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Shadowheart332


"you take away my world, I take away yours."

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A week has passed after the canterlot wedding. When a living pile of black slime appears at twilight's house. It reminds her of when her friends, her brother, spike, and her mentor did not believe her when she know that something was up with cadence. Now the monster makes her believe that one day they will turn away from her and leave her all alone. Anger will become her weapon, Anger will make them pay. Soon all will know to never turn there back on...VENOM!!!

Story inspired by vampdash's venom rising
edited by King of Kings

Chapters (7)
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Comments ( 62 )

So many new Venom Pony stories. Is there some originating point for this trend, or is it just random factors aligning?

EVERY first letter of a name and secnencte begins with a capotoal letter.

Comment posted by Shadowheart332 deleted Jun 11th, 2014

4528754 will he is my most favorite marvel villein plus he is spider man's most dangerous enemy as i have read.

4529252 he's just will crazy.you could say it's even among all symbiotes.

Hm not a bad concept and not a bad way to start it. My only complaint would be to get a grammar editor but other than that this is looking like a solid Venom story.

Ah an Eight-Legged Freaks reference. I like this story, the grammar needs to be fixed a bit but aside from that it's a great story.

4534490 glad you cough it. At I saw it at school one time. It's good for a spider horror film.:twilightsmile:

The concept is interesting but until you polish up the grammar, I'm not reading it

4546565 that's not nice:twilightangry2: I really like this story:heart: and can't wait to see the sequel:pinkiehappy:

5293048 You can like it, it doesn't matter. But if you like it now, it'd be ten times better when polished up by a decent editor

You mentioned a sequel. Is there a sequel? If so, would you post the link to the sequel in the story's description please? If not, would you remove the chapter mentioning the sequel from the story, either until you make the sequel (if you plan on making the sequel) or permanently (if you do not plan on making the sequel) please? Thank you very much. However, if you do not plan on making a sequel, then shame on you! Shame on you for dangling a promise of a sequel like that in front of our faces and then taking it away! :flutterrage: :raritydespair: :pinkiesad2:

After going to your page, I have found out why the sequel is not made yet. I have also found out that the story that the sequel has been put on hold for is incomplete and has been since 19th Aug 2014. Is there any plans for completing that story in the future? If not, then expect me to get back on your case for the sequel to this story. Also, if you are looking for an editor for this story, I would be happy to do that for you.

5423535 sure........uh how do i do that? do i post my email or something.

5423535 i have started work on the sequel but I've been too busy working( in real life) to write stories.:fluttercry:

5423698
Oh. Okay. Well, I understand that real life takes up time and doesn't leave a lot of time to write stories. Also, how do you do what? If you are talking about the editing of your story, I was just going to post comments on the chapters that have incorrect spelling and grammar.

5423716 also i'm still trying to figure out the grammar, but if you can help with the spelling it would be very helpful. and i'll try and work more on the sequel if it will make everyone happy.

A meter could be seen too the ever peaceful land of equestria, this one however is very different.

This should be A meteor could be seen hurtling towards the ever peaceful land of Equestria. (The reason for this change is because the definition of too is in addition; also, or to a higher degree than is desirable; permissible; or possible; excessively.) This one however is very different from any other meteor in recorded Equestrian history. (This change is to make the sentence more descriptive, however, as it is a sentence change and not a spelling or grammar change, you can decide for yourself whether or not it, after all, it is your story.)

The meter hit in a mater of seconds.

This should be The meteor hit in a matter of seconds.

A unknown black liquid-like thing could be seen making it's way oddly to a tree-like house.

This should be An unknown black liquid-like could be seen making its way oddly to a tree-like house. (The reason for this change is because it's is the contraction meaning it is and the definition of the word its is belonging to or associated with a thing previously mentioned or easily identified.)

Twilight the student of princess celestia. Sleeping soundly, but with in her dreams a horrible nightmare was at hoof.

This should be Twilight, who was the student of Princess Celestia, was sleeping soundly, but within her dreams a horrible nightmare was taking place. (The reason for the complete overhaul of the sentence shown here is because [according to several books] the way that you had it the first time was a sentence fragment that could be avoided by combining the two sentences together as shown. The reason for the capitalization of the word princess in that sentence is because it was a proper noun. For example, Princess Leia is the newest Disney princess. When the word princess is preceding Leia's name, it is part of a proper noun, but when the word princess is following the word Disney, it is not part of a proper noun [or at least, I don't think it is. Is it? Oh well, you get the point.] The reason that the phrase "at hoof" was replaced with taking place in the changed sentence is because the phrase "at hoof" is more than likely the pony version of the human phrase "at hand")

"Evil evil evil.." Another voice Echoed more mare like.

This should be "Evil evil evil..." Another voice echoed more mare like. (The reason for the two changes in this sentence are: an ellipsis has three periods in it, not two, and you shouldn't randomly capitalize words in sentences.)

"W-what's going on g-girls." Twilight said with more fear then she thinks

This should more than likely be "W-what's going on g-girls?" Twilight said with more fear then she thinks.

Twilight then turned from fear to terror as they all looked like they where about to tear her apart. when a black looking thing appears in front of her.

This should be Twilight then turned from fear to terror as they all looked like they were about to tear her apart, when a black looking thing appears in front of her. (the reason for this change is because the definition of where is (in its adverb form): At or in what place, or In what situation or position, or From what place or source, or To what situation; toward what end; (in its conjunction form): At, to, or in a place in which, or At, to, or in a situation in which, or At, to, or in any place in which; wherever, or At, to, or in any situation in which; wherever, or Whereas, or That; (in its pronoun form): At, to, or in a place in which, or What place, source, or cause, or In which. Now, none of these definitions will get across the point that you are trying to make however were you to use the word were in place of the word where, the word were would get across the point that you are trying to make. I would say what the definition of were is, but I don't happen to have a dictionary with me at the moment, and when you look it up, you get a really confusing definition. As for the second change, it is a sentence change and not a spelling or grammar change, you can decide for yourself whether or not it, after all, it is your story.)

"H-hello." twilight said trying figure what just happened.

This should be "H-hello." Twilight said trying to figure out what just happened. (Twilight's name needs to be capitalized, and the rest of the changes to this sentence are sentence changes and not spelling or grammar changes, you can decide for yourself whether or not them, after all, it is your story.)

"It seems I have come at the best."

This should be "It seems I have come at the best time." (the reason for this change is because as it stands, it seems that the symbiote has come at the best what, exactly?

