Ever since he had left Twilight at the wedding rehearsal, Spike had wondered if he should still be Twilight's assistant. However, with the help of Rarity, he plucks up the courage to tell Twilight about his feelings.
*Special thanks to YodaJax10 for his contributions.
This really needs some work a lot of parts read like they are out of chronological order like Spike seeing Rarity running to him and deciding to confess his feelings BEFORE he sees her and is surprised to see her.
Quite good story.
It's "Hope to fly".
There's a whole chunk of the story missing in this section. At the very least, one paragraph.
RARITY! THE WORDS ARE 'Hope to fly' NOT 'Hope to die'! Anyways, I loved the story!
WRONG! That is not a Pinkie Promise! That is a shameful excuse for a Pinkie Promise (The only reason that I am being so harsh about this is because there are plenty of examples of Pinkie Promises being said in the episode Green Really Isn't Your Color, and it is also said in the episode, The Last Roundup, and it is also said in the episode Princess Twilight Sparkle - Part 1, Pinkie Pride)! HERE IS A PINKIE PROMISE!:
"Cross my heart, hope to fly stick a cupcake in my eye." SLIGHT DIFFERENCE THERE!
5509319 That has been an error I have been meaning to correct. Sorry about that, its all fixed now.
Well, the story is okay, but there were a few things that rubbed me the wrong way. For ex.
Not.true.at.all. All of the mane six care about Spike. Fluttershy thinks he is adorable and interesting, Applejack always shows concern for him whenever he is in trouble or acting up, Pinkie Pie likes everypony and actually considers Spike one of her best friends, and Rainbow Dash considers him a 'cool' dragon.
So that small thing bothered me... As well as Spike calling Twilight mom.
No. Just, no.
Other than those there were a few grammar errors and seemingly missing sections of paragraphs, but overall it can still get a decent rating from me.
7 out of 10 for Sad
10 out of 10 for Slice of Life
6 out of 10 for grammar
7 out of 10 for overall story.
Still worth a like.
Aww, how sweet.
Great read sad but great
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I had to reread at least four times to make sure my eyes weren’t playing tricks on me