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Four spells!? Overkill much? Explains quite a bit.
His evil laugh is hilarious and he should do it more often. This was probably the most badass he has ever been. Raiding ancient castles and ripping through dreamland.
Those oaths though. That lease around his neck is very tight right now.
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Yeah man, soon Twilight's gonna start charging some heavy rent and he'll regret signing that lease. Unless, of course, he finds a good way out of it... If you could see my face right now, it would be an evil smile.
And yes, he does get a few more badass moments. As I'm sure you can tell, Navarone does not fight with his muscles, he fights with his mind. He is dangerously genre savvy, and that helps a lot when he's fighting the kinds of villains that show up in the MLP universe.
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To bad his genre savviness will do jack against Discord.
Another glorious chapter, but as much as I love this story, I can't help but feel that Discord is OP as fuck. Also, is Discord one with Nav? Like does Nav have Discord's memories and vice versa? Regardless, the whole Discord business kills it for me
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Discord is kind of supposed to be OP. The reason he lost in the show is because he was being stupid. When you give him intelligence, look what happens.
And the whole 'Does Nav have Discord's memories?' is the question of the story. Where was Nav begin and Discord end? How closely are they intertwined? And once you figure that out, what are Discord's goals?
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Do you really think the princesses would just let their favorite pet go? You'll see soon what happens.
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Where would he go? The princesses are the biggest political powers on the planet. If he fled anywhere in civilized society, all the princess would have to do was ask and he would be dragged back and handed over with a smile. He has to make some good friends outside of Equestria before he could even hope to stay away for long.
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So... you got a thing for Discord huh? *hint hint*
Frankly I'm just waiting for someone to mess with Taya....Then just watch the blood spill.
But seriously Dude....Great story. Also I think you may need to add more spacing to your paragraphs...Find a beta slave and have it do the spacing for you.
Question though: Have you been writing this and then putting up the chaps the same day? or is it prewritten.
You are a example what all that's great about Fanfiction....Except the clop....I hate the shit on principle
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Discord's a pretty cool cat, I must say. Some of my prereaders have been begging me for clop with him and *insert pony here.* So far I've told them no.
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Taya knows how to look out for herself. You don't survive on the streets of Catro without knowing how. Learning magic just made her even more deadly. And we'll find out soon just how powerful she's getting, and why.
Not sure what you mean about paragraph spacing. I have had some people complain that my paragraphs are too long, if that's what you mean. Or did you mean that I need to double space my stuff? Not sure. If it's the double spacing, I might be able to do that with Word, but since italics don't copy over I might have to do it manually anyway.
It's prewritten, up to a point. I have around 725,000 words already written up, spaced at around 54 chapters. I'll probably cut some of my larger chapters up later one, because some of them just get insane.
And I understand about clop. I was hesitant to write it and I'm not much a fan of it, but some of my prereaders wanted me to try my hand at it and I found that I have a dragon fetish. It just sort of spiraled out of control from there. That's why I include a warning beforehand and a way to skip it.
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Because when Celestia says a creature that not all of the ponies knows has disobeyed her and needs to be punished, that creature will be punished, no questions asked. All she has to do is clop her hooves to have him locked in irons and tortured or whatever. He knows she would do it if he didn't do whatever she demanded. He's just biding his time, right now. Trust me when I say that Navarone is more crafty than some people give him credit for.
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Thank god... That would just be... weird
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I ment the whole double spacing bit.
Now that I think about I kinda felt bad for Taya when she found out Nav killed her Doppelganger in the Dream sequence bit.
Did she feel disappointed?
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Also what would it take for you to up a new chapter..like right now?
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I don't know if disappointed even gets close to how badly she was hurt. She thought that he was more loyal to Luna than to her, since he was willing to so casually throw Taya aside like that. Intellectually she knows that it was a construct, but she also feels betrayed.
I'll see what I can do about double spacing.
And what would it take to get me to put a new one up? Asking. Just a moment.
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Can you please put up a new chapter up right now? Please.
I dislike the oath thing
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Keep reading, then. Check out the next chapter.
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I say Discord is Narv but dosen´t know this and think he joust maked him up/ or Narv is the Humen who created him
Waht ever in the end is Discord like "Ace" from DC And i bet he was born as Human
Why didn't you let Cadence get Spike and Navarone's wedding gift.
Oh lord almighty, this chapter was great!
I mean seriously, most of the time, it had me laughing my ass off, and only a few stories have made me do that in real life.
And the whole dream sequence? Loved it! Was also laughing so hard during the whole thing!
Oh God, his comments and actions as he just slaugthered them all, not giving a damn!
I think this qoute was the best of the lot, imo.
All in all, one of your better chapters, with the one where he won the tournament being the best one, but thats just my opinion.
And, as an award for your hard work, I present to you! The Moustache! Wear it proud!
Oh my god, I can't believe it.
BAND OF THE RED HAND.
I didn't think there was another WoT fan on this site besides me.
I don't know if you take suggestions or not, but regardless whether this would be horrible or not, you write decently so I doubt you would mess it up
Pwease, pwease, pwease...
MLP WoT crossover???
