Feeling the LOVE, Nav.

holy crap, calling it now. the persona is 'The Forgemaster' from fanfiction.net!

that or a chuck noris on pot

*Looks at story's length*

This is one of those long, epic stories, huh?

Well, it's off to a good start!

Extremely interesting. I like the idea of man being dead, and him taking the shape of Cain and all that.
I also wonder about the other one of the two that existed in the beginning of his billions of years of life or whatever
was it Order? that would also be cool to see

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I kinda buggered the wording up. The two sentient beings were the original humans. I changed it to 'a handful' instead, since that implies less ambiguity. I'm not saying that Order isn't an entity, but if it is real then it does not take nearly as active of a role as Discord.

Hmm let's check how long this is th- HOLY CRAP

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Some things in life are worth it.

Holy shit with vanilla cream and cherry on top! This thing is HUGE!
I read the prologue and it seemed interesting to me, but the SHEER LENGTH of this story scares me. Plus, I already have too many stories on my 'to read later list' and procrastinate with writing my own fic for far too long

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You can never have too many things to read. Fear not, my child, and read away!

For some reason i cant find Wuten's narration of this lovely story.

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Thanks for letting me know. Pulled the link down and sent him a message asking what's up. Wuten's a fickle one, he is, so it might be a little while before he responds.

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Thank you so very much. I really enjoy this story. I cant wait to read the new chapters.

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Wow re-reading the prologue explains so much of the story once you've read it. Sucks how you're 2/3 of the way finished this story but 1 million words will be the record for a long time.

Cain? As in Deckard Cain? That actually seems fitting.
1511548 Aw, shudup. Look at how long it is now. 800k is BIG and it's still counting.

Wait...Cain? As in the first murderer, cursed by the Lord?

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The very same.

wow
after rereading the prologue and after reading everything up to Chapter Seventy-Three
i understand it so much more now from the prologue it self
just so much foreshadowing i love it
I need to reread a lot of this now
see ya in a few days

ahh yes My Second Life and now this! but wait! what comes after this story? i don' think i'll find another long one like this for a while...

So wait...Discord is going to be the human? I don't like it, it doesn't feel right but i'll give it a chapter and see what happens...

Wow rereading this now really makes you realize just how much foreshadowing there was...

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....you hath confirmed my fears...i am sorry all but.....I WILL NOT BE READING LONG ENOUGH TO TAKE THE PISS OUT OF EVERYTHING!

Another great chapter of the worlds longest pony story.

finally got around reading this and when i finished the chapter
If my eyeballs had lungs they would be gasping...
I do enjoy the subject though. I do not LOVE it however. i am just interested in the idea. hopefully the prolouge is just a slice of the real story.
Just like Love Has Nothing To Do With It i will be posting on every chapter to let you know my thoughts and the pain my eyeballs are willingly accepting in order to get yet another good story into my head

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Warning: The first few chapters past the prologue suck and will hopefully soon be rewritten. It gets much better the farther you go in, or so I've heard.

Any chance you'll up and spell out what the foreshadowing all refers to? Though I suppose it'd be reasonable enough to wait until it's all over, which is apparently pretty soon now.

1815220 Which, by that rationale, means that the Bible is true, which means that Discord is the devil, and therefore there is a God far more powerful than he is since he's naught but a created being himself who gave into jealousy (like Nightmare Moon, I should note), hence why he is bound to this single world as his prison.

Why else would he be wasting so much time on one planet for billions of years when there's a universe of QUADRILLIONS of worlds to play with? Enough to last beyond the end of the universe itself (as calculated by the gradual expansion theory). And since he can reverse time with his hyper god-mode powers (seriously, he is ridiculously overpowered. It's just silly. I mean, getting to try over and over again to convince Celestia? Why? With the power he has he could just force her to think she's agreed. He's utterly a failure at being logical and pragmatic. In an intellectual battle, I'd crush him.) he can watch each and every world from its beginning to its end.

For being so 'all-powerful' he's not as clever as he seems to think. The rules he makes up aren't really that clever. It's the same sort of thing when some villain makes up a riddle and thinks himself so clever that no one can figure out what it means. He literally holds all the cards. There's not so much cunning as there is simply out-god-mode-Stuing everyone and everything. He's made the Elements, given them to adversaries so he can toy with them and pretend that they 'defeat' him, for no purpose whatsoever than to pass the time. That's not a sign of higher intelligence. It's a sign of sado-masochism. You know, the whole concept of him giving 'safe words'? Oh yes, it was quite easy to pick up on that.

You've made Discord a character too powerful to be genuine. You claim that he is smarter, stronger, utterly indestructible, omnipotent, omniscient, omnipresent, can orgasm forever... have I missed anything?

He's the very type of character I make fun of with my mockery of Super God characters, the Deux Ex Insert. Of course, as a REAL person, my powers are so far beyond any characters' that I can just pop in and blip their universe into a void. *smirks* Which is exactly as valid as Discord here. No matter what happens, inevitably Discord wins. And then, inevitably, I destroy him and unmake everything. Boring, isn't it?

