbid! If this is supposed to be am eye for an eye story, then you're being cruel to the ponies! Diamond Tiara is many things..... Hahahaha, I can't believe I just said that!
She's callous, but she's not malicious! Also, Filthy Rich was to quick to agree with Cheerilee's methods (and oh god! Her methods! 
) That's not bad parenting on Filthy's part. That's cruelty! I just... I have no supporting comments for this. I want to offer alternatives to help you build a better story, but... 
:shudder:
And before anyone pulls the "it's fan made work! Cut it done slack!" I see fanfictions as a loving tribute to what it represents. My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic centers around morality, good will and friendship. First time or not, take my words however you want, but don't let it discourage you to stop writing fanfictions. You haven't done anything terrible. I've just been notoriously nitpicky!
Will keep in touch. Favorites and accepting updates.
4618713 Considering how Diamond Tiara has been treating her in Season 4 Silver Spoon probably learned it from her, that or she's trying to save face after rating out Diamond Tiara the previous day. She doesn't want to admit she cares about other ponies feelings.
4618713 Caper, she learned the best.
4619418 Tepid Phantom, thank you very much for your thought-out criticism of my story. Amidst all the platitudes, it can be good to get a constructive negative response to keep my ego down to earth. I'm not entirely sure if I'm going to do anything more with Loving Care. She was necessary to kick off Diamond Tiara's punishment, but little else. This is not her story either, it's Diamond Tiara's.
Speaking of Diamond Tiara, I am glad - I repeat, GLAD - that you are upset about the prospect of this story being a "let's watch Diamond Tiara get what she deserves and feel good about it" story. I can be very harsh to characters, but one thing I am not is unnecessarily cruel. Diamond Tiara's reactions come from a place of she's always been on top so she doesn't know how to handle it when she feels she might slip. No matter what anyone says, she feels she's lost everything. Truthfully, I feel incredibly sorry for her, but redemption does not come without a price. As for the harshness of the punishment... well, I said in my bio I primarily write stories about ponies in diapers. I wanted to write a story where Diamond Tiara was punished by putting her in a diaper. Regardless of how you feel about if there was an alternative, of course there was, but I wouldn't have been interested in writing it under the possibility of a different punishment.
I think you will be surprised how this ends up though. This story is not coming from a place of hate or vengeance. I chose Diamond Tiara because she has been portrayed as a little bully for the entire series. I wanted to explore why she's a bully, what drives her, what would make her consider a different path - really take a fresh layered look at a character that is all but a walking foil at this point in canon. However, the story has to start somewhere.
4619554 SuperPinkBrony12, I'm actually still trying to sort out what I'm going to do with Silver Spoon. She treated Diamond Tiara like she did in Chapter 2 for a few reasons, some of which I will elaborate more on in the story, but having been the one closest to her and having been the one who Diamond Tiara rubbed off the most on, even more than the CMC I want her to struggle between being "eye for an eye" actions and being a bigger pony.
Wow, so Diamond's mom is dead....well, you punched me in the personal feels, congrats.
Anyhoof, in my Catholic Elememtary/Middle school, Saint John Vianney, we went on a retreat near the end of our 8th grade year. I can't remember the name, but it was gorgeous.
Good story. But I think you're making Scootaloo too kind. Even though they are sort of in the "same boat". I already know that bullies are just like everyone else and are a victim of circumstance but this is a very interesting take on Diamond's back story. Keep it up! And also I can't wait to see what will happen next.
HEARING SILVER SPOON SAY THOSE THINGS TO HER?
Her only friend?
I think it would be a knife in the gut.
Does Diamond Tiara DESERVE this punishment? Yes. Does she NEED IT to get it through her head her actions have consequences? YES. But it's correct to say that being bullied herself WON'T likely teach her any lessons.
“I don’t have any friends who are foals, especially not you, Diapered Tiara,”
Diamond Tiara may be a spoiled bully, but I think those words being said by Silver Spoon would kill her.
A part of me thought for a second that Silver Spoon was TRYING to get the same punishment as Diamond Tiara.
4622872
">> Caper Caper, she learned the best."
When was the last time Diamond Tiara betrayed Silver Spoon?
