With everything going on in his happy life in Ponyville, the adventures, the fun, the lessons on friendship, Spike never took time to have any appreciation with his time with it all, assuming his life would always be this happy. Then that letter came... the letter that had it spelled out right in front of him that he was never supposed to happen, that he was never supposed to even live, and that Twilight must make the difficult choice of choosing her friend, or her princesses orders. As Spike finds anger inside him build up from seemingly nowhere, he storms out of the house, into the twilight of the night, tears streaming down his cheeks.
All the while, Rarity is there to comfort Spike through his emotions, his feelings, his fears that one baby dragon should never handle on their own. She begins to realize just how important Spike is to her, not just as a friend. As the days of his happy life tick by second after second, just how dirty is Rarity willing to get just to save a dragon's numbered days?
Sparity/TwiSpike Friendship
Excellent work, I agree that this is better in many ways!
Still tracking!
(Also, poor spike
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dude your reason is not wrong i did the math its right he is an adult pony baby dragon but adult pony. also its cannon that the mane 6 are like 16 17 18. its made cannon by the pony godess herself. anyways i love this pairing and not matter what people say i belive it can work. unless cannon proves other wise. besides poines and dragons can have babys its called kirin so i support you i hope more people do to.
376092 It was more of a response with people who have a stick up their ass about Sparity XD
And I believe they are all in their twenties at least, for I refuse to believe Rarity owns A BUSINESS at 18.
Great work, Storm! This was much better than the previous one. I can't wait until the next chapter comes out!
This version is so much better. Nice work.
Good... my plans will now work, STEVEN! GET ME SOME CHICKEN!
Dang that sucks.
This is definitely an improvement on your last version, however there was this weird part in the story where it kept switching from past tense to present tense towards the end. Anyways, loving this story so far and I can't wait for some Sparity action!
377594 yeah... I was kind of doing an RP at the moment with a friend on Yahoo MSG, and I didn't even Notice the switching till after I posted it... I thought I corrected them all... Grrr.
Did you switch from three weeks to one week? (can't remember)
I am curious to why. Is the story going to move at a faster pace?
Anyway, excellent job so far.
Well done sir, well done indeed!
An excellent first chapter, many times better then the previous. Well done indeed!
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yeah...
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That's a lot of faces...
THIS IS THE BEST THING I'VE READ SINCE MY LITTLE DASHIE
Stormsoul22 is like my best friend... he got us some ponies from McDonalds...
lemme tell ya... he said it took a lotta balls to order two girls happy meals... :P
386978 Ricky... Must you?
, you still act like an eight year old discovering the internet for the first time 
But still, thanks for the compliments, I'm working on the new chapter as we speakth, and I must say this was horrid before the re-write.
Sweet celestia....that was amazing and terrifying. I need another chapter pronto!
Not the amount of sparity i was thinking but anyways back to my first reaction when i finshed this chapter. OMG WHAT THE FUCK BLOOD SHIT !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SPIKE DAM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! BAD SPIKE!!!!!!!!!!!!!! DAM U AND UR CLIFFHANGERS WHAT HAPPENS NEXT !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH FUCK I DONT WANT TO WAIT !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WELP,
if he wasn't going before now he definitely is.
Nice, another chapter. Let's see how this goes!
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However, methinks:
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Awesome! Spike hurt Twilight and it's all Celestia's fault! Because if she wasn't so considered about 'her' ponies then none of what has happened would have happened. And Celestia is a complete hypocrite! She says friendship is extremely important and friendship conquers all. But she is forcing Spike to give up everything. I really hope Spike throws that in Celestia's face as well as anyone that tries to defend her.
Great, work looking forward to the next chapter.
Damn I feel the pain for Spike
Dayum.
O_O
Uh oh...
I feel sorry for both Spike and Twilight. Spike, because he is being separated from Twilight and Twilight, because she will probably end up in the hospital now.
I like how you portray the story in a suspenseful way, you end each chapter keeping us wanting to know what happens next. I also like how far you're willing to take this, with Spike injuring Twilight and all. This story is great.
I know that this is a Sparity story but I think there should be at least one moment where you ship Spike and Twilight together (in the present time, not in a flashback or a dream) since those two are being separated. I'm unsure about Rarity's method to solve Spike's problem. I can understand that she is trying to distract Spike from his separation to calm him down but simply avoiding the problem won't make it go away. I was hoping that Rarity would at least ask Spike to share his feelings with her and give him some advice before taking his focus off his separation.
I speculate for the next chapter that Celestia's not going to be very happy when she finds that her favourite student has been attacked.
omg update soon i can't wait to see what happens
Oh my.......continue.....
417763 Well, in my opinion, Twilight is a mother to Spike, not a lover.
418851 But sons and mothers love each other too
... Damn. Just damn. Talk about a sucker punch during those last moments! It really goes to show the Spike isn't completely in control of himself anymore...
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He knows that I'm sure, but it looked like you where asking for a Spike-Twi moment as lovers.
I haven't read this yet, but the description ALONE has be calling for Regicide. Here is hoping that Luna does the smart thing and sides with Harmony (as in, those who bear the Elements of) over Family.
"Revolution!"
Excellent! Heart-wrenching! I eagerly await your next chapter!
Damn... that's one chapter. One hell of a thing to happen and one HELL of a cliffhanger!
I think that the voice is either Zeroca (unlikely as its not rhyming), Luna (no royal 'We') or Celestia herself... or someone else all together.
This chapter was very impressive, so much going on im feeling a bit obsessive. Very well written and nicely done, I totaly feel for Spike having to run. A really awsome fight, on a dark and errie night. If you haven't figured out who i think the cloaked figure is, then I can safely assume you are cetinaly not a whiz.
Great chapter was great. This was quite exciting chapter, can't wait to see what happens next. Especially once Celestia finds out and the Mane 6, Zecora and Spike's other friends defend him. Also I hate Princess Celestia.
Cliffy
Well then...it seems a fave is in order
"Rarity blinked, and got down in front of Spike before suddenly hating him"
Rarity hates him what? I think thats a mistake.
Other than that this was an amazing dramatic chapter, keep up the good work and update soon!
Oh and I wonder if that shadowy figure is zecora...
500948 fucking writing... KEYBOARD... WUT YOU MAKE ME WRITE?
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This, bliss.
499733 I still think its Zecora.Aren`t this and bliss rhyming?
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... I swear that the ending didn't involve the word bliss when I first read it...
DAMN SPIKE KILLED THAT BITCH!!!!!!!
I am a terrible person for saying this: "Team DESU is a go!"
(Team DESU is from Friendship is Witchcraft)
I should have mentioned this in the first chapter when you brought up Sweet Apple Acres, but when did AJ get a bunch of Acer computers?
Acre: A measurement of land
Acer: A decently priced midranged computer brand often sold in Best Buy, comes preloaded with software.
Am I bad for remembering the 10th Doctor's regenration scene when he sadly says "I dont want to go!
" and hearing his voice and the background msic when Spike says it?
MOAR!
506071 My brain has rewired itself to convince me that my labtop is a mass of land.
And dammit... Feel like crying now, THANKS FOR BRINGING THAT UP
506144 Your misspell is funnier since your laptop is an Acer (from what I can gather). I guess seeing the word 'Acer' in front of you every day can subliminally get you to think that its a plot (tee hee) of land.
I guess I wound up being bad for bring up the regeneration. My bad.