"I take it that these beings are your friends." It said with yet another hiss. While twilight just nodded.

This should be "I take it that these beings are your friends." It said with yet another hiss, while Twilight just nodded. (The first change is a sentence change and not a spelling or grammar change, you can decide for yourself whether or not it, after all, it is your story, however Twilight's name needs to be capitalized.)

and I can give you the power you want...no...what you deserve to make them pay."

This should be and I can give you the power you want...no...that you deserve to make them pay."

"I don't now.." Twilight said as she was almost giving in.

This should be "I don't know..." Twilight said as she was almost giving in. (Remember, ellipses have three periods, not two.)

"The power you gain is twice the power of that of the elements, and beside's with out your element they will be easy prey.

This should be "The power you would gain is twice the power of that of the elements, and besides without your element they will be easy prey."

Twilight just gave evil-like grin as it continued.

This should be Twilight just gave an evil grin as it continued.

"you the strength to over power a Pegasi, the agility to move faster then a earth pony and a pagasi combined, and smarter then a any unicorn, and more power then a alicorn."

This should be "You'll gain the strength to overpower a Pegasus, the agility to move faster than an Earth Pony and a Pegasus combined, become smarter than any Unicorn, and have more power than an Alicorn." (The reason that I replaced the word Pegasi with Pegasus is because Pegasus is the singular form of Pegasi.)

"now what do you say?"

This should be "Now what do you say?"

Said twilight in a dark tone.

This should be Twilight said in a dark tone.

"Good." It said as it wrapped it's self around twilight.

This should be "Good." It said as it wrapped itself around Twilight. (The contraction

it's

is not needed here.)

Spike still sound a sleep. Probably dreaming about rarity again.

This should be Spike was still sound asleep. He was probably dreaming about Rarity again.

When a sound of crawling could clear as day, woke up spike, as he looks for the what made the noise.

This should be Then a sound of crawling that he could hear clear as day woke Spike up, and he looked for what could've made the noise. (sorry about that, I just now realized that would've made more sense)

"Twilight is that you. The dragon Said with a yawn, when he heard hissing

This should be "Twilight is that you?" The dragon said with a yawn, when he heard hissing.

"T-twilight come on now t-this in not f-funny!" Spike said with fear in his voice.when suddenly....

This should be "T-Twilight come on now t-this is not f-funny!" Spike said with fear in his voice, when suddenly....

AAAAAAHHHHHHH"

This should be AAAAAAHHHHHHH!"

Applejack said as she glances to the picture of all them at the wedding
With shinning armor and cadence, now with twilight torn out from the rest of them.

This should be Applejack said as she glances to the picture of all them at the wedding with Shining armor and Cadence, now with Twilight torn out from the rest of them.

"Don't worry rarity we'll get her back one way or another."

This should be "Don't worry Rarity we'll get her back one way or another."

"will tell you soon but right know we need you to send a letter to celestia." Fluttershy said

This should be "we'll tell you soon but right now we need you to send a letter to Celestia." Fluttershy said

"Anyway what just happened where's twi? Spike sill blushing from earlier

This should be "Anyway what just happened where's twi?" Spike said,still blushing from earlier.

everypnoy know

This should be everypony knew

him. "what?"

This should be him. "What?"

Sorry about the fact that the corrections are split into multiple comments for the other chapters, I am currently using a PS3 to access the internet. Now that I've got that out of the way, on with the corrections!

"Ah wonder where twilight is, ah haven't seen her all morning." applejack said as she walked to the library tree.

This should be "Ah wonder where Twilight is, ah haven't seen her all morning." Applejack said as she walked to the library tree.

"Oh you worry to much the egghead is probably just doing more of her studying." rainbow said with a eye-roll after the word "studying" was said.

This should be "Oh you worry too much the egghead is probably just doing more of her studying." Rainbow said with a eye-roll after the word "studying" was said.

"Will I..um..wouldn't hold..um..against her it has been a week since the wedding."

"Well I..um..wouldn't hold..um..against her it has been a week since the wedding."

"And beside I'm sure the darling is just catching up with all the studying. Said rarity

This should be "And besides I'm sure the darling is just catching up with all the studying." Rarity said.

"Even after the super duper fun wedding last week?" Said pinkie pie hopping all the way as usual.

"Even after the super duper fun wedding last week?" Pinkie Pie said, hopping all the way as usual.

"Hmm no answer thats weird we almost always here spike "groan" or twilight go "spike get the door" which is silly sense spike would have to tear the door off the complete the order." Pinkie said and finished with a squee

This should be "Hmm, no answer, that's weird. We almost always hear Spike groan or Twilight go "Spike, get the door" which is silly since Spike would have to tear the door off in order to complete the order." Pinkie said and finished with a squee.

All the other just give pinkie blank looks.

This should be All the others just gave Pinkie blank looks.

Comment posted by King of Kings deleted Dec 25th, 2014

"look like the egghead really let the place go." Rainbow said as she flys

This should be "Looks like the egghead really let the place go." Rainbow said as she flew

to want find a reason to leave, but her worries for twilight keep her from doing that.

This should be to want find a reason to leave, but her worries for Twilight keep her from doing that.

"My word this place needs to be keep clean more often remind me to get twilight to hire an exterminator when we find her."

This should be "My word this place needs to be kept clean more often remind me to get Twilight to hire an exterminator when we find her."

Suddenly they all hear a low "groan" from in twilight's bedroom.

This should be Suddenly they all hear a low "groan" from inside Twilight's bedroom.

"Now that what i was whetting to hear." Pinkie said some how knowing it was spike.

This should be "Now that was what I was waiting to hear." Pinkie said somehow knowing it was Spike.

They all run/fly up to the bedroom, Where they find spike in a web still groaning.

This should be They all run/fly up to the bedroom, where they find Spike in a web, still groaning.

"Hold on partner well have ya out as soon as possible."

This should be "Hold on partner we'll have ya out as soon as possible."

Applejack said as she rainbow and pinkie are tearing the web.

This should be Applejack said as she, Rainbow, and Pinkie are tearing up the web.

Said fluttershy with a hint of sadness in her voice.

This should be Fluttershy said with a hint of sadness in her voice.

"How ever did this most have got to twilight too." Rainbow said angrily

This should be "Whoever did this must have got to Twilight too." Rainbow said angrily.

while pointing a hoof to what looks twilight walking in from who knows where.

