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Hurray, a sequel.

Slightly related.
So as soon as Zed heard this existed he decided to do a dramatic reading since last night he did one with some other people from the LoHAV group on the Kettle story. They didn't seem to think the story was bad or anything and just inserted random jokes during it.

So congrats on making something interesting enough people already want to do a reading of it. I think. Not really sure if that's good or bad with them, and I was the one recording that clusterfuck of a reading last night. Kind of hard to tell.

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BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

Best Sequel ever! I can't wait for the wedding.

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The reading of Kettle was fun. And slightly insane.

I really, really hope that you remember to publish it to youtube. Seeing as we completely fucked up every other sentence, it ought to be good.

4119181 Zed needs to get his sister to edit it all together. Or something. I could also just put it up on media fire.

I've never cried at weddings before but if you do add a wedding scene I might cry from laughing.:rainbowlaugh:

4119337 I've been having writer's block, but I'm working on it.

4119703 This DIscord is best DIscord. Freaky, humanized, M. Bison Discord. :pinkiecrazy:

Thank you for your submission, I appreciate the effort :twilightsmile:

One personal critique I'd like to make is your paragraphing. In my opinion it's so much harder to read a story when all the paragraphs have no spacing between them, I just end up getting lost. Of course this is more of a personal preference than anything :twilightsheepish:

Good story all in all, the results of the contest might take a little while to come out though (obviously the lack of thread notifications is a problem, but we'll try to find a way around it)

“She’s marrying Nightmare-Moon.” Twilight said, sounding like she didn’t believe the words coming out of her mouth.
Her friends were silent for a time, before Applejack said, “Want to run that one by us again, Sugarcube?”

oh you'd beater make that story

4120077 For the sake of wanting my story to win, I'll change it to double spacing.

For you...(See profile pic) ~:heart:

4120250 While I am opposed to domestic violence, I'll continue the story anyway.

:trollestia:

10/10 would read again

The lunar princess promptly sprayed her mouthful of tea forward in a rather spectacular display. Later historians would credit it as the third best spit take after the one Shining Armor did upon finding out about his illegitimate daughter and the one Applejack did upon Granny Smith announcing she was pregnant.

I'm VERY tempted to throw my mouse at a random Walmart shopper's head.

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The lunar princess promptly sprayed her mouthful of tea forward in a rather spectacular display. Later historians would credit it as the third best spit take after the one Shining Armor did upon finding out about his illegitimate daughter and the one Applejack did upon Granny Smith announcing she was pregnant.

PLEASE tell me that you're not implying what this sentence seems like to be.

Hey man, I think you messed up you image source. It just redirects to your story again.

A threequel? This is happening. This. Is. Happening. The six are going to have themselves a time at this wedding.

Borg #28 · Mar 23rd, 2014 · · 1 ·

I believe you mean "Foaly Matripony."
One should never go halfway on puns.

Oh this is delicious :rainbowkiss:

This story is.... It is awsome! How bîgs the cake gunna be?:trollestia:

4121880 Nice. But now I'm thinking that after a sequel with the wedding itself, there should be one where Tia and NMM discuss having foals. Maybe prompted by something the Main 6 says at the wedding? Except that Celestia determined to have kids makes a frightening mental image...

4122493 the size OF A PLANET...

#Fat-lestia

“She’s marrying Nightmare-Moon.” Twilight said, sounding like she didn’t believe the words coming out of her mouth.

Her friends were silent for a time, before Applejack said, “Want to run that one by us again, Sugarcube?”

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4122596 oh. Gawd. Why am i very afraid of that? C and nmm ofspring

4121250 jayveesmirf.files.wordpress.com/2011/05/woooo.gif

4121537 Working on it.:twilightsheepish:

4121559 Unfortunately no. The other sequel as been officially discontinued.
Sorry.:fluttershysad:

4121880 As you command, sir/madam/whatwouldyoucalltheoneinthemiddle? !

4122284 Sinfully so.:raritywink:

4122384 :fluttercry:

4122493 We are currently inventing a new scale of measurement to measure it.

4122596 Lesbians having kids?:trixieshiftleft:
The clop just writes itself!
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4122599 Hmmmmm....:trixieshiftright:

4122653 I love it when people quote my story!:yay:

4122740 ITs either done with the same spellused to make pip and lightning child lilly, or adoption

4122727 I meant using a futa spell or something... That picture always freaks me out. It implies disturbing things. :applejackconfused:

Seriously though, if you continue this series I would like to see a story about that.

4122755 and that story is still in the works

You just have to write the "breaking the news" story.
:twilightoops:...........
:ajbemused:The princess is a lesbian, and is marrying Nightmare Moon... Huh.
:twilightangry2:Are you implying there's something wrong with that?!
:ajbemused:No, I don't wanna think about her sex life at all!

Found something you may want to edit.

The sun was warm her flank and the chatter of her friends was strangely relaxing.

That should be either "warming" or "warm on".

4122727 Yeah, I saw that, but that was a different sequel. I'm talking about a threequel about the wedding, and the mane six's reactions. Maybe even a (fourquel? What?) sequel to that as well portraying the honeymoon? Please?

Celestia + Nightmare Moon =
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Their possible child may looks like.

So....Granmy Smoth is pregnant..,,,this needs some clarification. :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright: AppleSmith? :moustache:

Twilight raised an eyebrow as she snatched up the scroll with her magic. “Huh, that’s weird. The Princess keeps sending me mail using everything but Spike.” as she pulled the red string off the scroll, Twilight looked around. “Where is Spike, anyhow?”

The other five ponies collectively shrugged, Rarity whistling as she fanned her face, trying to make the red go away.

I'm surprised that no one has commented on this yet. :trollestia:

4123099 Will do.
...Right after I fix this writer's block.:twilightsheepish:

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Celestia: "I have strange and conflicting feelings."
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4123187 AppleSmith? As in....
:twilightoops:
WHAT!? NO!

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