Apple Bloom finds herself on Earth and is taken in and cared for by a homeless man on the streets of New York. Together, they learn the value of true friendship.
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I saw the image and wanted to write a sad story about it. I know it's short, and could be written a whole lot better. But if it brings a tear to your eye, then I've accomplished what I set out to do. It wrecked me at the end.
I must admit it was a good story. Short, indeed, but it was still very good writen and heartwarming. I hope that I can see more fics from you ;)
Manly tears have been shred my friend! *sniff* MANLY TEARS!!
I want to revisit the idea in a longer, less sad story.
Short and to the point. I liked the story. When I first glanced at its length and the POV I had some serious doubts. But I enjoyed the writing and - maybe this was just a psychological effect on my part - the perpetual emptiness throughout the writing. With a lack of any dialogue and minimal description of the actual surroundings, I feel you were able to capture the emotional aspect of the story better until the drop near the end.
But then again, in a story about sacrifice you'd think someone would die.
I'd support you with writing a longer version of this. We really need more depressing stories and human interactions around here. Sounds like Applebloom's had a tough time. Expanding on humans' selfishness and selflessness surely could make for a good ride of a fic. I think this has never been done before too, so there's something for being FIRST.
Though I didn't shed I tear (I'm an evil, evil person
), I'd call this mission success.
yes manly tears have been shed, so many
I'm not in the mood to cry right now, and I'm not legitimately angry; This was a great story, but still...
...YOU BASTARD!
I HATE IT WHEN AUTHORS END A STORY THIS WAY! 
It was good, though.
Damn it the manly tears are being shed.
Short and sad. 
You did wonderful sir just wonderful.
that was a great story. i didn't shed any tears though. there are sadder stuff on here.
Pah, you're all crybabies.
Good day.
I am sheding manly tears today
good job my friend
I lved the idea, I loved the story and I got used to those sort of endings... but if you wanted to bring more tears, I suggest you add lines to the homeless person as he took care of AppleBloom and how he promised to protect her or something like that (honestly, I know this because I wrote a sad story without dialogue once)
Anyways I liked the story 5 stars ( well a thumbs up) a track.
That hit me deep down
Beautiful story
Wellp I'm depressed. Great story by the way!
;_; That's just outright depressing. I didn't need this. ._. It's a good short story, but .... damn....
I'm a sucker for Pony x Human interaction stories. Oh my god, that was adorable, and heartwarming, yet sad and a bit depressing. Perfect combination of the four, Thumbs up!
Due to inside jokes among friends, I have shed my tears o' awesomeness. ( Very different from regular tears. )
You are amazing.
it was a great story. NAO MAKE APPLEBLOOM FIND A DOCTAH AND DEFFIBRILATE DA DEAD GUY
242883 Agreed, my merry friend. This was sad, but not tear-worthy. I've only sobbed over a few things, yet the tears were not manly. They were womanly. I think that doesn't need saying, as women are pathetic and sob all the time, eh.
Wow... Great way to depress me.
APPLEBLOOM!
Waaaahh!
Still, though. Good short story. I just love when pony goes into Human world. Too many vise versa, unless they're done very well.
242990
Ahem to that.
Good day.
It was a nice little story. However, I felt that there was not enough time to really build up to any real emotional impact. The idea behind the story was sad, but the execution, while well written, felt lacking. Personally I think the story would have had more impact if it was told from Apple Bloom's point of view. Even so it was still an enjoyable read.
This was short, heartwarming and a true tearjerker!
You actually made an amazing story, which just about made me shed a tear, in what? 1,161 words? That my friend, is pretty damn amazing!
You have my thanks and thumbs up!
-Glassed
Good job.
I see what you were going for, good ideas. It kind of had a My Little Dashie feel for it. But it takes more than this to make me cry.
She... she makes it back home... right? I just can't... oh God...
You guys, wow. Featured? I'm as speechless as this story. I never imagined one of my stories would get there, let alone a shoddy three hour job. I need to make it up to you somehow. Just... keep an eye on this story. It may not be complete anymore.
He ended his life in the cold, for her
i just gave the rest of my pizza to my best friend, my dog =3
Finally a Applebloom story
Powerful stuff, man.
243013 That sounded vague, but I myself am female. Isn't my sarcasm spiffing?
There were no manly tears, only pure tears
I did not cry. BUT I felt like I was about to. Thank you! *Clap clap clap* I wish you hadn't ended it like that.
-thatguyfromkfc
243182
No I was just thank you for agring with me.
Good day.
MANLY tears, guys. Manly tears....
243204 Ah, I see.
Manly tears here. I felt the ending coming but it still struck a nerve. Poor Applebloom and poor nameless homeless person.
Manly tears were shed over that ending
dude love it made me sad but make a longer version explain how she got there and that but keep it still as sad i miss those ones you gotta make it sad tho :L
I'm sorry, but I was barely affected by that at all. The ending, if anything, struck me as abrupt and a bit empty. Since you only knew the protagonist for about a thousand words, there's no emotional investment in him. In short, this could've been done a lot better.
Hey, the writer's craft is decent, at the very least.
Short and poignant, yet I must agree with a little more time and effort this could have been epically heart-wrenching. It begs so many questions, like how did applebloom get there? Does she talk? More background would have set the stage a little better, as the only emotional investment I had was for Applebloom, and that was only because she's an established character. Overall: pretty good, though it could have held a lot more emotional impact. Other than that, the writing itself was quite good.
Wow. Just wow
NOOOOOOOOOOOO ! I will look after you Applebloom...
Damn it, loved that story, short but sweet. I hope to see more from you in the future even if they are short.
*sniff*
That made water come out of my eyes.
It's good and i will admit i currently look somewhat like this
... But the ending was rather abrupt, with a bit of tweaking it has potential to make anyone sad but at the moment it needs a bit more detail, i assume the hunger got him, but it doesn't give any clue how he died, and her reaction almost says that she's not mournful, only upset that she'll be alone. Maybe thats just me.
(Don't get me wrong i do like it!)
BAD END
Wow. I would never expect it to end this sadly. I kind of saw that coming from when he removed his jacket, but I still didn't want to believe it'd end like this. Eh. That's how life goes, I suppose. But, if you have in mind to give it a more proper ending, like you've said, I'd be more than happy to read it.
It was short, but still left an impact. Good job!