This should be while pointing a hoof to what looks like Twilight walking in from who knows where.

"Do you not see all webs every where?"

This should be "Do you not see all the webs everywhere?"

I will combine all of the comments when I get access to a computer.

Twilight said with out even flinching at rainbow's out burst.

This should be Twilight said without even flinching at Rainbow's outburst.

"Are you alight sugercube, you don't seem to be your normal self." Applejack said with a raised eyebrow

This should be "Are you alright sugarcube, you don't seem to be your normal self." Applejack said with a raised eyebrow.

Ya we've hear'ed that before now what are you hiding twi. Rainbow said with her hoofs crossed.

This should be "Yeah we've heard that before, now what are you hiding Twi." Rainbow said with her hooves crossed.

twilight shouted with a dark tone.

This should be Twilight shouted with a dark tone.

Everypony froze from what they hear'ed.

This should be Everypony froze from what they heard.

Rainbow said in defense with applejack standing next to her.

This should be Rainbow said in defense with Applejack standing next to her.

until twilight did what they all didn't expect.

This should be until Twilight did what they all didn't expect.

A black liquid moved over twilight revealing something worst then any other enemy the elements ever faced.

This should be A black liquid moved over Twilight revealing something worse than any other enemy the elements had ever faced.

It had white dager like teeth in rows

This should be It had white dagger like teeth in rows

what looked like a spider logo colored white on it's chest.

This should be what looked like a spider logo that was pure white on its chest.

The rest of it's body colored pitch black.

This should be The rest of its body was colored pitch black.

Letting out menacing roar that felt let daggers hitting your face.

This should be It let out a menacing roar that felt like daggers hitting your face.

All froze in now complete fear, Rainbow and Applejack broke away from there fear charge at the monster.

This should be All frozen now completely in fear, Rainbow and Applejack broke away from their fear and charged at the monster.

Applejack said circling the beast, twilight had none of it and slammed Applejack into the door.

This should be Applejack said, circling the beast, Twilight had none of it and slammed Applejack into the door.

"What ever you call your self

This should be "Whatever you call yourself

NOPONY ATTACKS MY FRIENDS AND GET

This should be NOPONY ATTACKS MY FRIENDS AND GETS

AWAY WITH IT!" Rainbow shouted, which venom

This should be AWAY WITH IT!" Rainbow shouted, which Venom

didn't even flench

This should be didn't even flinch

only made rainbow angrier, she swoops down to take that

This should be which only made Rainbow angrier, she swoops down to take the

thing out but to her surprise the beast take in it's horn and grows out wings

This should be thing out but to her surprise the beast take in its horn and grows out wings

and take off toward rainbow with some as a "whaa" venom gets a hold of Rainbow and throws her into the wall

This should be and takes off towards Rainbow with some as a "whaa" Venom gets a hold of Rainbow and throws her into the wall.

She hissed as she reveled her true face

This should be She hissed as she revealed her true face.

"Twilight.." Fluttershy said only to be cut short by venom.

This should be "Twilight..." Fluttershy said only to be cut short by Venom.

Twilight/venom shouts making fluttershy shrink.

This should be Twilight/Venom shouts making Fluttershy shrink.

"Why are you doing this twilight?"

This should be "Why are you doing this Twilight?"

Rarity said both with worry and anger

This should be Rarity said both with worry and anger.

rarity and fluttershy facehoof in the background.

This should be Rarity and Fluttershy facehoofed in the background.

Ignoring pinkie's question, venom answered rarity's question

This should be Ignoring Pinkie's question, Venom answered Rarity's question

that we know that the changeling queen was imposing as cadence

This should be that we know that the changeling queen was imposing as Cadence

"Is that what this is about I though

This should be "Is that what this is about I thought

Venom shouted bucking rainbow back into the wall.

This should be Venom shouted bucking Rainbow back into the wall.

"Anyway...now that we have the power we will make sure that day will never happen AGAIN!! Venom growled as she stomped her hooves on the ground with enough force to crate a Tidel wave. "now all of you will pay a great price for that day with your lives." Venom said while hissing.

This should be "Anyway...now that we have the power we will make sure that day will never happen AGAIN!!" Venom growled as she stomped her hooves on the ground with enough force to create a tidal wave. "Now all of you will pay a great price for that day with your lives." Venom said while hissing.

first you attack spike then you attack both rainbow dash and applejack, and now threaten us for something that was already put behind us. I'm sorry twilight but you lift me no choice." She said in a angry tone that everypony knows too will.

This should be first you attack Spike then you attack both Rainbow Dash and Applejack, and now you threaten us for something that was already put behind us. I'm sorry Twilight but you've left me no choice." She said in a angry tone that everypony knows too well.

shouted putting down spike in rarity's hooves.

This should be shouted, putting down Spike in Rarity's hooves.

ENOUGH!!

This should be "ENOUGH!!"

Fluttershy then then walked to venom but stoped right in front of her.

This should be Fluttershy then then walked to Venom but stopped right in front of her.

Fluttershy then closed her eyes and opened them back up reveling what all though she would never have to use on another pony.

This should be Fluttershy then closed her eyes and opened them back up revealing what all thought she would never have to use on another pony.

Venom soon was over come this unknown force she then roars at fluttershy how doesn't move a muscle.when suddenly
A orange blurr whams into venom sending her out the window where they all hear a loud thud.

This should be Venom soon was overcome by this unknown force but she then roars at Fluttershy who doesn't move a muscle, when suddenly a orange blur whams into Venom sending her out the window where they all hear a loud thud.

"Hey sugercube didn't know you had in you." Applejack said as she comes back to fluttershy.

This should be "Hey sugarcube didn't know you had in you." Applejack said as she comes back to Fluttershy.

"Ya..um...nether did I." Fluttershy said trying to attract anymore eyes to her self.

This should be "Ya..um...neither did I." Fluttershy said trying to attract anymore eyes to herself.

"Uh girls twi is gone!"

This should be "Uh girls Twi is gone!"

"Will i think it's to late to say that this whole room reminds me of a movie where radioactive waste is dumped and mutates spiders into Giant pony-eating spiders."

This should be "Well I think it's to late to say that this whole room reminds me of a movie where radioactive waste is dumped and mutates spiders into Giant pony-eating spiders."

"What are you talking about pinkie and more importantly what the buck are movies."

This should be "What are you talking about Pinkie and more importantly what the buck are movies?"

