Cross Hair, a grey unicorn stallion is badly injured in a Timber wolf encounter. He wakes up days later to find that he is being cared for by a yellow pegasus mare. What will happen when this hunter falls prey to his emotions? What is the secret he is keeping from his hostess and her friends and why does a certain purple dragon not trust him?
Fluttershy X O.C.
Why is a pony hunting in the first place...?
1908936 I'll explain later on.
1909029
Calling it now, he comes from a tribe of carnivorous ponies and is planning on eating Fluttershy.
Pretty good![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
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Please continue!
1909029 He's a Ghoul Hunter!![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
brb, reading...
EDIT: Here's some pointers:
You should put commas around names in dialogue. Like this:
Also this:
It's 'course' not 'coarse'
'Coarse' is an antonym to 'fine'
I have to agree with Cross, Fluttershy can be cute 24/7![:eeyup:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/eeyup.png)
Looks interesting, I'll definitely have to read it later![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Looks great! Can't wait for more!![:moustache:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/moustache.png)
1909035 LE GASP*![:pinkiegasp:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiegasp.png)
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I WOULD NEVER TO THAT TO FLUTTERSHY! Jut the thought of that makes me
You'll see in the next chapter!
Sweet, looking good so far! Well, it's only the first chapter; but nevertheless I am looking forward to future chapters!
Kawai!!!!!!!!!!!!
X9000
Read Bio..first thing i said: SICK NAME!!
Hahahaha ahoy matey, second fave oc design aside from Beat
And then, Fluttershy was Russian.![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
(No offense to Russians.)
I love this story.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Please MOAR!!!!![:flutterrage:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/flutterrage.png)
A pet wold? Already on to the AWESOMENESS![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)
So...his best friend's a wolf?....Awesome!
and what competition?
still never get tired of your work, mate, practically your fics are the only ones i wanna spend my tim with
and Spike is just being a dick now, he hates Cross, he hates Shield WTB, Spike?!
1926044 Shield is a cop with a sketchy past that Rarity has a crush on.![:duck:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/duck.png)
(I'll explain why Spike is suspicious of him in future chapters)![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)
Cross is a badass hunter.
Till then :
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I wish I could hear Fluttershy's tummy rumbling.
1928922 Don't we all?![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
I wonder what this competiton is?![:trixieshiftright:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trixieshiftright.png)
1929012 You'll see
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YEA DOVAHSHY
And Cross Hair (I call him another dragonborn) Tag team in dragon battling![:rainbowdetermined2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowdetermined2.png)
Another great chapter !
1940228 Oh, look. I'm walking down this path, there is NO WAY a dragon is just going to- *dragon swoops down* OMG RUN, RUN!!
Well, it's not doing anything yet. Maybe it's friendly.![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
Also, explain the dynamics of having a friendship with dragon society whilst having a pet that hates them with a passion and vice-versa.![:duck:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/duck.png)
1943008 I'm working on it!![:ajbemused:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajbemused.png)
Fluttershy...peeking....![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
Oh and all the mares in heat? This is gonna be goooooood.
Ermahgerd, I love this and the possibilities it holds... Unfortunately, it's really rushed; if you developed and fleshed out the events more, it'd be even better! Keep up the good work! <3
1946004 Oh trust me theres still so much more to come.
Round two begins....![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
Pulling ponies into the ground. Naruto move?
1961619 Eeyup, couldn't resist.![:rainbowwild:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowwild.png)
![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
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Umm? How did fluttershy get there on par with them?![:duck:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/duck.png)
1969539 She caught up to them.
It keeps getting better!![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)
1971278 The fun hasn't even begun!![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
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Let the Games Begin!!!!!
That was inFAMOUS 2 inspired, wasnt it?
Ahhhh but hey, this fic got interesting fast, da buck is this game they keep chatting about?
and definitely best OC out of the other 3 ![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
1974501 You mean when he absorbed the sphere?
Kind of, I've seen Infamouse 2 walkthroughs but never played.
I just figured it would be a cool way for him to absorb it. I'll explain what it was in the future. The explination is CRAZY!![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
Did he use an assassin's creed climbing abilities?
A doctor who reference AND a reference from the grey?!![:pinkiegasp:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiegasp.png)
U ![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
I
May the odds be ever in your favor, Cross!![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
We need some good chase music for the next chapter I say![:eeyup:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/eeyup.png)
1978052 No more like Spiderman.
1978228wasn't trying to do that. I don't even like spiderman (OMG YEA ITS DA TRUTH)
1978372 I'm not talking about movie spiderman I mena classic comic book Spiderman.![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
![:twilightoops:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightoops.png)
What eves not everyone likes him.
Oh my Celestia I thought he'd do a Naruto but instead he put traps everywhere that is gonna be good.
Oh, Cross, you're funny
you're just trolling everypony with Beat's cloning spell
and having what seems to be a common breakfast in Equestria
youre scaling walls, killing monsters, you remind me of somepony I know ![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)