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Midnight Words


DUDE! WHEN DID THIS GET HERE! WORDS, RP, CLOPPONIES! That is all! I HAD TOO MUCH SUGAR AND STUFF!

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Scout, probably the most carefree and upbeat on BLU team, he's always cracking jokes and making fun of himself or others just for the laughs, sure some guys find him annoying, but he didn't care. He was glad he could make someone smile, he always smiles...
Because, sometimes, when he stop smiling, he starts screaming.

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Thanks to my awesome Proofreader Editors,

The Stranger, that mysterious badass!Why U keep changing your name Identity

Stiggerzz, THE WONDERFUL AUSSIE

Sycro! That sexy emo guy!

AND SCP PINKEMENA! THAT CRAZY GUY WE ALL LOVE!

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 182 )
Comment posted by Race9000 deleted Apr 13th, 2013

2416717:flutterrage:!because of you i thought the chapter was going to be way longer!!!!

2416788 When you choose font size, see how it has the number in the text? change that to about 1000 to get that size.

Comment posted by CakeWithIcing deleted Apr 13th, 2013

How the fuck do people make their text this big?

Comment posted by Dancing Dead deleted Sep 18th, 2013
CIA

"You can't hit me, you can't hit my tiny head."

*growl* I take resentment from that line.

Now this is a crossover.
Good luck with this.

2418170>>2416717 Sorry but I have to delete your comments, it super long and some people are having a hard time getting to the bottom of the page

Sorry:fluttercry: but thanks for the feed back:pinkiehappy:

Huh, a new way of entering the story, I like it, more?

OH, I love this. My favorite game is TF2 and when that is combined with MLP just awesome.

Comment posted by Emerald Flight deleted Apr 30th, 2013

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Well, I read your story, and I have to admit, it seemed rather clumsily done. Scout and his rather one-dimensional personality was okay, I suppose, but what really broke it down for me was Pinkie's fourth-wall joke and the grammar taboos. It seemed like needless and rather novice fanservice, which isn't necessary to make a compelling story.

2419952 Don't worry, Pinkie only breaks the 4th wall once in this story.

Hmm... Now this is a story I can get behind. Good job with the first chapter, Midnight Words. Faved, and I'll thumb it up if I like where it goes.

:pinkiesmile:

..... I don't know whether to hate or like this.:unsuresweetie:

The story itself seems fine, but the amount of grammatical errors and run-on sentences just wants to kill it.

2423496 Well, my primary language is Tagalog and English is my secondary language.

I also don't have a proofreader or editor.:unsuresweetie:

One word of advice, try to avoid the game quotes. They always feel forced to me.

2423550 May I make a suggestion?
The Proofreader Group.
Those guys are distilled awesome.

I love your vission of Scoutand the Red/Blu team interactions so far. I am, however, confused. Does this story end a different day it begins, or is it all flashback, or... huh?

HUZZAH! LOVE THE CONCEPT! KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!

Also, if people put gigantic text, I put tiny text! You may not be able to see it... heheheh...

2425201 Well the start is what is happening now, like the whole MvM thing, I pictured that the REDs and BLUs still fight to practice for the robots.

The flashback was the part in Scout's room.

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That was bothering me too, but I just assumed that it was written by Scout, and then it seemed a little more natural.

2429906I thought that way too, but there's a limit to how bad Scout can write.

2425084>>2429906>>2430095

Welp, is my grammar that bad? I'll go look for a proof reader then. Thanks for the feed back:pinkiehappy:

dont know much about team fortress (i think that is what this is) but this is awesome. keep going please. :pinkiehappy:

Very good so far. Was expecting scout to actually be rainbow dash or something. Lets see where this goes.

After looking over a few comments, the question of "why are BLU peeps okay with RED Spy standing in the same room as them?" seems to have been answered, although the start of this story looked like RED and BLU were still fighting each other.

Also, there's no big issue with using game quotes, but allow me to lay down the condition that they are to be used VERY sparingly; quotes will often read as forced mono/dialogue (as someone already said) but if they are used right, can still add to (or at least not take away from) the story.

Also, interesting point of entry.

Huh. Interesting. Just fix up the grammar and stuff for next time. Good job.

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this is fun! :pinkiehappy:
On a related note though it went bye a little quickly

Freakin love it! I play TF2 a lot, and seeing Scout drop into MLP is awesome! Like and Fav. :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by afterceasetoexist deleted Apr 18th, 2013
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