"But in all seriousness I for one think we should get spike to send a letter to celestia to tell her what maybe she knows what that thing is that must have control of twilight."

This should be "But in all seriousness I for one think we should get Spike to send a letter to Celestia to tell her what maybe she knows what that thing is that must have control of Twilight."

As soon as she said that spike suddenly woke up " oh my head feels like it was thrown to canterlot and back."

This should be As soon as she said that Spike suddenly woke up. "Oh my head feels like it was thrown to Canterlot and back."

"But in all seriousness I for one think we should get spike to send a letter to celestia to tell her what maybe she knows what that thing is that must have control of twilight."

This should be "But in all seriousness I for one think we should get Spike to send a letter to Celestia to tell her what maybe she knows what that thing is that must have control of Twilight."

As soon as she said that spike suddenly woke up " oh my head feels like it was thrown to canterlot and back."

This should be As soon as she said that Spike suddenly woke up. "Oh my head feels like it was thrown to Canterlot and back."

applejack come to support her.

This should be Applejack came to support her.

after much talk with spike about the whole twilight and venom thing.spike finally sends a letter to princess celestia. soon enough they receive letter back telling them to get on a train to canterlot as fast as possible.

This should be after much talk with Spike about the whole Twilight and Venom thing. Spike finally sends a letter to Princess Celestia. soon enough they receive letter back telling them to get on a train to Canterlot as fast as possible.

locution: canterlot

This should be Location: Canterlot

in the throne room celestia can be seen pacing with worry. Luna on the other hoof worried but did not really showed it.

This should be in the throne room Celestia can be seen pacing with worry. Luna, on the other hoof, was just as worried, but did not really show it.

"is there anything i can do for you Tia."

This should be "Is there anything I can do for you, Tia?"

"i'm afraid not my sister." celestia stated. when they heard a guard approach with news.

This should be "I'm afraid not my sister." Celestia stated, when they heard a guard approach with news.

"your highness they have arrived." stated the unicorn guard. while the five ponies and dragon come in right behind.

This should be "Your Highnesses they have arrived." stated the unicorn guard, while the five ponies and dragon came in right behind.

"good." celesia said while turning to Luna.' sister i wish to speck to them alone." stated celestia.

This should be "good." Celestia said while turning to Luna. 'Sister I wish to speak to them alone." stated Celestia.

"it seems Celestia is in need of me, it says it has to do with my....sister."

This should be "It seems Celestia is in need of me, it says it has to do with my....sister."

"what is it dear?" said Cadence with worry

This should be "What is it dear?" said Cadence with worry.

"hmm whats this?" Shining said mostly to him self

This should be "Hmm what’s this?" Shining said mostly to himself.

"Spike if you please?" asked Celestia while spike saluted, took the scroll and sends it on its way to Shining Armor.

This should be "Spike if you please?" asked Celestia while Spike saluted, took the scroll and sends it on its way to Shining Armor.

"yes but i think shining is more up to this task this his new wife, and because i think cadence would only remind Twilight more the "event"." said Celestia now preparing the massage to be sent.

This should be "Yes but I think Shining is more up to this task this his new wife, and because I think Cadence would only remind Twilight more of the "event"." said Celestia now preparing the massage to be sent.

"but what about Cadence and are those two on a honeymoon?" said Spike

This should be "But what about Cadence and aren’t those two on a honeymoon?" Spike asked.

" hold it. i'm going to send a message to Twilight's brother he may want both to know about this and to help." said Celestia writing a massage to Shining Armor.

This should be "Hold it. I'm going to send a message to Twilight's brother. He may want to know about this, and he may be able to help." said Celestia writing a message to Shining Armor.

'will what are we waiting for lets go find Twilight!." said Pinkie bouncing to the exit.

This should be “Well what are we waiting for let’s go find Twilight!" said Pinkie bouncing to the exit.

"it seems to also hate fire." said Celestia

This should be "It also seems to hate fire." Celestia said.

"i know the feeling." said Fluttershy looking at the ground.

This should be "I know the feeling." said Fluttershy looking at the ground.

"the Symbiote seems to hate loud noises. said Celestia.

This should be "The Symbiote seems to hate loud noises.” Celestia said.

and why is that? said Rainbow.

This should be “And why is that?” Rainbow asked.

"its not as easy as you think, for we where only able to defeat it last by using my sister's loud voice.' said Celestia

This should be "It’s not as easy as you think, for we were only able to defeat it last by using my sister's loud voice.” Celestia said.

"any way ah think we should do something before that thing gets somepony injured." stated Applejack while the others nod in agreement.

This should be "Anyways ah think we should do something before that thing gets somepony injured." stated Applejack while the others nod in agreement.

"will Fluttershy it is called a Symbiote as it was named when me and my sister first encountered it." said Celestia

This should be "Well Fluttershy it is called a Symbiote as it was named when me and my sister first encountered it." Celestia said.

"but what...um...is the name the creature?' asked Fluttershy

This should be "But what...um...is the name the creature?' Fluttershy asked.

"the creature bonds with a "host" which it needs to survive. but to the host it gets power and the creature makes the host want to kill any that think other wise. Celestia said

This should be "The creature bonds with a "host" which it needs to survive. But to the host it gives power and the creature makes the host want to kill any that think otherwise.” Celestia said.

"it feeds off of anger eww." said Rarity with shiver at the thought of it feeding on her.

This should be "It feeds off of anger eww." Rarity said with a shiver at the thought of it feeding on her.

"that is because the creature feeds off of anger and it must of sensed it in Twilight." said Celestia

This should be "That is because the creature feeds off of anger and it must have sensed it in Twilight." Celestia said.

"but why did it chose now to return and why did it chose Twilight?" said Rainbow.

This should be "But why did it choose now to return and why did it choose Twilight?" Rainbow asked.

'will it seems a beast has returned to Equestria even though we had thought that it would not return for another million years." stated Celestia

This should be “Well it seems a beast has returned to Equestria even though we had thought that it would not return for another million years." stated Celestia.

"now as you maybe wondering what has happened to Twilight and what is making her act soo aggressive to others." said Celestia receiving nods from all of them.

This should be "Now may be wondering what has happened to Twilight and what is making her act so aggressive towards others." said Celestia receiving nods from all of them.

after much talk with Spike about the whole Twilight and Venom thing. Spike finally sends a letter to Princess Celestia. soon enough they receive letter back telling them to get on a train to Canterlot as fast as possible.

