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Hex Swirl, a traveling magician has an unfortunte accident in the Everfree forest. He wakes up in care of Applejack who takes a liking to the stallion. What secret is he keeping from the ponies? What will happen when a pony from his past returns? Join Hex and the others as they uncover a secret long hidden from the world and magic unlike any of them have ever seen.

This is part two of a series I'm working on. Part one is 'The Dreams We Share.' Read that to get more info on Dash's colt friend Storm Chaser.

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How come I think I spotted some thing from Doctor Who?:rainbowhuh: Good story.

I will watch this....I know it's a 'tragedy' but.....
if there's not a happy ending, I will be quite displeased.....seeing as how interesting and well-written this is.

Doctor Who references.

Doctor Who references everywhere.

Anyway, good first chapter. Liked and favorited.

I don't even care, man. I'm reading this!

Hell yes another best pony x OC, 1 chapter in and I'm already loving it. God damnit though I wish you would finish drowning in love and changing the guard but what ever I will never turn down Applejack. Keep up the good work and more doctor who references!

Ya know you've got problems when your name is "Hex" :rainbowlaugh:
Nevertheless, intriguing, I shall enjoy this I think :twilightsmile:

I like this.


Where is more?

Few things I'd like to point out.

1)The normal typos and grammatical mistakes, but that happens to everybody.

2)If you're writing a story in third person and you put a thought in there it's best to slap some italics or an apostrophe rather than quotations or leaving it bare.

All in all, I like it. Someone's been watching doctor who.

I'm looking forwards to seeing more of this. Don't disappoint me.

Make More :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: or DIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

2700047 Oh just wait. More are on the way.

FINALLY I MADE IT HERE:pinkiegasp:, so this is your third AJ fic(still haven't read the first one yet)Lets see if it's as good as the story that got me hooked by you with a review:

The stallion looked back and saw a full pack of timberwolves chasing after him. His horn flared and several images of the stallion appeared.

Still obsessed with Naruto it seems.

He saw a shadowy pony like figure with bright red eyes staring at him. The stallion scoffed at the image and hurried downstairs.

Why does this sound familiar:duck:?

“You hold the boards.” Hex said as he pointed to the copy on the left. “You hold the nails and I’ll hit.” The two clones nodded and three stallions soon got to work on fixing the barn.

Makes me always wonder about Shadow Clone Jutsu. How do you know which one is the real one and which is the clone if their an exact copy of the caster?

“It’s.....It’s bigger on the inside!”

“I love it when they say that.” He said as he lifted up a floorboard and retrieved a glowing blue gem.

I'll never get tired of that, just like the infamous Doctor Who? question.

“A Unicorn’s magic ability is broken up into different classes. One being the lowest and ten being the highest. Normal Unicorns rarely go above a class four or five.” The lavender mare clarified.

Why do I get an X-Men vibe here? If Twilight's an 8, then what classes are Celestia and Luna:twilightoops:?

“How in the hay did you do that?” Dash yelled.

“Magic.” He said as he tipped his hat to the mare.


“Anypony know a Plummer? Looks like sprung a leak.” He said as he looked at his side.

:facehoof: “Anypony know a Plumber? Looks like I sprung a leak.”:facehoof:

Okay then let’s see what I have in my hat.” He said as he removed his hat and stuck his hoof inside. The stallion pulled a live manticore’s head out of the brim. “Uh-oh.” He said as the beast roared.

“Wrong one!” He said as he pushed the animal’s head back inside. “Sorry about that. Let’s try that again.”

Is anypony getting a Rocky and Bullwinkle vibe here?(show always confused me since they showed episodes out of order and why it each chapter had two titles.)

“True.” Twilight said. “I still wanna see how he did those spells.” The unicorn said in an interested tone.

If this wasn't already stated of being a AJ shipping story, I would have assumed this being a Twilight ship instead(especially when a story started out like this. *cough*Sparkle of His Eye*cough**cough*)

“I just want to be sure that you didn’t use dark magic.”

“Never touched the stuff.” He said in a flat tone.

Sword in the Stone reference anyone?

“Ah, I’ve run into quite a few of ponies like that. They’re the ponies that give performers like myself a bad name.” He said with a grunt. “Take my ex mare friend for example; she was a complete show off!”

“How bad?” Twilight asked.

“Ugh, we couldn’t go anywhere without her mentioning how ‘great and powerful’ she was.” He said as he made quotation marks with his hooves. The mares looked at one another in surprise.

