(CONTAINS SPOILERS FOR HARRY POTTER AND THE ORDER OF THE PHOENIX)
Princess Luna and Luna Lovegood share little other than a name, until one day they both wake up in each other's places. Havoc and hilarity ensues as the unlikely pair try to figure out why and how they got there. Can the princess survive at Hogwarts? Will Luna drive everyone in Canterlot insane? Can the author write a satisfactory description? Well, probably not, but you should still read the story.
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Excellent premise, but, why didn't a unicorn guard unlock the door to Princess Luna's room?
Irony, thy name is Luna. Question: Which one should I refer to?
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MAGICAL PLOT DEVICE MAGIC
Magical plot devices are nice, but just be careful. There are peo...erm... ponies, that are even more perceptive than I.
Write more!please.
not bad
I SHALL FOLLOW
risking a follow Luna is epic in all worlds
Oh Celestia, and you thought dealing with the Equestrian government was hard...just wait until you try to extract sense from Luna Lovegood of all people. And...hold on, here's a terrifying thought...
Yep, she's found my post, oh boy.
Okay.... I am following this
I.LOVE.YOU! Luna meets Luna...............YES!!!!!!!! I like both Luna's,so this is AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
... Albus oh albus. Knows quite a bit does he... It's moving a bit fast sir, and you need to make sure to make a new line every time you have a new person speeaking, but it's looking interesting
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A Tale of Two Cities....
I dont particularly like the harry potter universe as they are al majorly under powerd exept voldemort (maybe?) but this is good so far. i... well... like it!
its origonal! Shutup!
Moves a bit fast for my taste but this is the first Harry Potter Crossover without Harry or the mane 6 being the protagonists i ever found.
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I will be watching
YES!!!!!MORE LUNA!!!!!!!!!!!!!YES!!!You should have Luna meet Harry, Ron and Hermione!!!!!!! I LOVE THE FIFTH BOOK!!!!!MY SISTER WAS LUNA LOVEGOOD FOR HALLOWEEN!!!!!!I SHOULD STOP CAPS LOCKING!!!!!!!!!!DUMBLEDORE!!!!!(THAT WAS RANDOM)
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Calm down now.... there is more to come.
1906457 I'm hyper.
Anyone have a picture of Bugs Bunny in Ponyville? Need it for a story.
1906457 I am hyper
Good as always! Keep up the good work!
Yeah, I can't see this going badly at all...
Woah, Luna's dad knew about Darconequui... Wonder what he thought they were called...
Firstly, Dun DUN DUUUUNNNNNNNN!!!!!
Secondly, thank you for your review of my story. I found it to be quite helpful. Perhaps I may even go back and expand each of the scenes into full-on separate chapters. But that is another discussion for another place. Now it's time for your story review, brought to you on behalf of Authors Helping Authors
Name of Story: A Tale of Two Lunas
Grammar score out of 10: 7
Pros:
You managed to make me hate Umbridge more than I already did. That takes talent.
Luna would be in Ravenclaw. It's a very good thing that Luna Lovegood was in that house as well.
Dumbledore's little quips were in-character and hilarious.
Cons:
"Said bookism."
No explanation of how Luna and Luna switched places.
Luna Lovegood's sudden appearance in Equestria doesn't seem to have shaken the VERY excitable ponies of Equestria (besides Celestia) nearly as much as it should have.
Notes Section:
I found it a very nice read, if a bit short. The grammar was very nice, but beware of said bookism. In most cases, the dialog itself should tell the reader how it was said, and synonyms for the word "said" are often unnecessary. I feel like you need a bit more explanation as to how the princess and Ms. Lovegood switched places. When you introduce characters, you describe them very nicely, but I was confused for a little bit with Umbridge's description until she was mentioned by name. A lot seems to be happening in a very short amount of time. Perhaps take some time to introduce Princess Luna to the world of Harry Potter. Also, if ponies are shocked and terrified by a zebra, imagine how they's be reacting to the presence of a human. I feel like there should be some reactions to Ms. Lovegood. I know that it seems like I'm focusing on the negatives -that's just how I tend to review things, including my own stuff. Don't take it personally, I actually really like your story, and you have earned a like, fave, and watch.
I agree with Brone Statue. You made me hate Umbridge even more. I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!
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....Okay....
slowly dials number for police
Huh
fitting for this story
love it wish the chapters were a bit longer though
She found Dumbledore's Army! Ha ha!
“YOU HAVE NO IDEA OF THE POWERS WE POSSESS, OF THE MILLENNIUM WE HAVE SPENT IN EXILE, OF THE WAYS WE KNOW OF THE DARK ARTS IN A WAY WHICH YOUR MORTAL MIND COULD NEVER UNDERSTAND”
Methinks you misspelled THE
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ONE DOES NOT SIMPLY SPELLCHECK THE ROYAL CANTERLOT VOICE
...Thanks, though.
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Haha... happy to help. I think this is the second(?)instance in which ive helped you. If you need some help with editing or proofing, send me a message!
YAY! Luna's in The DA! You combined my 2 favorite things(HP and MLP)a nd turned it into something wonderful!!! THANK YOU!!!!!!!
Umbridge tried to lecture the immortal goddess of the moon who could bring about eternal night through the use of ancient dark magics in the defence against dark magic? And Luna literally shouts her out of the room
brilliant.
My money is that Discord couldn't corrupt Luna and is paying for it.
Hooray! No spelling errors! Good job!
How did she... no, not going to question it. It's Lyra, when it comes to Humans, she ain't gotta explain shit.
Was wondering why no one was commenting on the last chapter, then I noticed I forgot to publish it! Sorry guys!
Umbridge got OWNED!! Dude, this is a great story!
I wonder how Dolores would react if she ever met Discord?
a few things...
just noticed this after seeing it in chapter 6...
I lol'ed.
Sectumsempra? I thought that at the time Umbridge was teaching, only Snape knew of this little tidbit of magic. Otherwise, I'm sure that the curses would have a similar effect on non-dreamwalking Luna as well.
Hmm...is Luna taking converts?
I mean, hypothetically speaking, if she were to be worshiped as an immortal dark goddess of the night would the High Priest position happen to be open?
...and I still don't have a Luna emoticon for you...
Love the line 'i want your job. Bitch.' just. Ownd!
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=J0I-jZ7OB0c#t=196s
Oh crap... Lyra's gonna perform either a biopsy, or a... you know what, I'm not even gonna mention the other option, it's too horrible...
1936352 Oh no!!! Not make Luna demonstrate the dexterity of hands by playing the piano! THE HORROR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
1937682 Lol... Now I can't stop thinking of The Piano Man...