This should be After much talk with Spike about the whole Twilight and Venom thing. Spike finally sends a letter to Princess Celestia. Soon enough they receive letter back telling them to get on a train to Canterlot as fast as possible.

in the throne room Celestia can be seen pacing with worry.

This should be In the throne room Celestia can be seen pacing with worry.

"good." Celestia said while turning to Luna. 'Sister I wish to speak to them alone." stated Celestia.

This should be "Good." Celestia said while turning to Luna. “Sister, I wish to speak to them alone." stated Celestia.

"Now may be wondering what has happened to Twilight and what is making her act so aggressive towards others." said Celestia receiving nods from all of them.

This should be "Now you may be wondering what has happened to Twilight and what is making her act so aggressive towards others." Celestia said, receiving nods from all of them.

"The creature bonds with a "host" which it needs to survive. But to the host it gives power and the creature makes the host want to kill any that think otherwise.” Celestia said.

This should be "The creature bonds with a ‘host’ which it needs to survive. But to the host it gives power and the creature makes the host want to kill any that think otherwise.” Celestia said.

"But what about Cadence and aren’t those two on a honeymoon?" Spike asked.

This should be "But what about Cadence? Aren’t those two on a honeymoon?" Spike asked.

"Yes but I think Shining is more up to this task this his new wife, and because I think Cadence would only remind Twilight more of the "event"." said Celestia now preparing the massage to be sent.

This should be "Yes but I think Shining is more up to this task than his new wife, and because I think Cadence would only remind Twilight more of the ‘event’." Celestia said, now preparing the message to be sent.
General grammar rule to remember: New speaker means a new paragraph. Make sure to go back to all of your chapters and implement this change.

back at canterlot

This should be Back at Canterlot

shining was arriving to canterlot after the news about his sister.

This should be Shining was arriving at Canterlot after the news about his sister.

he could not help but feel he was responsible for what is happening.

This should be He could not help but feel he was responsible for what is happening.

as soon as he enters the throne room he sees all the others including celestia.

This should be As soon as he enters the throne room he sees all the others including Celestia.

"alright what is this all about and what does it have to do with my sister?" asked shining in calm but firm manner.

This should be "Alright what is this all about and what does it have to do with my sister?" Asked Shining in a calm but firm manner.

"will shining i called you here for a reason but you must keep yourself calm for what i'm about to tell you." said celestia.

This should be "Well Shining I called you here for a reason but you must keep yourself calm for what I'm about to tell you." Celestia said.

shining armor breaths in and out prepared for the worst.

This should be Shining Armor breathed in and out and prepared for the worst.

"i'm sure that you have been told of the legend of the symbiotes." stated celestia.

This should be "I'm sure that you have been told of the legend of the symbiotes." stated Celestia.

"yes, but was that just an old mare's tale?" asked shining wondering what a myth has to do with this.

This should be "Yes, but wasn’t that just an old mare's tale?" Shining asked wondering what a myth has to do with this.

"unfortunately that tale is as real as discord." said celestia.

This should be "Unfortunately that tale is as real as Discord." Celestia said.

now shining could almost now know what the bad news was as celestia continued.

This should be Now Shining could almost know know what the bad news was as Celestia continued.

"it seem as though a symbiote has come to equestria in search of a host and i fear that host is twilight." stated celestia

This should be "It seems as though a symbiote has come to Equestria in search of a host and I fear that host is Twilight." stated Celestia

"m-my sister, we have to do something before she..." said shining only to be cut off by celestia.

This should be "M-my sister, we have to do something before she..." Shining said only to be cut off by Celestia.

"falls victim to the symbiote. yes i agree. which is why i'm sending you and the elements back to ponyville to confront this venom and free twilight from the symbiote. and if you can capture the symbiote." said celetia as she prepared things they will need for the battle to come.

This should be "Falls victim to the symbiote. Yes I agree. Which is why I'm sending you and the Elements back to Ponyville to confront this Venom and free Twilight from the symbiote, and if you can, to capture the symbiote." said Celestia as she prepared the things that they would need for the battle to come.

"what about you aren't you coming with us.' asked rainbow.

This should be "What about you, aren't you coming with us?” Rainbow asked.

"i will soon but as a last resort." said celestia

This should be "I will soon but as a last resort." Celestia said.

with that they all exit the throne room set course for ponyville

This should be With that they all exit the throne room set on course for Ponyville

location: ponyville or whats still standing anyway

This should be Location: Ponyville or what’s still standing anyway (another way to put this is Location: The ruins of Ponyville)

once they arrive they all soon notice the damage done along with dark clouds.

This should be Once they arrived they all soon noticed the damage done along with dark clouds.

"wow ponyville really let its self go." stated rainbow

This should be "Wow Ponyville really let itself go." Rainbow stated.

"no it's not silly ponyville is right here." said pinkie, while everypony facehoofed or rolled there eyes.

This should be "No it's didn’t silly Ponyville is right here." said Pinkie, while everypony facehoofed or rolled their eyes.

"twilight most have been searching for you all after your first encounter." said shining looking around at the damages. when they hear a voice behind them

This should be "Twilight most have been searching for you all after your first encounter." Shining said looking around at the damages. Then they heard a voice behind them.

"will will we were about to think you had flied for your lives, glad we were wrong. said twilight in a dark tone.

This should be "well well we were about to think you had fled for your lives, glad we were wrong.” Twilight said in a dark tone.

"twi you need to get a hold your self this thing making you do this. just back down now and we wont hurt you." said rainbow as all got in a defense position.

This should be "Twi you need to get a hold yourself this thing is making you do this. Just back down now and we won’t hurt you." Rainbow said as they all got in a defensive position.

"oh but then it would not be any fun NOW WOULD IT!!" said twilight as she shot a bolt of magic at rainbow dash.

This should be "Oh but then it would not be any fun NOW WOULD IT!!" Twilight said as she shot a bolt of magic at Rainbow Dash.

"ha ya messed." smirked rainbow.

This should be "Ha ya messed." smirked Rainbow.

then twilight transformed into venom and shifted from unicorn to pagasi and took off slamming head on into rainbow dash who landed in a broken house. then twilight transformed into venom and shifted from unicorn to pagasi and took off slamming head on into rainbow dash who landed in a broken house.

This should be Then Twilight transformed into Venom and shifted from Unicorn to Pegasi and took off, slamming her head into Rainbow Dash who landed in a broken house.

venom then let out a loud roar.