Will a certain unicorn make an appearance here maybe?:duck::twilightoops:(although it would had been a surprise if you didn't already confirm it by putting her tag up:ajbemused:, great way to take away the surprise)*end of review*

Well this is a hit right off the bat, good show, jolly good show:raritywink:. Seeing as this is your third AJ fic(poor Pinkie:fluttershysad:) Have you thought of branching out from using the main characters of the show? After all you've only done this with two of your stories, it would be nice to see some other characters getting their shot in the spotlight(Trixie, Derpy, Spitfire, Cheerilee, Zecora(good luck with the rhyming), Lyra, Bon Bon, and a whole bunch of others that would take too long to list(and I'm lazy))

2701283 The first set of clones with the wolves were just images, like holograms. Relax there's plenty of surprises in store for later chapters :pinkiecrazy: and Trixie will be making an appearance.:trixieshiftright: I also plan on writing a Trixie X O.C. fic, just haven't had the time with work and writing close to 5 fics at once.

"Why didn't anypony tell me my flank was so big?"

I get that spaceballs reference.

YAY, STORM IS BACK!!!:pinkiehappy:

She's happy ----->:rainbowwild:

“Right, I suppose that’s your job after all.” Hex said with a smug grin on his face.
“Exact- HEY!” Storm yelled as he blushed.

I needed that. Glad to see storm chaser is back. And as allways a good chapter. Just please, don't take two weeks on the next one.

Well that was fun to read :pinkiehappy:
Got some arcs going, some development, some plot, I like it, I like it :twilightsmile:

I feels refreshed, now watch me pull a review out of this hat:

“What? It’s a Stetson. Stetsons are cool.” He said with a grin.

Ahh, I never get tired of Doctor Who references.

Hex opened his eye lids to see a pair of deep emerald green eyes staring back at him. Hex felt their noses touch and felt the mare’s warm breath on his lips. Their faces both turned bright red and seemed to be frozen in place until Hex broke the silence.


Yay, Storm Chaser is back:yay:.(Any reason why him out of the others?)It's been so long that I forgot what his personality was like.(pretty sure he wasn't a jerk)

“Ugh, fine.” He said as he trotted away with the blue stallion. As soon as they were out of earshot Rainbow grinned at AJ with a sly smile across her face.

“Why are you looking at me like that Dash?”

“I saw you two five minutes ago.” She said as she waggled here eyebrows. The orange mare felt her face heat up.


“I wait until my gem is fully charged and then I keep moving.” He said as Pinkie came out with a few menus.

“Well, it needs to charge once a year. So I look at it as a type of vacation.” He said as he looked at the menu. “I’l have a dandelion sandwich with a side of hay fries.” He said as he handed Pinkie the menu.

Am I getting another case of Deja vu:facehoof:(or was that from somepony else who made the same mistake.)Pinkie Pie works in a bakery NOT a restaurant!

“My specialty is illusion. Like that severed head thing I did yesterday. I’m also skilled with pyrotechnics and a few others.”


“Yes, I’m able to trick your mind into seeing something that’s not really there even though it seems real.”

He must be ninja, He mastered the art of Genjutsu(Naruto reference)

“Thank you. I can’t take all the credit however, I have several books passed down from generations of my family.” Twilight’s eyes gleamed.

“Just how many books are we talking here?”

“Last time I did an inventory check it was around.....2,000 books.” Twilight clapped her hooves together in excitement.

You put a gleam, I put a clap.

Oh come now dear, you can’t lie to save yourself so stop trying.” The Unicorn said as she glared at the mare.

“Ah don’t know what yer talking about.”

Rarity kept staring.

“Nope, that won’t work on me.”

The mare kept glaring at her friend.

“Rarity stop it!” She yelled.

The Unicorn kept up the stare.

“Alright fine you win! Just make it stop!” The farmer yelled as she laid on the ground with her hooves over her head.

It's seems that everypony has some type of Stare.

“It’a smaller on the outside!” The blue stallion gave the pink mare a confused look.

“Okay. That’s a new one.” Hex said in surprise.

Again, never get tired of Who references(Nightmare in Silver I think? Loved that ep)

At the end a gold encrusted case shined like a star in the hallway. The mare approached it and saw a portrait of an old stallion with a long grey beard.

Does this mean that he's related to Starswirl the Bearded in some way?*end of review*

This was a AWESOME chapter.:twilightsmile: After reading just two chapters this looks like it might be one of your best stories yet. And you finally brought your other OCs into your story(how long has it been when I suggested this?) And just like last time you end it with another cliffhanger that raises more questions. Cant wait to see what happens next chapter.:pinkiehappy:

“What day is today?”

“Today is Tuesday.”

“Oh, then it happened fourteen months ago.”

“WHAT? Over a year?”

I see that 'Red Vs. Blue' reference. :rainbowkiss:

:rainbowderp: Ohhhh noooooo brooooo. Dat ending right there! :twilightoops: :twilightoops: :twilightoops: :applejackconfused:

Still with that crazy ending, I can't even begin to imagine how Twilight will feel when she finds out Hex likes Applejack! It's kind of like a love triangle but it has to be more of a circle. Just Applejack and Hex, get out of there Twilight you already got shipped. Not a triangle, but more of a circle. :applejackunsure:

2787951 It'll tie in with another fic I'm writing. :ajsmug:

Just shut up and enjoy the hug.

