Following a near fatal incident involving her magic, Twilight goes into a deep coma. Her friends continuously visit her in the hospital in hopes of seeing her get better, but each day things worsen for the unicorn. Knowing that their dear friend may not recover, they begin to ponder upon their friendship and what they will do without her there. As time passes, they slowly begin to lose hope and slowly stop visiting their dear friend, who they fear is gone.
Meanwhile, Twilight finds herself in mysterious dark void, which constantly changes. Her mind is haunted by disembodied voices from her hospital room and by two mysterious ponies that she seems strange familiar with. Trying to find out where she is, she traverses the dark void in search of answers. But what she finds isn't what she expected... And it brings upon a terrible realization of where she is and how she got there.
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Cover art by jewlecho on DeviantArt.
interesting story.......I want to see where this goes
also......1.bp.blogspot.com/-_TkbcIBMy1Y/T2Ioh3r-T_I/AAAAAAAABGA/BAJcgUhFm7c/s1600/firstpost.jpg
Looks interesting.
Edit: Shouldn't it be NEAR fatal, and not fatal?
"Following a fatal incident involving her magic, Twilight goes into a deep coma."
>Fatal incident
>Goes into a deep coma
Apart from that, looks interesting.
2078129 Hope to have you stick around!
2078131 Yes, thank you for catching that!
2078136 That is now fixed. Surprising how a simple missing word can mess an entire description up!
Interesting concept. Looking forward where the journey goes.
2078162 Hope you enjoy!
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Great story can't wait for more.
Cant wait!
2078339 2078382 A new chapter should be out today, but that all depends on if I get the time during class. Knowing me, I will.
2078544 Glad to hear! Hope you enjoy!
2079207 Ah, that's a good song as well. I shall now use both as inspiration!
this is such a cool story but its also kinda sad
2079696 Thank you. It's not easy to make a sad story, that's for sure. Well, it is, but isn't at the same time, if that makes sense.
lol
2079753 New chapter is done! Hope you enjoy.
Oh dear...what's twilight gotten herself into?
Yay another great chapter.
Now I want to hug Twilight to help her through the pain.
Truth be told mate, I was hoping to get a more saddening feeling from reading this, but I was disappointed.
On the flip side, I think I will continue to read this....it's got an interesting plot-line.
Toodledoo!
Quillin Words
2082373 Glad you enjoy it, even if it isn't up to your expectations on the sadness level. Hopefully you'll continue to enjoy it, and hopefully you'll find a point that you'll find sad! Anyways, thanks for being honest!
2081705 Thank you for enjoying it!
2080929 Unfortunately, no hugs for her. It's all downhill from here, or it wouldn't deserve a dark tag! And I do plan to earn that dark tag on the Twilight side of the story, and the sad for both sides.
2080237 Something rather terrible.
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Awesome story so far! Twilight's been my fav pony since I became a brony, Dark stories where she's the protagonist are always special to me. I really liked the scene of the thorn jungle, it somehow reminded me of the Lion King, but you know... bloody and gory this time.
I want to know what happens in further chapters
2085317 Working on the third chapter right now which is back in the real world. Just tying up some loose ends, as well as making the connections to what Twilight heard in chapter 2. After that, I'll focus on Twilight for a bit. So be expecting more chapters! If everything goes correctly, and the word counts don't increase too much, there should be a chapter a day.
EDIT: Done! Do enjoy!
Again I heard TAPS playing while reading Twilights deathscene
Don't know what that means so here's to another sleepless night.
2087211 So I wasn't the only one playing TAPS in my head? But don't worry too much... This wasn't the last chapter, although I can't quite say why not.
2087229 I didn't imagine it, it was really playing! I am on a military base, and taps play to signal lights out. It started playing as I started reading 70 bpm. The F*cked up thing is that this is like the sixth time that it happened to me!
2087362 Oh! Well, then thank you for the service!
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I'm a major patriot, and it means a lot!
she can't die......not like this. she's twilight sparkle, most powerful unicorn in equestria......she can't die.....not in some bucking coma.
2087379 I can't reveal any spoilers, but this isn't necessarily the end... How it's not, you'll just have to wait for a new chapter to see! I release them daily or every two days if something comes up.
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Thanks. Still you have to admit that hearing Taps play six different times, in six different stories, at two different bases, in two different timezones, is creepy as all hell.
2087396
celestia damned cliff hangers.....
2087411 Yes, that is quite creepy.
2087424 Oh Did I mention that it was all for the same pony? This ONE>
2087441 Yep, there is a troll at work here... Or a evil force. Or just Discord. Who knows?
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Oh my... I almost shed a tear
It was pretty quickly the next chapter upload, either you must not have it proofread/edited by someone, or you're pretty darn good at writing and placing your ideas swiftly. Or both of them! As far as I can tell, I didn't spot any mistakes, hats-off to you :)
2087473 Nope, don't have a pre-reader or editor. I'm thinking of dropping by a group and getting one, just in case. Anyways, stay tuned for yet another chapter tomorrow!
2087484
You should try this one
http://www.fimfiction.net/group/27/proofreaders-and-people-willing-to-proofread
I got my proofreaders from that group, its amazing and very organized. I'm sure you will find somepony there willing to help you out.
2087502 Thanks! I'll join it and have the next chapter proofread before posting it. Should ensure the best of quality!
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Now my heart is broken in two
2088092 That was definitely not an easy chapter to write. Purposely had some sad songs on to force catharsis upon myself. At the end of the day, I really hope I captured the sadness perfectly!
ok based off the timeline she should be ok, we got the line she heard both in and out of world so she fell asleep in world......hopefully.......
2089055 A new chapter will be released sometime today to put your mind at ease!
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twilightoops:
ok..........:
2089064 You made it happen.....I got the feels. That sadness from each character was incredibly well written, but it was Spike's that really got to me. Congratulations: you gave me the feels.
2089564 Glad to know that I'm capturing the sad essence. I'd do some consoling, but I myself am still a bit cathartic after writing that. But rest assured, the next chapter gets a bit 'happier', and is due for release soon. (I use to term happier very loosely for a reason)
2089596 Can't wait. I'll be keeping a lookout for it.
2089606 And released! This is the chapter that the plot finally kicks in. Hope you enjoy!
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Creepy... check. Sure is...
So do they actually have someone play that or is it all recordings?
You have a talent to update the story every evening when i got home this week
So far I'm enjoying it and looking forward for the next chapter.
2089848 Glad you're enjoying it!