This should be Venom then let out a loud roar.

applejack and rarity charged at venom who now landed.

This should be Applejack and Rarity charged at Venom who now landed.

to there surprise venom shifted from pagasi to earth pony and slammed her hooves on the ground creating an earthquake which hit both applejack and rarity.

This should be to their surprise Venom shifted from Pegasi to Earth Pony and slammed her hooves on the ground creating an earthquake which hit both Applejack and Rarity.

rainbow was back in action as she and fluttershy tried to attack venom.

This should be Rainbow was back in action as she and Fluttershy tried to attack Venom.

venom then shifted from earth pony to unicorn. she then used her magic to grab fluttershy in midair and swung her at rainbow slamming both on the ground.

This should be Venom then shifted from Earth Pony to Unicorn. She then used her magic to grab Fluttershy in midair and swung her at Rainbow slamming both of them on the ground.

venom then let a chuckle.

This should be

she turns to see a familer face. " will we did not expect to see you here." said venom with a hiss.

This should be She turns to see a familiar face. "Well we did not expect to see you here." Venom said with a hiss.

"twily remember who you are..." said shining armor ony to be cut short by a bolt of magic hitting him square in the chest.

This should be "Twily remember who you are..." said Shining Armor only to be cut short by a bolt of magic hitting him square in the chest.

"NEVER CALL US THAT WE ARE VENOM!!" shouted venom in anger.

This should be "NEVER CALL US THAT WE ARE VENOM!!" shouted Venom in anger.

shining trying to stand back up turn his head to pinkie and said " go get anything loud you have." pinkie not know what he was going at with this just shrugged and jumped all the way to sugercube corner.

This should be Shining, trying to stand back up, turned his head to Pinkie and said "go get anything loud you have." Pinkie, not knowing what he was getting at with this, just shrugged and jumped all the way to Sugarcube Corner.

"i don't want to hurt you twily, but i will if i must." said shining as he got back up.

This should be "I don't want to hurt you Twily, but I will if I must." said Shining as he got back up.

he then shot a beam of magical energy at venom, who in turn did the same.as both beams hit each other, venom soon finds that she becoming over powered and is hit and sent flying as the beam continued to hit her and slammed into a building which then falls apart on top of her.

This should be He then shot a beam of magical energy at Venom, who in turn did the same. As both beams hit each other, Venom soon finds that she becoming overpowered and is hit and sent flying as the beam continued to hit her and slammed into a building which then falls apart on top of her.

panting shining and the four others approach the wrecked building

This should be Panting, Shining and the four others approached the wrecked building.

soon a rumble was hear as venom jumped right out and lands in front of them, they all get back in defense position.

This should be Soon a rumble was heard as Venom jumped right out and lands in front of them. As Venom landed, they all got back in defense position.

"we must say we underestimated you shining armor, but we have one more trick up our sleeves." hissed venom

This should be "We must say we underestimated you Shining Armor, but we have one more trick up our sleeves." hissed Venom.

she then started anther transformation, as her horn grow longer and grow a pair of larger wings, to finish it she grow to the size of Luna.

This should be She then started anther transformation, as her horn grew longer and grew a pair of larger wings. When the transformation was complete, she was the size of Luna.

as she landed. she let an angrier roar. thunder could be heard all around as it started to rain.

This should be As she landed, she let an angrier roar, and thunder could be heard all around as it started to rain.

all froze in fear. shining was the first to speck, " that's impossible."

This should be all froze in fear. Shining was the first to speak, "That's impossible."

with that venom charged at them.

This should be With that Venom charged at them.

"Alright what is this all about and what does it have to do with my sister?" Asked Shining in a calm but firm manner.

This should be "Alright what is this all about and what does it have to do with my sister?" Shining asked in a calm but firm manner.

"well well we were about to think you had fled for your lives, glad we were wrong.” Twilight said in a dark tone.

This should be "Well well, we were about to think you had fled for your lives, glad we were wrong.” Twilight said in a dark tone.

to their surprise Venom shifted from Pegasi to Earth Pony and slammed her hooves on the ground creating an earthquake which hit both Applejack and Rarity.

This should be To their surprise Venom shifted from Pegasi to Earth Pony and slammed her hooves on the ground creating an earthquake which hit both Applejack and Rarity.

as pinkie reentered sugercube corner, she rushed to her room upstairs and looked for anything useful( still wondering why shining needed anything that makes a loud noise), she hound a horn, a trumpet, etc. once she found anything she found "useful" she made her way back down stairs along with her iconic party cannon. you can never be too sure.

This should be as Pinkie reentered Sugarcube Corner, she rushed to her room upstairs and looked for anything useful(still wondering why Shining needed anything that makes a loud noise), she hound a horn, a trumpet, etc. once she found anything she found "useful" she made her way back down stairs along with her iconic party cannon. You can never be too sure.

loud booms could all around as buildings crumbled, and blasts of magic hit everywhere.

This should be Loud booms could all around as buildings crumbled, and blasts of magic hit everywhere.

a rainbow blur hit the ground covered in dirt, followed by an orange and white blurs both slamming the side of a house( not killing them of course.) while venom as an alicorn had a hold of fluttershy in her magical grasp.

This should be a rainbow blur hit the ground covered in dirt, followed by an orange and white blurs both slamming the side of a house (not killing them of course,) while Venom as an alicorn had a hold of Fluttershy in her magical grasp.

" we are starting to wonder how it is you four got the elements, when you can't even fight with mine messing" venom chuckled while looking at fluttershy.

This should be "We are starting to wonder how it is you five got the elements, when you can't even fight with mine missing" Venom chuckled while looking at Fluttershy. (there are six elements of harmony, not five, therefore there are five ponies that she would be wondering about, not four)

"you were the one who helped us figure out who we are twilight!" whimpered fluttershy nearly gasping for air, while venom simply growled at her.

This should be "You were the one who helped us figure out who we are twilight!" Fluttershy whimpered nearly gasping for air, while Venom simply growled at her.

"you always were kindest of us.but you could never make the hardest decisions!" growled venom threatening to kill her. until a rainbow blur hit her in the back letting go of fluttershy.

This should be "you always were kindest of us. But you could never make the hardest decisions!" growled Venom threatening to kill her. Until a rainbow blur hit her in the back letting go of Fluttershy.

"lay anther hoof on her and i'll buck the crap out you symbiote!" shouted rainbow dash in threatening manner.

