Cancelled: Who are my characters again?
Heart and mind make the soul come alive. Too little of one, and you'll be blind. Too little of the other, and you wont care.
Two unbalanced sisters are torn directly from the mind and thrust into a new world. With their strength now touching reality, will they manage to keep from destroying everything close to them? Will they be able to keep from destroying themselves?
(Yes, this is a LoHaV/H story. It's not a crossover though because I don't find many characters interesting. If you find that my characters are exactly like some manga or book or something, then please send me a link.)
Chapters (3)
Nightmare Moon should be glad none of my OCs are in her universe, they all share my hatred for puns. So naturally she would have her ass handed to her on a twelve dimensional silver platter the moment the Anti-Pun showed up.
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Twelve-dimenstional? I'm sure she'd get clocked!
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Can't get it to start at the point I want so just skip to 48 seconds in. *Le sigh*
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I'm... I'm confused.
Are you calling me slender, or are you implying that you want to punch me in the balls? Because one is a pretty flimsy threat, and the other is a slim, but appreciated compliment.
Loved the video though.
4469983 No, it's a metaphysical representation of a fifth of the power the Anti-Punch carries in his strikes. And he doesn't fly at you, he teleport punches you in the throat.
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Whoa now, one punch for every finger? this is getting completely out of hand. There's no need for violence.
Get it? Hand!? Ah, sometimes my own jokes just leave me breathless.
4470092 Oh Gods! I can't take this kinda of pun-ishment!
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Ha! Now you're doing it too!
The pun has been doubled!
4470104 Never iterated on the type of puns I hate. Which are bad puns, I was merely useless a crap and tasteless pun, like you were. Nightmare Moon uses terrible puns and must be purged from existence.
I feel like she's a bit OP and I understand what you mean about twi. Maybe not the reforming the body thing, but still, I digress. Anyway, the first section was way too fast. The second booth he visits is the one that sends him there. Not to mention we're kinda just thrown into this guys life. Maybe some background would help. Character development would also be nice. I see mind as a cold calculating machine who's top priority is herself. She will do whatever it takes, as long as its most beneficial to her. I saw heart as a ditzy girl that was always having fun and making others happy and whatnot. Then she yelled SOB and I laughed a little. I then saw her as a more mature ditzy girl... Not much change I guess. And Fiji... Just Fiji... Who da hell is dis guy? We literally see, like, eight paragraphs with him in it. Then he's just done. Gone. And we're left to wonder what happened to him after Dissy left to fight Moon Butt.
Of course I haven't read chapter two and I don't know what you mean by LoHaV/H so that might be part of it. Sleep deprivation and hunger might be the other part. Not sure.
Other than that, this was well written and the story is well written. I like the part of people in his head and the fact that Dissy's involved, because seriously, when is he not?
Can't wait to read the next chapter, so I won't!!
Golden Script.
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Yay, a review!
And don't worry about Fuji, he found a nice life with the ponies and made plenty of comics for them. Probably. Hey, maybe he's where the enchanted comic books came from! (Oh that is definitely happening...)
But yeah, I meant to put in an "I miss Fuji" comment somewhere by Heart, but so much stuff was happening and I wanted to get the story started. I do have a problem with pacing and sometimes things go too fast. My stories work better when I have an editor to tell me what needs filling in, but that takes much more time.
Anyway, thanks for the review!
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Oh come now, it's all in good pun. However unsavory you might find it, I'm sure no one deserves to not exist, because they already don't. Somepony, on the other hoof, might need to stopped because she's a bit unstable, but I don't think Celestia would like it if Luna was no longer there to moon the night. She might burn like the sun in her rage, and then what would you do? The tongues of her flames would lap at your hand if you got too close. In other words, you'd get licked.
4470148 It's called a blackhole, she should know about them, she has the same mass as one.
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Now that idea just sucks.
If she had the same mass as a black hole, she wouldn't just know about them, she would be one of them. No matter what you do at that point, the situation around you can only suck more; the black holes would just combine to form larger holes.
4470163 It was a joke, I was calling her fat.
Again. A bit rushed. We don't see any of the actual interaction of the ponies and humans. We're just told that they make peace after some persuasion. Also, I don't see NMM as being a punny type of pony, though the punny pony pwned the powerful people. I know, I suck at this, no need to tell me. And I think that celestia shouldn't be able to hear them or it pretty much defeats the purpose of the punishment. Perplexing perpetual petrification punishment is pointless, seeing as they can still entertain themselves.
*reads last sentence*
God, I hate myself sometimes.
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This is the definition of sleep deprivation. I am so sorry.
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Oh, Celestia can't hear them, she was just making up their responses in her mind. Perhaps I should make that more obvious. And Heart and Mind are still stuck mostly by themselves, any 'intelligent' life they created would just be a shadow from their memories.
