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A friend notices Applejack acting odd and calls her out on it. With that prodding, our honest earth pony manages to cough up the truth to Twilight and is shocked when she is eager to try out being more than friends. Knowing they cannot put telling the others that are important to them, Applejack and Twilight are quick to make the rounds and things mostly go smoothly. In the end, things look bright for everyone.
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I want to read it, I do. The thing is, it's so long that it's putting me off. What's wrong with just putting each chapter in, well, its own chapter?
Now, that I liked...
Very brave to publish the whole story in one chapter though... Have to agree with SugarPesticide on this one - Would have been easier to read if it were separated!
Favourited and Liked.
ImmortalScientist out.
All of my d'awwws, a thumb, and a watch is coming your way.
I'm certainly favoriting this, but it took me a good 30+ minutes to wrestle down this monster of a story, I suggest you do what SugarPesticide said. I was also about to comment on how you claimed Twilight was an only child but you posted that this was written in 2011.
I'm assuming you wrote this story for a different site entirely and didn't bother to chop it up into completely different chapters. You may want to do that.
Now this is a cute story. I feel that there should be more to the story though. I would like to see the talks they would have with their families and maybe even the princess. Still a great story though.
In terms of a shipping fic, that was amazing. So many fics are like, "I love you Pinkie", then "I love you too", ending up being completely generic and unoriginal. This one however, took the basic plot, but made it interesting.
FAVORITE
Read it. It was great! Good Job!
Great story, even if the word count was somewhat daunting
This was really cute.
Can't wait to see if there's more.
Good read so far, not entirely done as I have to read in bits and pieces. I apologize if this gets explained later, but what's up with AJ's parents? It seems like there's a whole lot of contradictions. Are they in Ponyville, or away with AJ's grandfather? There's lines where they're talking to her or looking at her, and others where AJ and AB are missing them. What's going on with them?
Edit: Nevermind. Some of how it was phrased made it awkward and a bit confusing, but got to a point that cleared it up.
Poor Dashie
This was really good. Some minor errors but nothing major. I love it
That...was a treat! Not gonna lie...this is one of the best shipping stories I've come across (certainly the best AppleSparkle story). It didn't feel rushed and it just made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside!
I burst out laughing at pinkie's "You can do that!?!" line 
I really hope that there is more to come based on that For now... line at the end! Faved! FAVED WITH AVENGENCE!!!! 
"Rarity or any of those snooty ponies that sneer at me and mine. "
I just thought I'd point out that this line really sticks out as a kind of weird jab against Rarity; Rarity doesn't really seem to sneer at anypony, especially not the apples. Just a bad choice of word, I think.
“Ah know. And Pa’s gonna have kittens when ah tell him.”
Lol'd
Final Summation;
Bwilliant! I liked the whole thing, which is unexpected since I am hardly an AppleLight fan; just goes to show you did a great job!
Overall this is a decent story, though I felt the wording was clunky at times. I think the problem has to do with the fact that the entire story is written in present tense, which I don't think fits this type of story well. The relationship also progressed too quickly, with Twilight going from no romantic feelings to hopelessly in love in two dates. It just feels like there should have been more development. Perhaps a bit more development in that area could make this a great story.
I'm going to be the odd pony out and say that I like the giant chapter. I would say, however, that I think there is a definite opportunity to continue this tale in subsequent chapters. Now that they are together, how about focusing on them solving relationship troubles together? Or facing their families? I thought that we'd at least see Applejack's father's and Big Mac's reaction, but that thread just sort of vanished.
Still, you got a thumbs up from me.
All my d'awws. You may have them.
AWSOME! story I love it.
Mmm, I see you split it up into seperate chapters.
oh rarity you devious mare you
380406 There's a sequel waiting in queue. Hope you like it!
382683 Thank you! The sequel is up where I get more in depth with them.
i just noticed but mare-lovers is the offensive term? i though this was the clean term and fillyfooler is the offensive one ...
390112 You may be right, I don't know all the fandom lingo!
Need sequel now. Anyway, very nice. Now we just have to wait for all the big family reactions. From Princess on down to big brothers. Bring it on!
Very nice start. But I need some sleep, little though it is, so I shall have to finish in the morning. Till then
Thumbs up!
Oh, and I just noticed this "a most pony of friendly kisses". Type-o, or were you intentionally making that the most adorable thing ever?
“ shaking her hoof, now adored” = adorned
Sorry, I decided to see if I could pick out problems, and your fic was open. TO THE NEXT CHAPTER
This was a wonderful read. I can't wait for the sequel.
my thumbs up, u haf it.
to finish the story or to sleep?
so i guess ill just have to finish it
A fun and well-written story, you've got a lot of talent for viewpoints and for voices- in the sense of the words that different ponies use as a preference.
Very nice, and quite enjoyable.
Epilogue*
Gets around to reading it, finally finishes, first thing:
I WANT MOAR! NAO!
Second: This is an amazing story, and I'd love a sequel
Wow...this is absolutely one of the better stories, i loved it, really.
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The sequel is up already y'know!
475665 YES
You have a very picturesque way of writing, it's lovely.
"With a brief touch of her nose to mine, a most pony of friendly kisses, she turns away and takes a few steps up the stairs"
Do you mean "..the most pony of.." ? "a most pony", even by analogy to 'a most human', causes my brain to fail at parsing it.
Aaaaaaw Yeaaaah!
Also, first!
Good. Yes.
What is this mysterious sequel I hear of? Very good, ending seemed a little short, but obviously that will change with the sequel
This was a very cute story. It was interesting to read it in first person, and I think you succeeded. I thought it was funny how a few ponies had AppleDash on their minds, and how Applejack reacted each time. I look forward to the sequel.
This is one of the few stories where the Apple parents are alive and well. While it clashes with my headcanon, I like it--it adds an extra dimension to the story.
"All my life, ever since I started noticing the other fillies as more than just playmates or rivals, I’ve dreamed about this, dreamed about kissing a girl."
This line, sums up everything I want in a shipfic that doesn't revolve around the sexuality confusion.
She knows she likes fillies, she's not doing it on a whim or "I've never felt this way before."
And it's done in a very elegant way.
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Eh...I'm on the opposite side as you, I'm not a fan. It just...doesn't seem fitting to me. I find it odd reading those parts. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png
Aww dangit...I liked the story up until the could-have been Appledash...I love Appledash too much and now I'm sad Dash lost her chance dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_cry.png
683889 So do I for that matter, but it's a nice change-up from the heartbreak I usually get when reading about her family.
Each to their own.
Thanks to your writing i now diabetes.
Thank you for writing something so sweet
I'm sure I've read this somewhere else, but there was a bunch more chapters and it was still unfinished.