After recovering from his last mission Splintered Lance, Shinning Armor's oldest friend and comrade is reasigned to Ponyville to guard Twilight and the Elements. Can a designer help this battle scarred stallion cope with the sins of his past or will the pain be too much to bear?
It's ironic how this story, along with Stealing A Heart of Gold both have to do with Rarity dating cops/ police forces. Along with classified info and brute strength.
2253363 She likes guys like that
*Knuckles crack* new story Review Time:
Shouldn't it be Prince Armor now?
This Splintered Lance, he reminds me of someone *cough*Gear Grinder *cough*Shining Shield*cough*
Rarity being harassed in Canterlot and gets saved by OC*cough*Shining Shield*cough*
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All in all this is has got my interest, although it seems like this story is a fusion of Crazy About Apples and Stealing a Heart of Gold. Also post a pic of Lance.
This interests me, please carry on.
i see the mature rating. you know i gotta ask right......will there be clop?
2254390 Maybe.
2254057 If you their stories were fucked up just wait. This'll probably be my darkest fic ever and yes there are some similarities between the two characters but there are also major differences. For example: Splinter isn't as brooding as Shield and doesn't have a split personality like Gear.
2254728 alot or not so much?
Hmmm, I wonder if he's crazy about apples...
But seriously, mate, this is great, might be similar to your other stuff but you know what, I LOVE YOUR WORK... He's supposed to guard the elements BUT DOESNT EVEN KNOW THEIR NAMES also, best OC name and design by you so far, I reckon is he gonna steal that heart of gold?
2254779 Pun overload
2254733 still deciding I don't even have the 2nd chapter written yet.
2254850 ok thanks.
Will read later....too tired.
Havent read any of your mature stories and thiss one looks good...
but dont chicken out on any clop scenes i dont want the ending of stealing a heat of gold all over again
2299399 Oh trust me it won't be.
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finnaly
YAY! new chapter.
Splintered Lance, one of the many of your amazing OCs. I can't wait to see what his backstory is!
Good story so far, but one problem: every time Shining's name shows up in the story, you spell it like "Shinning". Still, I like your OC, and keep up the good work!
Bueno
Can't wait to hear the back story on the changelings.
2397849 You are gonna regret that post when the time comes.
Is he like USMC Force Recon or somthing?
Oh you another chapter of Stolen Apples is out, Lets give a review shall we:
It's Shining.
Background
So let me get this straight, he can turn invisible, he's staying at Rarity's place, He's eventually going to fall in love with her, And his duties is to watch over them and protect them(especially Rarity). Quick somepony put on some Clay Aiken because I'll be laughing my ass off when this scene happens.
How could Celestia respond with that letter in just 5 seconds?
Just something, I decided to do.
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I'm guessing it his duty is 24/7 since he has to protect 6 mares. So that means he's always on duty and will never be able to drink.*end of review*
Well this was an entertaining chapter. I feel Lances personality is too close to Shining Shields and it makes me laugh that he'll be working with Applejack just like Gear Grinder did. You need to work on not repeating yourself with this story.
2399404 Don't worry there are major differences between them. AWESOME PIC!
Oh no...HE'S SO STOIC!!! MR. LANCE!! DON'T BE AN ASSHOLE!!... just kidding, I'm very intrigued
finally this story gets some attention
About time this one came back from the shadows, so lets review the latest chapter of Crazy Hearts:
I liked Lance's flashbacks.
Since Lance is a unicorn, why doesn't he use his magic to pick the apples?(Twilight did it in episode 4.)
It's a shame this wasn't a harem fic, otherwise that line would have been hilarious.
I think the books and the movies are overrated(just like Tom Hanks)
The whole scene with Aloe and her ex seems familiar.(Now where have I seen this hmmmmm(being sarcastic by the way))
I'M BATMAN
This line also sounds familiar, but I don't remember where it's from.*end of review*
Well this was an exciting chapter. It's great that were learning about Lance's past, but it still raises questions(Does anypony else thinks that Lance and Midnight were a couple back then?(Was she a changeling in disguise?))
2627029 You'll find out
"Wait, who are you?"
"You know who I am"
"I do?"
"Your friendly neighbourhood Spidermane!"
In all seriousness, good development
Nice plot and great character design
Who couldn't miss that airplane reference.
Damn you Shirley!!!
Who couldn't miss that airplane reference.
Damn you Shirley!!!
Great Chapter!!!
The hard life on the inside, yo
Anyway, sick as chapter
Got the reference(poor Leslie Nielsen, he will be missed), Just going to point out a few things:
Sergeant(noticing lately that you get one word wrong in ever chapter of you stories so far.)
Is this where Shining Armor learned how to throw ponies?(Lets hope Cadance never finds out.)
Just something I whipped up. *That is all*
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Awesome chapter, I love this. Maybe some army humor could help, y'know like those pranks they do in the army or something.
2794556 Excellent Cutie Mark. Only the orange is supposed to be in front of the crossd swords.
2794592 Oh trust me. shenanigans will occur.
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Whoops my bad
Corrected:
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2795711 Awesome!
I don't know why but when he told what his cutie mark is I just laughed thinking about how weird it is to have an orange with swords as a cutie mark
Uh oh.....
You should really do some research before posting. Rarity's dads name is Magnum.
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Uh oh, I smell trouble.(get it?)*end of review*
Well this was informative chapter and it left a pretty good cliffhanger(Now I want to read the next chapter to see what happens next.)
YES! YES!!!! HEAT CYCLE!!!
of all the things that could happen...
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2830687 Sorry didn't know that his name was Magnum. Rarity's expression is more of an anger twitch than a nervous one.
"I smell trouble." LOL
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*whistles* been almost a week since I made that comment and your just responding.(well at-least your not ignoring me anymore.)
2856761 Sorry just been tired from work on top of summer classes I need to take.
Just about to start reading this, and I noticed something.
That's not how you spell "Shining"