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Well... a perspective swap seems like it would be interesting, but... I'm going to have to cast my vote in with no Perspective Swap.
no swap.
holy fucking shit. Are you fucking with me? WHAT. Like, seriously. I don't even. I give up. So. Yeah. Good chapter.
Perspective is what keeps a large amount of this story good. In first person, having the single main character telling the story, with the rare and brief aside from time to time, the story becomes more gripping and gives me, personally, empathy for the character. Having it switch perspectives for convenience can change the pacing of the story drastically and distracts from the plot and tone.
This story feels somewhat like reading Sherlock stories from the perspective of Watson to me. Nav isn't quite in charge of his destiny, and is nowhere near the point of understanding every detail about the missions he is given or takes upon himself. Still, his intelligence and usefulness lead to unique situations and keep me as a reader interested in him as a character.
Obviously, this is all my opinion :/ and I've been swayed before. So if you can make it work I'll read it just as happily and readily as I read this one.
(And that response, dear god it's retarded.)
you know what to do
EDIT: *sigh* i need to use the dictionary more often...
I say go for the swap.
"It was nice to see such large a large bosom"
Not sure if this is correct or not, but it seems a bit odd.
Also, yes on the swap.
We say swap
Nein. NEIN NEIN NEIN. No swap!
Well, that answers the question of where the exit would let him out.
Normally, perspective swaps in first person stories are pretty jarring, but if it contains essential info, by all means go ahead and do it.
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You mean leave it alone because that's correct? http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/storeys?r=75&src=ref&ch=dic
Tbh, EqD has half a point. The clop scenes on this fic are a huge part of the storyline, and it would be impossible to follow the plot whitout them.
Why do you even have a clop-free version of the fic? A good ammount of Navs problems come from his sexual misfortunes (Kat, Luna, Pinkie and Rarity, just to name a few)
And the story is "sexually transgressive". Just this episode, Nav almost got raped by undead ghouls. Cant get much mor transgressive than that.
Why do you even wan to get your fic in EqD anyways? Not worth dealing whit their staff imo.
I would like the perspective swap.
3981830 curse these complex words that I've never heard before in my life!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i feel like such an idiot... next time i'll use a dictionary before posting
let me guess on this one
AHA the girls finally made him go off the deep end
Go for it. The story has been great so far and I for one want to know what the others went through in that time.
On a side note, the people at EQD wouldn't know a good fic if it bit them in the ass.
Do the Perspective Swap
It depends on who the perspective is for, if it is one of the main six then i vote no, but if it is for say Taya or maybe the Naga then i vote yes.
Considering other stories can use a short perspective swap to get across key info across very well, I say go for it(Also owing to the Rarity swap when she replayed the info to Nav when they switched bodies). I kinda want to see first hand what the other character, whom I can make a guess as to whom, is feeling about the whole situation.
No swap, there's been no reason to swap perspectives before, there shouldn't be one now.
Honestly, roll with the perspective swap for a chapter. I'm curious to see what everyone else was up to while Nav was in hell.
No perspective swap if you ask me, and Equestria Daily is retarded, there's no reason to even bother, really, "unnecessary" scenes is what makes this story so good, details could be labeled that, heck anything that's not the character talking or saying where he is could be labeled that.
The swap would be Taya, Spike, and co. going through the bunker, correct? I would love to see that.
I'm cool with the swap I want to know what happened while he was gone from their point of view
Great chapter as always, worth the wait .3.
And in honesty, perspective swaps are rather boring, if only for me. But whatever you write, I am sworn to read.
So I guess my vote is no.
Clop scenes are kinda necessary. I remember skipping the last luna one. Shit got annoying very quickly.
I'd say perspective swap as long as it's not one of the main six
You can make a perspective swap work if Twilight or Taya write in Nav's journals. A change of pace would be nice, having just one character these past couple chapters was...difficult.
For me, it depends on how long you want to make the swap. If it's anymore then three thousand words than I'd likely get bored and try to just power through it. My vote is going for no, just give us a nice spoken abridged version.
When I read the word 'mannequins' I thought, Oh God. When I read the word 'clown' I thought, Oh hell no. Imagine my surprise when you faked us out with that one. Thank God that Nav is finally out of that hell.
As for the perspective swap, nah, just stick with Nav.
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That's the correct plural of storey meaning a a floor.
Also, you've done what, one PoV swap before, with that bit where Rarity and Celestia fucked? It was alright. I'm not against it.
On the option of swap...You choose. But seriously, storywise, please tell me you aren't making the last two chapters a kind of dream sequence.
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Looking at the end of this chapter, whose perspective would you expect it to be?
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So you want me to leave that alone because it's correct? http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/storeys?r=75&src=ref&ch=dic
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Looking at the end of the chapter, how do you expect the swap would work? Because it won't be someone inserting something into his journals. It'll be Spike telling Nav what happened through his perspective.
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I didn't want my fic there. I wanted to see their excuse for not putting it there. I wasn't expecting them to not even read it.
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That's fucking retarded. Why would I do that?
I'd rather see the story moving and see what develops, so no perspective swap please.
I also have to say your fic is one of the most interesting I have read on fimfiction and some of the buildup is killing me.
Keep on writing, and we'll keep on reading.
Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
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Someone else already replied. I didn't know about story/storey, only color/colour. Also "So you want me to leave that alone because it's correct?" makes you sound like an ass; Like a sentence I'd hear on Youtube.
A condensed version of it.
Much as I love this "The Suffering" quest, I'm hoping that we can move on from this and get back our original quest of insanity. Besides, you've always had a habit of having Nav comb over days and weeks to hasten the pace of the story and skip things that weren't too important, why change that now?
I say go for the swap as it has precedent based off the Rarity perspective chapter when the two switched places. Also, this chapter started to feel like it was dragging two thirds of the way through. Maybe, I myself was getting inundated with the stuff Nav was going through that I began to get bored and it didn't have any effect on me. Where Nav got worn down, I started getting bored.
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I thought it was just a typo, I don't exactly speak British/Canadian English [Google] over here in the United States *shrug*. After re-reading that, makes me wonder why we don't call it Unitedian English or something equally silly based on the name of our country
i knew it was nav just going crazy!
i was thinking about what if all of this isnt real and he was just going absolutely crazy and was having heavy hallucinations? called it
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It's American English. But even in the U.K it isn't used much. We use floors more than storeys.
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Nah nah, I know it's 'American English', my point was for it to be named after our country and not the continent :P
Ah, vintage EqD.
swap please
No swap.
no swap
i think a perspective swap would be a nice addition to the story. so i say "go for it!"
now i have other matters to attend to. so Ta Ta! *Poof!*
(i love the story! i cant wait for the ending! the ultimate battle between Navarone and Discord... and HOPEFULLY nav's real name will be revealed. even if it was just... dave... it would still be nice to know.)
If you want to write from another persons perspective, I'd give the go ahead. You know what you are doing and if you think there is a need for it then make it happen.
No swap. Same reason as some dude above here posted. It's jarring, and makes things confusing. Having the "abridged" version told by Spike would fit much better with how this story has been told so far.