This should be "Lay anther hoof on her and I'll buck the crap out you symbiote!" shouted Rainbow Dash in a threatening manner.

" we all may have been the elements in the past but now there shill ONLY BE ONE!! roared venom as she raised her hooves in slow motion to crush rainbow's skull, then a blast of magic hit venom in the side, making her turn to shining armor who looked worn out.

This should be "we all may have been the elements in the past but now there shall ONLY BE ONE!!” roared Venom as she raised her hooves in slow motion to crush Rainbow's skull, then a blast of magic hit Venom in the side, making her turn to Shining Armor who looked worn out.

"twily GASP this madness has GASP to end!" said shining armor trying to catch a breath.

This should be "Twily GASP this madness has GASP to end!" said Shining Armor trying to catch a breath.

"WE SAID NEVER TO CALL US THAT HOW MANY TIMES DO WE HAVE TO SAY IT!!!!" shouted venom more angrier then ever. "WE SAID NEVER TO CALL US THAT HOW MANY TIMES DO WE HAVE TO SAY IT!!!!" shouted venom more angrier then ever.

This should be "WE SAID NEVER TO CALL US THAT HOW MANY TIMES DO WE HAVE TO SAY IT!!!!" shouted Venom angrier than ever.

with that said shining shot another beam at venom, but this time venom was ready and vanished and reappeared behind shining who was shocked, venom just smirked and bucked shining, he hit head first through on house and into anther.

This should be With that said Shining shot another beam at Venom, but this time Venom was ready and vanished and reappeared behind Shining who was shocked, Venom just smirked and bucked Shining, who went head first through one house and into another.

"YOU CALL YOUR SELF'S THE ELEMENTS OF HARMONY, WITH OUT US YOU ARE NOTHI-AAAAAHHHHHH." venom shouted only until she was hit in the back by a powerful magic blast sending her crashing into town hall.

This should be "YOU CALL YOURSELVES THE ELEMENTS OF HARMONY, WITH OUT US YOU ARE NOTHI-AAAAAHHHHHH." Venom shouted only until she was hit in the back by a powerful magic blast sending her crashing into town hall.

"hope i'm not late." stated celestia

This should be "Hope I'm not late." stated Celestia

"will actually your just in time your Highness." stated shining, as celestia looked at all the damaged houses and buildings.

This should be "well actually your just in time your Highness." stated Shining, as Celestia looked at all the damaged houses and buildings.

all turned as they heard a loud roar comeing under the ruble of town hall.

This should be all turned as they heard a loud roar coming under the rubble of town hall.

venom came charging out heading straight for celestia with rage in venom's eyes ramming celestia sending her into a house.

This should be Venom came charging out heading straight for Celestia with rage in Venom's eyes ramming Celestia sending her into a house.

"WE HAVE HAD ENOUGH OF THIS NOW THAT ALL OF YOU ARE HERE TO WITNESS YOUR DEMISE!!!!" shouted venom with rage filled eyes. as she was ready to start with celestia she soon realized that one was missing. the pink one, pinkie pie!

This should be "WE HAVE HAD ENOUGH OF THIS NOW THAT ALL OF YOU ARE HERE TO WITNESS YOUR DEMISE!!!!" Venom shouted with rage filled eyes. As she was ready to start with Celestia she soon realized that one was missing. The pink one, Pinkie Pie!

without warning a really loud noise hit her eardrums, venom then got down on the ground roaring in pain.

This should be Without warning a really loud noise hit her eardrums, Venom then got down on the ground roaring in pain.

right behind venom was pinkie with large speakers hooked to a microphone( how or where pinkie got those we may never know.)while pinkie blowing into her incitement with all her mite.

This should be right behind Venom was Pinkie with large speakers hooked to a microphone( how or where Pinkie got those we may never know.) while Pinkie was blowing into her instrument with all her might.

"NOOOOOO" venom cried out in pain as the symbiote slowly reaped away from its host.

This should be "NOOOOOO!" Venom cried out in pain as the symbiote slowly reaped away from its host.

twilight was soon seen as she fell the ground unconscious.

This should be Twilight was soon seen as she fell the ground unconscious.

the symbiote trying to recover started crawling back to twilight, but just then spike with a mysterious bottle scoped up the symbiote, traping the creature inside.

This should be The symbiote tried to recover and started crawling back to Twilight, but just then Spike appeared with a mysterious bottle and scooped up the symbiote, trapping the creature inside.

"will that went will." muttered rainbow.

This should be "well that went well." muttered Rainbow.

"we'll keep this little guy locked away in canterlot for the time being." stated celestia.

This should be "we'll keep this little guy locked away in Canterlot for the time being." stated Celestia.

all nodded in agreement.

This should be All nodded in agreement.

"Will ah say that be a job will done." Applejack said carried by both Fluttershy and Rarity.

This should be "Will ah say that be a job well done." Applejack said carried by both Fluttershy and Rarity.

right behind Venom was Pinkie with large speakers hooked to a microphone( how or where Pinkie got those we may never know.) while Pinkie was blowing into her instrument with all her might.

This should be right behind Venom was Pinkie with large speakers hooked to a microphone (how or where Pinkie got those we may never know.) while Pinkie was blowing into her instrument with all her might.

all turned as they heard a loud roar coming under the rubble of town hall.

This should be They all turned as they heard a loud roar coming under the rubble of town hall.

"well actually your just in time your Highness."

This should be "well actually you’re just in time your Highness."

shouted Venom angrier than ever.

This should be Venom shouted angrier than ever.

"we all may have been the elements in the past but now there shall ONLY BE ONE!!”

This should be "We all may have been the elements in the past but now there shall ONLY BE ONE!!”

not amused; Venom bucked Rainbow off her, flew up, grabbed Rainbow's tail with her teeth, and threw her to the ground.

This should be not amused Venom bucked Rainbow off her, flew up, grabbed Rainbow's tail with her teeth, and threw her to the ground.

"Lay anther hoof on her and I'll buck the crap out you symbiote!"

This should be "Lay another hoof on her and I'll buck the crap out you symbiote!"

"you always were kindest of us. But you could never make the hardest decisions!"

This should be "You always were kindest of us. But you could never make the hardest decisions!"

"You were the one who helped us figure out who we are twilight!"

