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Silentpegasus


An aspiring writer that loves the fandom and it's works

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Wake Breaker, a Pegasus stallion that prefers the dark blue realm of the water to the sky above. A certain Pegasus mare soon finds herself infatuted with the stallion. What is he hiding from her and what is she hiding from him? Love will flow, secrets will be revealed and what will happen when water and air meet?

Rainbow Dash X O.C.

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 264 )

Pics and fic are oke:ajsmug:

Fic good. Pics no.

Pics are awesome with fics, if you've read Crowley's stories, you would see how there,

:rainbowdetermined2:< Awesome!!!

Interesting start! I shall await for moar.

2536137 Yeah that's where I got the idea from.

Pics are very nice in fics. Very few have both writing and art talents making their appearance quite rare.

could use a once-over for a few spelling/grammar mistakes.....maybe a bit more detail/smoothing out.....
but certainly an interesting fic!

I like the pics! Sure do give an image... By the wya, the story was also labaled "Sex" does that mean there'll be clop? :rainbowhuh:

2536517 More like sexual situations. Nothing graphic or descriptive.

I always wanted to see a rainbow dash love story. Tragically this site is mostly filled with lesbian sex, so it never sparks my interest. Nice to see her with a stallion... I think this is the first and only story I've seen on this sight do that so far. Closest thing to that was her romantically involved a male kitchen sink, and while funny, was just a gag story.

I gave it thumbs up, though it might just be out of bias.

Also I think many people truly believe that entertaining the possibility that she is gay is a unique concept... sad I know. Sadly in MLP fanfics, straight is the new gay.

2536637
That's good. Descriptive scenes just ruin a story, in my opinion.

He a surfer dude... I can tell... but gr8 story by the way

i like pics...but what id like more, is to see the pic of the oc

This reminds me of the movie "Shark boy and lavagirl" where sharkboy is left alone in the middle of the sea and raised by sharks

you're adding pictures to your fic. That is awesome

Awesome Story! Well written! Can't wait for more :pinkiehappy:...

Also, i like it how you characterized dash - and the idea with the pics is good too.

Kindly Regards,
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Ps: Could you please make that Rainbow is an Orphan :raritysnicker:?

Really love your amazing stories!!! :pinkiehappy:

MOAR!!! :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy:

:rainbowlaugh:

Keep up the good work! also, the picture thing is coool, keep doing it! :rainbowdetermined2:

Can't wait till the next chapter. :scootangel:

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Awesome :pinkiehappy:
I'm at the edge of my seat for this :twilightsmile:

Not bad:pinkiehappy: btw do you mind if I make a YouTube fan fic reading of this. I would give you credit of coarse.

2538944 Go for it. Send me the link when it is done.

Really cute story so far. The characters are very well portrayed, especially Rainbow punching him in the eye for saving her, and the OC seems rlly interesting with those webbed wings. I'm really curious about his dreams/nightmares, but I shall await your next chapter excitedly to see if anything is brought to light.

Finally made it here, so lets jump into this review:

Wake Breaker? I get the Breaker part but Wake.(at least it not something cliche like wind breaker, also picture.)

He's a bat pony,not bad(treading on thin ice, don't want to sink and drown, get it? I said drown and this story has swimming in it.)

The whole mouth to mouth part, did you get that from The Sandlot?(admit it.)

Unlike to twenty-five fool long, ten foot deep public pool his was easily one hundred feet long and fifty feet deep.

A pool that size must be expensive to buy and install, So where does this type of money come from?

I wonder does having bat wings make him a better swimmer since it would be like having fins?

I see your pouting Rainbow Dash pic and raise you with a gif.
fc06.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/036/7/6/rainbow_dash_sadface_2_by_iks83-d4oqjae.gif

“I......I can’t swim.” She said as she hung her head.

Hard to believe that an athlete like Dash doesn't know how to swim.

So does this dream he's having is a memory from his past?(making this his dark past/secret, not fun when we know right off the bat, no mystery.) Why do I feel like your gonna be referencing Cast Away?(I hate Tom Hanks.)*end of review*

This story seems to be going a nice steady pace, not too fast or slow. Let's just hope that you don't rush this like you did with your last DashXO.C. story, The Dreams We Share.

2546030 It's not exactly like Cast Away and I'll explain why Dash can't swim later on. (I personally love Tom Hanks, but I respect your opinion.)

Pics are good but you can't have too many or it ruins the chapter

2547741 I know. I don't plan on going over five per chapter and not all chapters will have pics.

2546513 I must agree with him( Except for the tom hanks part). Dash an't swim? I know you said you would explain it later. however maybe mention something across the lines of " When i got my cutie mark i devoted all my time to flying with little time to swim". Understand he gist i'm getting at?

Anyways great story continue the good work!

2549401 It'a tie between AJ and RD. :ajsmug::rainbowdetermined2:

I really dig this character. Wake is probably in my favorite top 10. :pinkiehappy:

wat is up with coffee and eggs

Dude, obviously Wake Breaker is best pony. :pinkiehappy: :rainbowlaugh: :twilightsmile:

Such an awesome story ^_^

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Time to sound like a total grammar nazi....
"Well, your bucked.”"
You're XD

"“Things like that don’t matter to me.”"
^I call horseapples on that statement :facehoof:

Maybe I'm having an off day, well see what happens next chapter.

When is the OC picture comimg out?

I have to say that im enjoying yet another one of your stories, again. I realise that people have other obligations, but could you crank this story out a bit faster.:moustache:

2554328 Working on the next chapter right now.

The mare sat down next to him as he put the dick in the player

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Okay. That...happened.

Damn nice Chapter. I just LOVE this story :pinkiehappy:! More :rainbowdetermined2:! (Just with a little bit fewer Wingboners, please :twilightsheepish:)

2556502

Oh gawd :rainbowlaugh:!

Another good chapter. Stallion who sorta pwns a shark? Awesome.

Also, the amount of awkward moments is hilarious.

2556502 IF ONLY YOU COULD HEAR ME LAUGH RIGHT NOW.:rainbowlaugh::rainbowkiss::derpytongue2::rainbowwild:

2558186 I did a double take when I read it. I was like, oh he put his thing into the player :twilightoops:
What the buck

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