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I Am The Night
Mares are cute. They are also fluffy. I want to pet the pretty mares and give them snuggles.
I Am The Night
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I READ THIS ON FANFICTION!
i was also the one discussing sequels with you.
hopefully you can start them!
354684 I was a beginner Brony at the time this was being made. Had no Idea. Mah bad.
You've got a lot of randomly capitalized words, very simplistic grammar, pretty much no character backgrounds... "18 year old teen" is redundant. And why is he living on his own in an apartment at that age? He seems more like he'd be in his twenties.
His reaction to finding a (extremely clichéd) Portal To Equestria™ is pretty much nonexistent. It just happens. There could be a more interesting reaction, even if he is half-asleep, but he doesn't have any thoughts about it.
He has a thunder and ice cutie mark... Why? What special talent could that POSSIBLY indicate? It looks like you're not going to explain that, either.
I'm not fond of how you introduce scenes with the exact location, date, and time. It's weird. You typically see that in action movies where they get to put it across the street in green computer-y text. You could have just told us that he lives in New York, back when you gave him a backstory. Oh, right. You didn't do that.
Hey, the main character in my story is named John Daniels.
lol
354847 Yyyyeah...I'm really thinking of Remaking this story. I've been thinking about this for a very very very long time.
I did give him a backstory, In another story I will soon post. There will be more revealing of him.
The Lightning cutie mark allows him to control the lightning in clouds during storms and such. Mary-Sue, I know.
The Ice cutie mark allows him to freeze things. I was just a beginner brony at the time.
He's 18 and living in an apartment after his parents were killed in the 9/11 attacks...Wait...He does have a backstory. It explains it in chapter 5, I think. What chapter did you stop on?
354865 PARADOX!!
354931 Thanks, Mate. Also, This isn't my only story. I've got like, 10 other mlp stories. :D I'll be posting them soon.
Nice story dude, I have always wanted to write a MLP story before but I am not sure how to wright it. Well anyway this is a really good story so far, thanks for making it.
I can tell this was your first story. But that's cool, this was OK.
I have learned to like most stories, regardless or how well it is done.
354847
Asshole fanfic Nazi
bad punctuation and no like for you
The 9/11 reference made me laugh.
Edit: Never mind now its sad.
Okay..
static.tumblr.com/xrtgnw2/XFRlqvjy2/what_the_fuck_am_i_reading.jpg
When Twilight "came" along when he was about to commit suicide I completely lost interest in this story, like what the fuck is up with that shit.
"I had sex with your dying body."
"Oh don't worry about it."
(Wow, Dumb-Bell sure is an ass.)
You can say that again
355904
Yea that was a big WTF moment
And everyone was cool about it
355647
Because giving specific criticism and tips for improvement is exactly like the slaughter of millions and ruthless conquest of Europe?
The author already took my advice very well, which is good for him.
355904 Yyyyeah...I had no Idea what to do at this moment. I was thinking the same exact thing you are, Even though I made the story.
But, This isn't the first story I made. The new stories I made are actually better than this one.
356952 I'm happy now.
Romance
Blooms because balloons boom
355928
On top of that at the end you should add him getting his Ass kicked
Thunder opens up a nice fresh can of whoop-Ass
...Actually, Guys,... would be girls
im okay with this
This fic is non-generic, as much as I am not sarcastic.
372114 What?
I was inspired by you to make a HiE, but with a different take, instead of a Brony its a hater. So yeah HiE now means Hater in Equestria. I don't usually read clops but this has a good story line. I will score it when I finish it.
355904 Pic is win.
355102"
"i am not sure how to wright it."
"not sure how to wright it."
"to wright it."
"wright"
well that certainly displays a bright future for your fic.
420762 what?
Just remade chapter 2. Going to work on chapters 3-5 later. I'm gonna work on another chapter of my new story, Then hopefully, remake chapter 3 of this story.
im sorry but most of the second half i was thinking...Spike finally got Rarity wet
ya know cuz she hates anything that isnt clean
425078 Well, The water is clean. And, Rarity decided to actually be social with Spike, Since she knows his love for her, And...Ehhhh-it's confusing, Now.
426168 it was meant to be a bad innuendo...
You're bringing 9/11 into this....................................................
435300 I was idea-less at the time, And 9/11 came into my mind. I'll change that, so it ISNT 9/11.
Maybe a car crash.
354684 name others please i can't find them anywhere
The fish demands you torture Dumb bell........no loose ends muhahahahahahahahaha
but kill the bastard
That music... GOD DAMN MAN, NICE CHOICE.
450296 I'm thinking of doing that. I was working on that on my laptop that got fucked by a virus, so I'm gonna have to start over. The chapter will take place after TI, FS, TS have their threesome.
354847 It's like the Davinci Code! The capitalized words probably form a secret code of some sort...
why is it that the oicture of thunder is a pegasus but you write him as an earth pony?
this is the first "harem" fic I have seen on this site. i enjoyed every second, and i thank yo for the reading experience
460608
I'm stupid. I'll change it soon. 
463278 The biggest problem that'll present, though is that now you have to explain why he didn't try to fly from the cliff himself...
463680 Well, Thunder ORIGINALLY was a Pegasus, but I changed him to an Earth pony. Well, in my stories, he's not just one kind. He can be any kind; Pegasus, Unicorn, Earth Pony, hell, even an Alicorn.
In the story on fanfiction, he's a pegasus, but on here, he's an earth pony. I just have his picture of him as a pegasus to show him originally.
425078....wut?
with him still inside her-eew!
okay not too much eew
but still eew
Kewl! And this is one of the most disturbing stories I've read so far but that's what I get for choosing a M rated story
.
Pinkie made cupcakes...remind you of anything?
Dumb-Bell's the one who should get raped and murdered in Canterlot...
Hmmm...let me guess .....Fluttershy will learn all about this and make it worse for Thunder!
EPIC so sad it had to end...wait...sequel, oh yeah I forgot
Well, nothing else to say here...