Otherwise, this was mostly meant as a quick introduction to pique interest for when they broke out. Have I piqued things?
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Don't worry about it, we all get to be silly with our words some time. Heck, just look at the rest of this comment section!
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Ooh, that's a cutting remark. Subcutaneous, even.
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And now I changed it. Hopefully it should be more obvious that Celestia is just crazy with loneliness now.
...I kind of feel bad for her...
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Lol. Nice. And yes you peaked my interest. Definately one of the stories I'm looking foreword to.
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Soo much death!
But what else would a person do given a thousand years? If they really just stared outside for that length of time their brain would literally shrink. So however strange or unrealistic the fantasies of those two, they needed them to survive. And whatever they decided on would leave its marks.
Seems legit.
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I wonder how much, actually.
I know I'd have some pretty crazy fantasies after a thousand years with one other person.
4479323 I'd have probably cured every disease ever, invented faster than light travel, teleporters, matter synthesizers, and immortality. And that's just the first hundred years.
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Well, folding all the proteins is most of curing all genetic diseases and making immortality, and she kind of is a matter synthesizer. Otherwise, we don't know if the others are possible. (The gravity synthesizer is possible though, it just takes a lot of energy and requires a material that can reflect certain frequencies very well. Look up optical-tweezers, they're currently used for levitating and studying some bacteria I think.)
4479490 Faster than light is wholly possible, you just need to affect a mass negation field and use some sort of overcharged acceleration device. Or you could use wormholes and trolololol your way through the stars, quite literally.
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Actually, I read up on the research on FTL travel.
The current theoretical method relies on taking advantage of Einstein's equations and bending space, making a valley in front of you and a hill behind you using a black hole and a material that expands space. That way you would stay in the same place. However, it may be impossible to get the black hole and the matter behind the ship to move faster than light. And then, you'd have to rely on the black hole dissipating to stop or the matter behind you decaying. Though I suppose if you wanted to stop, you could just destroy your back and let your black hole fly off in front of you.
And I'm not sure if wormholes are even science anymore. They rely on space being not-flat, which may not be the case, and even if they did exist, they're probably even harder to handle than the previous method. (I believe they'd attract to gravity wells, and a bunch of planets and stuff would clog up the center of the tunnels.)
Mass negation wouldn't work though. Light doesn't have mass, and it still only travels as fast as light. The problem there is that things gain energy with momentum as well as mass, via Einstein's (full) energy equation.
4479532 Isolation from the Higgs field says otherwise. Though if tachyons are proven to exist, then the utilisation of them to tear holes in space-time should be possible, otherwise tunneling through to another dimension with a size difference ratio of ten trillion to one for here to there, which would mean you're travelling the same relative velocity as you would be in our dimension, but are covering more ground. Conversely, you could just compress the region of space between you and your target and fly through that, but that's a whole level of quantum physics I am not going to be bothered to discuss.
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...I might appear a bit rude here, but I get the feeling you don't know the physics behind a lot of what you're saying.
I have no idea what you're referring to when you say 'isolation from the Higgs field.' Do you mean that since gravity is particle based because of the Higgs boson, which can't travel FTL, the first method of FTL travel I mentioned shouldn't be possible? If so, that seems like a pretty valid rebuttal to that theory.
But compressing space doesn't have anything to do with quantum physics. It was actually what I was talking about with the first method of FTL I mentioned. Quantum physics has to do with quanta, and how particles have a probability field of states to be in at any given time, instead of moving between anything. Think: state machine.
And I this can't logic even how: "if tachyons are proven to exist, then the utilisation of them to tear holes in space-time should be possible." If I buy a motorcycle, the president could use it to fly to Mars.
Otherwise, travelling to other dimensions necessitates getting there in the first place.
4479614 Only read the first sentence, but you are absolutely right. I have been forced into doing ridiculous amounts of schoolwork by my mum that I don't even understand half of. The rest I got from Sci-Fi and wikipedia.
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Ooh... You shouldn't be doing work if you don't understand it... That's just a way to learn to hate the work and make it repetitious. Some concepts taught in school, like math, are literally just other languages, and other concepts, like chemistry, history, and art, just require a lot of memorization. All you need is the method of loci and a math game (like what Khan Academy has turned into), then all of the work should be easy.
I used to major in Physics before I switched to CS though, and I still cringe when I hear sci-fi explanations like yours. It... well, it just doesn't sound good to someone who's read the science articles on the concepts. And I've come across some sites that try to sell concepts with no backing in reality...
4480867 I'm good at maths, it's just having someone force you into doing something is not the best way to make a person like it. Which is why I intend to drop all my science subjects the moment I can. I'm fine with economics, accounting and legal studies.