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Silentpegasus


An aspiring writer that loves the fandom and it's works

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A lonely potion maker has lived deep within the Everefree Forest for years completely isolated from the outside world. Can Twilight and her friends rescue this unicorn from himself or will his past destroy his future?

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 80 )

I'll give this a little more in-depth read later. Looks pretty good at first.

Sudo
:twilightsmile:

Kinda wish the chaptors were a little longer. Beyond that I have no complaints.

+1 fav

I like the character. Resourceful, shady and incredibly dickish but honourable. A real jerk with a heart of gold. Interested in seeing what you do with him, how he changes and how the story evolves.

1765262 Thank you,:twilightsmile: I plan on explaining his back story in the coming chapters, not sure which ones but they're coming.:ajsmug:

How the heck does this fic have down votes!?! I'm loving the story so far keep up the awesome work

This is.......AMAZING!!:rainbowkiss:

Echo is very interesting character.
Somehow he reminds me of doctor Tenma from Monster.

Puns, innuendo, and wordplay.
Love it.:pinkiehappy:

My dashboard keeps telling me that this is updated, but when I check it, it's not.
Ffffffffffffffffffffffffffff-
fimfiction.net is trolling me.:twilightangry2:

“It was weird, Time Turner ah think it was.”
"Perfect! Time for some answers.”

:rainbowlaugh:

1789031 Truth be told I didn't get the joke until you pointed it out. :derpyderp2::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

LOL I see what you did there I like the story so far :pinkiecrazy:

1790358 I'll try but A or B is going to be a bit more possib;e plus I still Ihave to take care of Twilight's perspective.:twilightoops:

1790397 Whatever you end up doing will be good either way.

Though my sad-feels sense is still tingling.

my thinking go with the gang war then riht as ace is winning twilight comes back with a friend she made during nightmare night that can move the stars.

Gangs of New York was a good movie liked it a lot keep up the good work:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

C: A bit of both please I would love to see how this will go:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

1791411 NIce to meet another fan of the movie. And I'll see what I can do:twilightsmile:

dude... do both and slowly ease into the confrontation between Ace and Echo...

Comment posted by MrZombert deleted Dec 17th, 2012

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS JUST WHAT I WANTED :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile:

Oh ya and it would be cool if something like this happened *Ahem*

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You sir have made my day

I was still hoping for some goddess level destruction by luna but eh it would have been.... oh who am I kiding that would have still been fucking sweet to watch.

I like this story! Following!
Only feedback for now:

Honestly, I can't see a pony swearing other than 'buck' just doesn't fit, but that's just me.

Maybe try to show, not tell- slower and with some details, if that makes sense. A few
grammar/punctuation errors here and there.
Not meaning to knock your writing at all! Certainly an interesting character you've got here.

Good chapter! The only thing to detract from it is the spelling/grammar errors, plus the slightly-rushed feel (lack of detail)

I think if you took it slower, with more detail, especially on the nightmare, it'd make it infinitely more emotional.

Onward to the next chapter! :moustache:

I really like the story. The character is multi-facited, and the plot is certainly interestingly enough.

However, I can't continue reading :pinkiesad2:

There's a continuation of grammar/spelling errors, and it just seems....rushed. Waaaaaay too fast and little detail on a lot of the actions/feelings. It's enough that it detracts from the plot and being immersed in the fic.

Great idea and characters, just could use some ironing out and proofing.

Comment posted by Silentpegasus deleted Dec 17th, 2012

1812938 I know the spelling and Grammar are bad, they have have always been my weak point, plus I don't have proof reader. :ajsleepy: I understand how hard it is to read a story with so many mistakes. :rainbowhuh: I'm bad when it come to writing action sequences I hope I'll get better in the future. :facehoof: Thanks for following it for as long as you could, every little bit helps. :twilightsmile:

1812632 Just wait an see.:ajsmug:

1813093
Oh trust me good sir I am waiting:pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile:

I no longer have any idea about what is going to happen.

I like that.:pinkiehappy:

......Now wishing I had noticed that it had updated before I commented.

Because now I have sad feels.:fluttercry:

1816897 Just wait I'm not done with Echo yet :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

1816961 .....You're insane. I hate you. You're awesome. Keep writing awesome stories.

1817028 Yes, yes I am insane.:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:
I'm working on a new fic right now I'll post it when I'm done with this story.

Wow thats all I have to say :pinkiesmile::pinkiehappy:

And as I predicted I got something like this for the end fight.:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

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But for this story its Echo in place of Spike

1817375 It's along the same lines only Echo falls off the roof. :ajsmug:
Cowboy bebop is awesome!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

1817415
I concur with you previous statement cowboy bebop was indeed awesome :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Here now have this to remind you of the feels :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

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*BANG*

1817444 A classic moment in anime history.:twilightsmile:

Alright. I give up, you win.

Take all of my internets. All of them.

A sparkle of love 2: the return of star... lol jk this doesn't need a sequel its good as is
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Now that was good I enjoyed this chapter immensely:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by MrZombert deleted Dec 19th, 2012

1822896 Thank you I think you might enjoy the next one I'm working on as well I just need to get it approved first.:ajsmug:

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