I READ THIS ON FANFICTION!
i was also the one discussing sequels with you.
hopefully you can start them!

354684 I was a beginner Brony at the time this was being made. Had no Idea. Mah bad.

Hey, the main character in my story is named John Daniels.
lol

354847 Yyyyeah...I'm really thinking of Remaking this story. I've been thinking about this for a very very very long time.

I did give him a backstory, In another story I will soon post. There will be more revealing of him.

The Lightning cutie mark allows him to control the lightning in clouds during storms and such. Mary-Sue, I know.

The Ice cutie mark allows him to freeze things. I was just a beginner brony at the time.

He's 18 and living in an apartment after his parents were killed in the 9/11 attacks...Wait...He does have a backstory. It explains it in chapter 5, I think. What chapter did you stop on?

354865 PARADOX!!

354931 Thanks, Mate. Also, This isn't my only story. I've got like, 10 other mlp stories. :D I'll be posting them soon.

I can tell this was your first story. But that's cool, this was OK. I have learned to like most stories, regardless or how well it is done.

The 9/11 reference made me laugh.

Edit: Never mind now its sad.

Okay..

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When Twilight "came" along when he was about to commit suicide I completely lost interest in this story, like what the fuck is up with that shit.

"I had sex with your dying body."

"Oh don't worry about it."

355904
Yea that was a big WTF moment
And everyone was cool about it

355647

Because giving specific criticism and tips for improvement is exactly like the slaughter of millions and ruthless conquest of Europe?

The author already took my advice very well, which is good for him.

355904 Yyyyeah...I had no Idea what to do at this moment. I was thinking the same exact thing you are, Even though I made the story.

But, This isn't the first story I made. The new stories I made are actually better than this one.

356952 I'm happy now.

This fic is non-generic, as much as I am not sarcastic.

372114 What?

355904 Pic is win.

420762 what?

Just remade chapter 2. Going to work on chapters 3-5 later. I'm gonna work on another chapter of my new story, Then hopefully, remake chapter 3 of this story.

425078 Well, The water is clean. And, Rarity decided to actually be social with Spike, Since she knows his love for her, And...Ehhhh-it's confusing, Now.

426168 it was meant to be a bad innuendo...

435300 I was idea-less at the time, And 9/11 came into my mind. I'll change that, so it ISNT 9/11.

Maybe a car crash.

354684 name others please i can't find them anywhere

The fish demands you torture Dumb bell........no loose ends muhahahahahahahahahabut kill the bastard

450296 I'm thinking of doing that. I was working on that on my laptop that got fucked by a virus, so I'm gonna have to start over. The chapter will take place after TI, FS, TS have their threesome.

this is the first "harem" fic I have seen on this site. i enjoyed every second, and i thank yo for the reading experience

460608 I'm stupid. I'll change it soon.

463278 The biggest problem that'll present, though is that now you have to explain why he didn't try to fly from the cliff himself...

463680 Well, Thunder ORIGINALLY was a Pegasus, but I changed him to an Earth pony. Well, in my stories, he's not just one kind. He can be any kind; Pegasus, Unicorn, Earth Pony, hell, even an Alicorn.

In the story on fanfiction, he's a pegasus, but on here, he's an earth pony. I just have his picture of him as a pegasus to show him originally.

EPIC so sad it had to end...wait...sequel, oh yeah I forgot Well, nothing else to say here...

986553 Well, I changed his cutie mark. He only has one now.

354847 I'm remaking the story, so "18 year old teen" will be "21 year old adult." I wasn't proud of this story before, but now, I shall remake it.

1019757 trolololollolololll It's actually a ninja, not lingerie. [img]troll[/img]

1025982 Is it a ninja?! Or is it....your death...suit...oh, nope. its a ninja...iiiiit's a ninja.

did celestia give him wings or something?

1064499 No, but Twilight does in the sequel story. You might be asking because of the story pic. If you are, that was my fault. Will fix. Pony maker is awesome.

1382850

You suck
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DA FUQ! at the end it said he is a Pegasus, but, in the story he was called a earth pony by RD and then he fell of the cliff, WHY NOT FLY THEN????
*ERROR 707*

Alright. I've decided I'm going to completely remake this story. I did start remaking it 2 months ago, but stopped and forgot about it. Hopefully, I can remake it, so that its teen. Also, hopefully, I can get it featured. Or not. Mostly not, but who cares?

1386515 I am the stupidest brony alive. Will fix.

2708968 lol

3756816 I felt that the original was stupid, so I decided to rewrite it, but give it more detail of a much more darker future.

The original backstory was short and not interesting. Sure, this new one is longer, but still, not interesting....well, to some, it might be.

3799468 In this story, he's an Earth Pony. His race varies in other stories, sometimes from Earth Pony to Pegasus to Unicorn.

Just forgot to change the cover.

5499703 The chapter you read is the original. I'm currently rewriting the story.

6114959 D:

6115022 It's an old story. My logic didn't make sense four years ago. :D

It still doesn't.

I had started the story....but reading that you made your character's backstory into a political attack on Republicans and Mitt Romney....I can't continue. Downvoted

6401121 This is an old story from 2011, in fact, the very first MLP story I ever made. I didn't add the Romney thing until 2013. It still sucks now, but I find it funny, TBH.

I'm planning on doing remakes of my story; legit ones, though.

My OC nowadays is nothing like what I made him in 2011 OR 2013.

My newer stories are much better. :D

6402526 I have your story "Regret" in my "To Read" Pile.....if you happen to remove that Political Attack in your rewriting, I'll give this story another chance, but as things are, I just couldn't get past it.

6402850 A rewrite won't be for a little while, at least not until the first act of Regret's sequel is done. :D

And yes, I'll remove that Political Attack. Looking at it now just seems stupid. lol