We need to get Ashleigh in here now to say that one line and i could die happy.
Ow that I've read the entire chapter I just wanted to say, holy hell. Can you say love triangle!

2787951 she could marry echo specter and shoot babies out her V

2788892 Oh no I have a much better idea. It'll be in the next fic of the series.:ajsmug:

2788962 sweet. Hey I got a few OCs that I just created. Wanna use some? They're free! There all on my blog

Another chapter so soon:pinkiegasp: as if my magic *poof* and just like that a review also appears

The orange mare kept quite as she and the blue stallion worked.


“Oh um....yeah...ya got a speck of dirt on your....cheek.” She said with a nervous grin on her face. The stallion wiped his cheek as AJ pulled her hat over her face to hide her ever growing blush. The mare gulped and returned to her work.


“Well, as I remember. Braeburn mentioned a barn raising and Applejack with all her strength would have a bit of trouble with it.” Granny Smith interjected.

Congratulations, now I got that song stuck in my head. Thank you so much.:ajbemused:

“Heh heh hope ya don’t mind if I take tomorrow afternoon off boss.”

“It’s fine. You just have to pick up the extra slack for the rest of today and the day after tomorrow.” She said with an evil grin on her face.

“Oh Luna help me.” He said with a gulp. The farmer giggled at the stallion’s worried face.


“Like wise I-” She was cut off as the mare tripped over her hooves and started to fall off the loft. The mare saw that she was rocketing towards the ground. She closed her eyes and braced for impact. She hit something firm yet soft. She cracked open her eyes and saw that the blue stallion had caught her in his hooves.

I know why you did it this way, but gotta ask, Why didn't Hex just use a levitation spell to save her?:trixieshiftright:

"He’s with Twi down at the library doing some magic stuff.” She said in a flat tone.

Together their making magic *wink wink*:trollestia:

“Twilight, be honest with me. Do you like Hex?” Rarity said praying that she’d say no.

“No....yes....I don’t know!” The mare said as her cheeks grew redder. “He’s nice, funny and very skilled in magic.” Twilight said with a sigh. “Promise you won’t tell anyone?” The white mare gulped as the thought of a heart broken Applejack ran through her mind.

Oooh, a love triangle(why did I think this was gonna happen? Was this because of what I said two chapters ago?) Way to keep it exciting and different from you other stories, I applaud you.:pinkiehappy:

“Aside from her constant boasting, I caught her in bed with another stallion.” The white mare put a hoof to her lip in shock.

Cant believe that Trixie would do that!:pinkiegasp: Is she a bitch? Yes, but a slut? No.

As he drew closer he saw the hat starting to move. His jaw dropped as he saw a small orange filly, no bigger than Applebloom with a golden mane and tail sleeping soundly on his bed.

“Uh oh.”

Challenge accepted:ajsmug:
fc07.deviantart.net/fs71/i/2012/195/c/6/after_a_hard_day_of_applebucking_by_drewdini-d578ns2.png *end of review*

Well this chapter was certainly juicy:pinkiesmile:, Cant wait to see where you'll go with this love triangle part of the story. And pictures always help to make the story better(I still like competing to see which can provide pics for the chapters:ajsmug:)

Aside from her constant boasting...

Sounds suspiciously familiar...Somepony we know? :duck:

First time seeing chapter: Small Problems? Do they have a problem with something?
After reading chapter: Small Problems! Little filly AppleJack! I see what ya did there!

So Twi and Jackie both got a common interest :raritywink: Trixie's a slut :ajbemused: Dashie's still hitched, Mr Swirl's into southern belles :ajsmug: and speaking of which...What in Tartarus happened to her?!:pinkiegasp:

Yay, you got this one out much faster than I predicted, not complaining of course. But anyway, I feel like the relationship is moving a bit to fast. Then again I'm one to talk about that but I digress. There were a few spelling and grammatical errors but all in all I loved the cheaper. Filly applejack, priceless! The pictures were wonderful and the head cannon about star swirl the bearded was simply awesome. Keep up the food work comrade!

“Not just yet. I just got an idea.” Dash said as she waggled her eyebrows at the white mare.

“What are you.....NO! No way in hell Dash.” Storm said with a blush.

“What? You look cute as a mare.” Rainbow said as the white mare blushed. “Please?”

“NO!” He yelled.

“Now you know how I feel Stormy.” The cyan stallion said in an annoyed tone. Hex face hoofed. “What about the time I let you-” The white mare covered the stallion’s mouth with her hoof.

“Whoa! We swore that we’d never talk about that again!” The white Pegasus said with a bright blush.

That was pretty funny. :rainbowlaugh:

But poor Twilight. :fluttershysad: I feel so bad for her now.

Rainbow danced on a pole for storm...

2802746 I just hope someone sees the picture of rainbow blitz and storm dancer it will be really funny :pinkiehappy:

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