This should be "You were the one who helped us figure out who we are Twilight!"

a rainbow blur hit the ground covered in dirt, followed by an orange and white blurs both slamming the side of a house (not killing them of course,) while Venom as an alicorn had a hold of Fluttershy in her magical grasp

This should be A rainbow blur hit the ground covered in dirt, followed by an orange and white blurs both slamming the side of a house (not killing them of course,) while Venom as an alicorn had a hold of Fluttershy in her magical grasp

as Pinkie reentered Sugarcube Corner, she rushed to her room upstairs and looked for anything useful(still wondering why Shining needed anything that makes a loud noise), she hound a horn, a trumpet, etc. once she found anything she found "useful" she made her way back down stairs along with her iconic party cannon.

This should be As Pinkie reentered Sugarcube Corner, she rushed to her room upstairs and looked for anything useful (still wondering why Shining needed anything that makes a loud noise), she hound a horn, a trumpet, etc. Once she found anything she found "useful" she made her way back down stairs along with her iconic party cannon.
The second part of this includes repeats of the first part of this. However, the repeats aren't actually repeats, because there are still things that are incorrect. Sorry about that.

location: hospital

This should be Location: Hospital

after what happened many just want to forget about it, some more then others. celestia, shining armor, spike, and the mane 5 stand waiting and hoping for twilight to recover, they are soon greeted by nurse red heart.

This should be After what happened many just want to forget about it, some more than others. Celestia, Shining Armor, Spike, and the Mane 5 stand waiting and hoping for Twilight to recover, they are soon greeted by nurse Red Heart.

"will it looks as though she has some miner damage to her head, along with some broken bones, but other wise she'll recover i'd say in a few weeks." said red heart

This should be "Well it looks as though she has some minor damage to her head, along with some broken bones, but otherwise she'll recover I'd say in a few weeks." said Red Heart.

"can we see her?" asked shining armor, the nurse nods.

This should be "Can we see her?" asked Shining Armor, the nurse nods.

"yes she should be awake by now." stated red heart.

This should be "Yes she should be awake by now." stated Red Heart.

as they all enter twilight's room, they all see how sad she looks then finally noticing them.

This should be As they all enter Twilight's room, they all see how sad she looks then finally noticing them.

"hey girls, looks like i got myself into a predicament." said twilight trying to avoid talking about the monster she had become like a few hours ago.

This should be "Hey girls, looks like I got myself into a predicament." said Twilight trying to avoid talking about the monster she had become like a few hours ago.

"twilight where just glad your still alive darling after what that thing did to you." said rarity giving twilight a hug followed by everypony else(except for rainbow dash of course.), when finally breaking the hug applejack was the first to speck.

This should be "Twilight where just glad you’re still alive darling after what that thing did to you." Rarity said giving Twilight a hug followed by everypony else (except for Rainbow Dash of course.), when finally breaking the hug Applejack was the first to speak.

"so twilight how do you fill sugercube after being rid of that thing?"asked applejack

This should be "So Twilight how do you feel sugarcube after being rid of that thing?" Applejack asked.

"i'm not will, but i am alive, i guise i do fill Horrible after all that happened. i would not be surprised if you banish me to the ever free forest princess." said twilight with a frown that never leaved her face and a few tears dropping on the bed that she is lying on.

This should be "I'm not well, but I am alive, I guess I do feel horrible after all that happened. I would not be surprised if you banish me to the Everfree Forest princess." said Twilight with a frown that never left her face and a few tears dropping on the bed that she is lying on.

"oh twilight the symbiote was controlling you, i could never banish you to the ever free forest for something that you were doing against your own free will." stated celestia

This should be "Oh Twilight the symbiote was controlling you, I could never banish you to the Everfree Forest for something that you were doing against your own free will." stated Celestia .

"but i destroyed nearly half of ponyville." said twilight

This should be "But I destroyed nearly half of Ponyville." Twilight said.

"but it was not you, the real you who was doing it twily, the symbiote used you to do what it wanted, i know it hurted you deep to have to remember that day at the wedding. believe me when i say i will never forgive my self for what you went through this day, just remember that what you went through is over." stated shining armor giving twilight a loving hug.

This should be "But it was not you, the real you who was doing it Twily, the symbiote used you to do what it wanted, i know it deeply hurt you to have to remember that day at the wedding. Believe me when I say I will never forgive myself for what you went through this day, just remember that what you went through is over." stated Shining Armor giving Twilight a loving hug.

"that was so beautiful." said rarity in the background now in tears with pinkie and flutters who were flowing with tears.

This should be "That was so beautiful." Said Rarity in the background now in tears with Pinkie and Fluttershy who were flowing with tears.

"oh boy." muttered rainbow who just rolled her eyes, while spike got a umbrella for such a moment giving it to rainbow so she and applejack can at least stay dry.

This should be "Oh boy." muttered Rainbow who just rolled her eyes, while Spike got a umbrella for such a moment giving it to Rainbow so she and Applejack can at least stay dry.

"what about the symbiote princess?" asked twilight worried that it may come back to get her.

This should be "What about the symbiote princess?" asked Twilight worried that it may come back to get her.

"we have taken it and locked away deep canterlot wear it won't do any harm." stated celestia knowing that one day it may return but when that day comes they'll be ready.

This should be "We have taken it and locked away deep Canterlot where it won't do any harm." stated Celestia knowing that one day it may return but when that day comes they'll be ready.

"anyway it's time rebuild the damages and do tell the other citizens of ponyville that it is safe to come back so they can help with to reconstruct ponyville" stated celestia as she was exiting the room.

This should be "Anyway it's time rebuild the damages and do tell the other citizens of Ponyville that it is safe to come back so they can help with to reconstruct Ponyville" stated Celestia as she was exiting the room.

location: canterlot

This should be Location: Canterlot

as a guard walks past the room containg the symbiote's prison. a red slime can be seen parting from the black slime making a cracking sound and the red slime exits out the room

This should be As a guard walks past the room containing the symbiote's prison, a red slime can be seen parting from the black slime making a cracking sound and the red slime exits out the room followed by a terrible psychopathic laugh.

"So Twilight how do you feel sugarcube after being rid of that thing?" Applejack asked.

This should be "So Twilight how do you feel after being rid of that thing, sugarcube?" Applejack asked.

"Anyway it's time rebuild the damages and do tell the other citizens of Ponyville that it is safe to come back so they can help with to reconstruct Ponyville" stated Celestia as she was exiting the room.

This should be "Anyway it's time to rebuild the damages and do tell the other citizens of Ponyville that it is safe to come back so they can help with to reconstruct Ponyville" stated Celestia as she was exiting the room.

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