Twilight and the Mime

Twilight is perplexed by an earth pony capable of summoning and manipulating invisible objects. In the name of science, she decides to uncover the mime's source of power. The mime is not happy about this, and sets out to stop Twilight with walls, ropes, and every other manner of mime related weaponry.

Cover Art thanks to Time Turner (A.K.A. Pilkie)

Chapters (2)

I: What Sorcery is This? · 4th Feb 2014 · 1,121 words
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II: Silence of the Mimes · 10th Feb 2014 · 1,016 words
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Smoker

Smoker #1 · Feb 4th, 2014 · · · I: What Sorcery is This? ·

This was actually kind of funny. Apparently there well be more chaps so into the read later pile it goes.

Schorl Tourmaline

Schorl Tourmaline #2 · Feb 4th, 2014 · · · I: What Sorcery is This? ·

Dang it, I was hoping that there was an image for this story. I love the idea though. I will read later and I am sure it will be wonderfully hilarious.

Seether00

Seether00 #3 · Feb 5th, 2014 · · · I: What Sorcery is This? ·

Mimes. Every l clown? Or Eviler clown?

shardfff

shardfff #4 · Feb 5th, 2014 · · · I: What Sorcery is This? ·

red eyes? discord.

Aotrs Commander

Aotrs Commander #5 · Feb 5th, 2014 · · · I: What Sorcery is This? ·

If you ask me, Lord Vetinari had the right idea about mimes...

Brony_Fife

Brony_Fife #6 · Feb 6th, 2014 · · · I: What Sorcery is This? ·

She never told me she was a mime!

In all honesty though, this was actually a strong start. My only complaints is that the writing could use a little polish (It could use a little bit of the metaphor or other whimsical tools to color each scene), and the ending to this chapter was a tad abrupt.

Pixel Berry