That's why professional writers tend to avoid all-powerful characters. You have to either deliberately weaken them or have them give themselves so many handicaps that they just become ludicrous.

It's why Q was so popular in ST:TNG. He was essentially a god who'd existed for countless eons, but he could still learn. And rather than being a dull-witted sadist, his odd way of 'teaching' humanity ended up preventing Picard from destroying the universe in an anti-time hyper-causality paradox. This is also why his latter appearances led to disinterest, as they began to fall to the tired old cliche of the bored immortal, which was formed by philosophers at a time when they still thought the Sun revolved around the Earth.

Why did Discord bother to remake the Solar System to do that anyway? What became of the rest of the planets?

How does this deal with the relativistic effects of light speed given the distance from the Sun means there would be a 9-minute delay between Celestia activating her magic and the Sun rising (assuming her connection utilizes a form of quantum entanglement such that her magic reaches the Sun instantaneously. Oh dear, it seems a scientist is here. How tragic!)

And soon the armies of the Archangel will appear as a small cloud arising from the East and Discord, that old serpent that is called the Devil and Satan, shall be cast into the lake of fire.

And I saw a new heaven and a new Equestria...

*smirks* If yer gonna play with a story, you better be faithful to its ending.

By the way, shame on you for using that silly trope that Equestria is Earth in the future. It makes no sense and clearly belongs in alt-universe story if it is to be used at all. As Vegeta would say, "This is so non-canon, it hurts."

HOW THE HELL AM I GOING TO READ A MILLION GOD-DAMNED WORDS?!?!

I know this is a good story, but this is simply too damn much. I'm sorry, but it's like reading the entire harry potter series in one go. I can't do it.

sorry.

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It's only one go if you don't take breaks in between chapters.

A million words? Meh, its not that bad, I myself can read roughly 300,000 words in a day, depending on how interested I am in a story. (It's true).
I read Eregon in around five hours and that may have been 300,000 words or more.(It was a really good book). Now back too reading!

ye god look at that wall of text! its definitely something i'm gunna read, but it does get a bit daunting looking at the unbroken paragraphs. still a great story so far 9/10

Over 1 million words? Challenge accepted.

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SO much this.

...So, while the author of this story masturbates furiously to his fantasy of an omnipotent, untouchable "sadist God" Discord, I shall be giving a firm thumbs down.

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I agree with you, but you didn't really say anything important.

If you like the guys comment and hate this story, why don't you just give your votes and leave? Or do you really have to let it be known that you of all people hate this story and love that guy's comment?

Fun comes from the risk of loss or failure. Winning is all well and good, but what’s the point of even trying if you already know you’ll come out on top?

Please practice what you preach.

This prologue destroys any chance of discord failing. Even if he loses, he doesn't die, he just gets to wait to play again. If he were less powerful and immortal, his game might be interesting.

Seriously, the actual chapters are good, but this just destroys all hope for anything interesting happening.

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The failing of several heroes tends to be hubris. The hero—or villain, as the case may be—thinks himself impenetrable, completely impervious to harm. In many cases, the legends start out with this. Over the course of the epic, we slowly learn that the hero isn't as perfect or as powerful as he thinks he is. Slowly, imperfections and weaknesses show up.

And we all know what happens in the end.

But when I give my word, when I tell a promise, I always keep it

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If you recall, one of my terms was that no one could know of my existence here. Not a single living soul on this world. And the last time I checked, you and your sister were both quite alive.

Discords alive aint he?
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done?

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He's more of an entity than a living being. A personification of a concept, you could say. I don't think I would call him alive, personally, at least not in this story.

o sweet mother of all Immortal being.....this is going to be fun

Holy fuuuuck this intro is fucking amazing!!

AND IT'S NINETY CHAPTERS LONG!!!

Dat last line

2883348 I must ask, not offensivly but just HOW UTTERLY BORED WERE YOU TO TYPE A STORY WITH OVER ONE MILLION WORDS?1

2999807 I've read stories with word counts over a million before. I think the author is just really enjoying this as a hobby. I'm also very impressed at the quality of writing in this.

Cain, the first murderer, yes indeed he could be the one to create Discord.
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plural Discord, now there's a scary thought.

“No, my dear, I suppose you don’t. I’ve played for chaos all my life. I have created discord. I have torn families apart. I almost never actually hurt anything, though I do cause some manner of torment. I have never—EVER—killed anyone. I have caused others to kill, yes. I have whispered insane torments so long in the mind of some that they kill themselves. But I’ve never actually killed anyone.”

THIS is exactly how i see him. hes the worst kind of Big Bad to deal with

so ... wait ... is discord the human through the whole story? or are there two humans ... yeeaaaa im lost

What the fuck is this crap?
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Damn rereading this chapter and remembering the first one really shows how far nav has come (not like that pervs :3) and I realized what discord was talking about when he was talking about whispering loneliness and stuff I never understood that until now :D damn blueblood and his bitchy bitchness -_- can't wait to see what else I missed :3