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There are a lot more WoT references than just that one, but most of them are very well hidden and aren't direct mentions. Like, Navarone has compared himself to Mat Cauthon before and he's also used his catchphrase of "Time to roll the dice." There used to be even more references in there, but it looks like I took them out for some reason. Originally, he compared himself to Mat with Tywin when he first met Celestia and she did all she could to get him alone. He also compared Rarity to some of the women from the book way back in chapter three, and mentioned how it was not a favorable comparison. There were probably more. I don't know why I took them out.
All of that said, I don't write crossovers. The idea of an MLP WoT crossover sounds neat, I will admit, and it would possibly even fit in my story because of the great wheel of time, but it's not going to come from me. Just as Thom mentioned America and Moscow shooting nukes at each other in history so far gone that it's nothing but legend and devolved to Mosc and Merk throwing lightning, the ponies could mention ancient stories of how the ancient broken-but-healed dragon forever destroyed the darkness but lost himself in the process.
HA! I love how adding Warhammer 40k immediately became O.P., suck it dreams!
Terminate with extreme prejudice... Sounds a bit like like HK47...
Eeyup, that was awesome!
Ouch a down vote that's harsh :(.
I'm too tired to come up with a witty comment. This chapter was great and I can't wait to read more :)
I have not looked away from this since i started reading... Looked at the clock and almost two days had passed by... I need a life
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This is your life. And if you find the time wasting away on this journey upon which the author has led us, at least you have no life in the company of those in a similar circumstance. And what good company we are.
Right?
As I read this, I can't help but dislike the bits with discord scheming in them. The main story is great and I can't stop reading, but those few parts almost make me want to stop reading this... almost.
2608251 yea discord really just disrupts the story and dose little to advance the plot but overall 9/10 (-1 point due to discord)
Well I didn't like Discord appearing again because I want Nav to be real and not be some little construct. At least the way Discord talked about Nav pointed to Nav being as real as can be, with simply Discord kinda watching it all from inside his head on like a TV as opposed to controlling Nav like a video game.
I loved happy Nav and hope to see more of him, I hope he gets over his sociopath issues and starts pranking again oh god it was hillarious and how the contest turned out? He's a genius badass, I wonder what the armor looked liked though, I keep imagining a slightly more metallic and bulky assassins creed kinda armor, as opposed to smooth plate knight armor
Okay, I finished the story so far. You should incorporate so of these parts in the new arc
(Spoilers ahead)
Im guessing the forbidden zone in the place where Nav went and meet the other humans?
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With the way that area was described, I'd be willing to be that Nav might've came through time... But tha again magic disproves that... So my second guess is that the dimensions are clashing. The third would be that humans have somehow been there before now shh with your spoilers.
Holy shit don't tell me those pods are cyrogenesis pods?! Can't wait till he finds the forbidden zone.
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You know what I will do with your enjoyable masterpiece?
I will print a private copy and bind the fucking pages! So I have a real damn MF book!
A few days ago I printed chapter 34... It came up to 12 pages in DinA4, font size 10 in .html format.
Now imagen printing that in DinA5... round 19 pages each chapter? WTF! Still would be worth it, though I would prefer a SFW version for print.
Damn! I'm gonna look for a nice cover art on deviant art!
After all this time, this makes perfect sense to me...
3640831 He dosen't, sadly.
Don't expect him to let up his tolerate bullshit any time soon, I don't get it really, why couldn't he have like gone after to be Chrysalis' knight instead? Then if they took him away from her it would be a declaration of war.
I understand Nav completely, In the sense that I'd hate to be beholden to someone like he to Luna. It really bothered me how uncaring Luna and Celestia are towards Nav's hate for that sort of thing. It's like the more time he spends with them, the less they care for him an the more they care for themselves, yet at times they pretend to be caring when something he says or does interferes with what they do.
It seems as if Taya is getting distant from Nav, and he doesn't seem to notice. It seems more like a one-sided father-daughterish relationship. All that can be seen from this is plotting, darkness, and betrayal that will most likely end with many regrets and death... but thats just MY guess.
Um just my theory but was that room with metal walkways the origin of all the crazy anthropomorphic creatures of Equestria. We already know that discord talks of the ponies as being "created"
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the ponies are the technological future of the human race.
by which I mean the human in an attempt to use magic tried to turn themselves into unicorns or alicorns, the byproducts of which being pegasus and earth ponies (perhaps discord as well).That would also account for the statue of Morpheus which was another experement into magic.
Now it is time to finish the story and find out if I have the correct headcannon.
Because FUCK THOSE KITTEEEEEESSS
4528355 it sure is a cool theory. Though discord was alive and chaotic before humans. When you get to later chapters it'll make a bit more sense, but not much. Fuck Whatmustido making the story hard as fuck to guess about. But that just makes it a good story. Gotta leave em' guessing.
I like the innocent and relatively naive Cadance. A nice change from the fetish expert Cadance a lot of people portray her as.
You cease to amaze how epic you can be.
The thing about the Changelings, though... actually make sense, if you think about it.
Also, I keep noticing a theme: Discord and Navarone appear to be parallels of each other. Discord distrusts wings, Nav distrusts magic. Discord messes with life for fun, Nav messes with life because of circumstance. Discord acts above everything superciliously because he's Q, Nav acts above everything superciliously because he's a traumatized human. Similar, yet dissimlar.
3999168 I like the way you think AfroBrony
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Um... Why are you insulting the author?