The fact neither Diamond Tiara's father nor mother were at her cutie mark party IMHO is not a good sign.
when i started reading this story i thought YESS YESS someone is actually make DT Have some payback for what she has done to the CMC when after i read this chapter i feel I FEEL BAD FOR HER for what has happened to her and this story makes me relate to her i had a two friends and one tried to kick me out of being friends with either and basically stabbed me in the back the next year they both moved away i haven't seen them since so i fell bad for the character that bully's some of my favorite ponies and i was bullied and i relate to the cmc so wow this story gives me feels
Well Diamond Tiara, at least now you're starting to learn your lesson. See that you don't slip up again.
As for Silver Spoon, well now Diamond Tiara knows what it's like to be on the recieving end of torment.
I like were this story is headed and diamond tiara getting to learn a lesson is always good
I enjoy where you're going with this but my only problem is that Scoots is waaaaaaay too caring for DT, in the end the little brat does deserve at least some of this.
4631529 Indeed. After everything she's done she deserves at the very least to see how her actions and words feel when she's on the recieving end. If she can't take what she can dish out, then hopefully she'll understand why such things are wrong.
Love this story ^^ cant wait for next chapter ^^
4624996 oh shut up scootaloo is not being too kind she doing the right thing because DT does deserve it but she doesn't deserve to get bullyed by everyone
diamond tiara or should this one say pffftpffpttttpppf diapered tiara
You deserve this punishment
(Grins menacingly)
I have read your comment dear writer,
About breaking you down and building you back up. I to have been through a very
similar scenario to what scoots is going through. I damaged my nervous system
Quite badly and could not feel anything below my rib cage. Demeaning me to, yes diapers it hurt on the inside. I was confined to a wheel chair for TWO YEARS
However, one kid Terrance pushed it over the line,
He started kicking my shins which I couldn't feel.
I was so pissed off (note it was nerve damage not spinal damage)
I stood up to him, literally and I punched him so hard his nose and jaw broke,
I got two week suspension. But I won that day,
My doctor even says I might get som feeling back in my legs but it's unlikely.
But the point is, I won, me the little weak kid that couldn't do anything, but it was worth it.
O dayum. That's long
Okay okay, everyone is just thinking DT deservers this beasue she a bithc and bullies the CMC, excuse me have you ever seen bullies in real life. Just cause they bully dosn't make them any less human(or in this case pony) It's not knocking a character down a knotch just to feel better for yourself if you can make a story of redemtion and her learning her lesson. People who think scoots should be mean are so, SO wrong.
Silver Spoon turning on Tira was at least logical, she was the sheep, and now she the wolf
keep this rolling,keep this rolling i love this!!
for your first story it's really, really good.
One thing that strikes me is that Cheerilee never gave DT a lecture. After all lectures are what makes discipline.
I really feel for DT. It can hurt so deeply to be so alone. That was something Scootaloo never was, the CMC always kept supporting her.
I again feel like Cheerilee should be lecturing DT more. Asking her more questions about the day and force her to really think carefully about what she is feeling and why.
btw:
have you read the story 'bringing up blueblood'? I think you'll like it. It's very similar to your story but of a higher level.
Hey, that's the same name and premise as one of my Fanfics.
Nice one.
I really really feel bad for DT. As much as I don't care for her, I am having major feelings for her. In my 4th grade class we had a student that had to have a portion of her small intestine removed and was subsequently in a diaper when she was able to come back to class, she was one of my best friends. so this story hits me right in the feels. i feel i need to say thank you.
As much as I hate this character, I can't deny the fact that I think she would look adorable in diapers. Looking forward to more!
What I find funny is that Diamond Tiara's backstory (a workaholic, neglectful father and a dead mother) is the same backstory as used in "Pen Pals." Considering that her father has made multiple appearances and her mother hasn't, drawing this conclusion about Diamond Tiara's home life shouldn't be too surprising. It's probably very common.
Your first showing is a solid work without much in the way of typos, and a browse of your comments reveals you're someone actually open to criticism and is actively trying to improve their craft, a rare set of traits in this little padded niche of ours. Colour me interested, both for this story and yourself as a writer.
If you care to talk trade, feel free to note me for my Skype name (I try to keep it secret to avoid those who dislike my harsher-than-normal critiques). I'm also part of a semi-large group of accomplished padded pony artists and writers, if you're interested in a semi-exclusive group to discuss your work amongst equals.
In spite of it's odd premise, this is a very character driven piece. And does force Diamond to grow up. Even if at first she needs to be broken down.
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