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q97randomguy


I sometimes write but mostly edit. I'm also a PR for The Royal Guard.

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In the long history of Equestria, the two royal sisters are an enigma. Why are Celestia and Luna on the Equestrian flag when they were not there during the founding? How did they come to rule over the nation? And what really caused Luna to become Nightmare Moon?



For a full understanding of this story, it is recommended that you read Paradise, to which this story is a spiritual sequel.

Chapters (11)
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First of all I’d like to thank SlyWit. He allowed me to set this story in the same universe as Paradise, and for that I am extremely grateful.
Second, I need to thank InuHoshi-to-DarkPen for the beautiful cover art.
I’d also like to thank my editors/prereaders: SlyWit, Cynewulf, Daetrin, Antiquatedannomaly, hannahs98, Marzipan Gecko, and A Zapping ZapApple. You guys are awesome, and should feel awesome.
If you find anything wrong with the story mechanically, please leave it, quoted in the comments. If, somehow, an error with canon managed to elude us all, please send it to me in a PM. I’ll try my best to resolve the issue, and if I can, I’ll give you credit.
Aside from that, thanks for reading, and be on the lookout for updates. I’m shooting for one a week. (But don’t hold me to that.)

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Good, I like it too.
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Is that a good "oh my"?

Excellent interpretation of how the Elements of Harmony were made.
As in the paragraph:

"Starswirl tightened his hold ... Elements held together of their own accord."

Nice to see how Celestia and Luna worked together pre-Nightmare Moon.
Can't wait for what's to come.

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Well you shall have to wait. MUA HA HA HA!!!
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Did you actually read it?:unsuresweetie:

Woot, not first!!! :rainbowwild:

(edit)

Real comment time. Hmmm, it has been a while since I pre-read this chapter, its better than I remember.
I would say 11 comments to 14 story views is a good start. :raritywink: I just hope this gets a level of attention on the site equal to all the work you have put into it. So many things to say, so few that I can say with out spoiling the story.... As a prereader I will say this... Hold on, because it gets better. :raritystarry

Now, I go back to my own writing. :coolphoto: Also thanks for the shout out. :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks man. And good on you for not abusing your prereader powers (not that I expected you to, but power corrupts and all that).
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Good, I'd hate if you just went around commenting without reading. See you in the next chapter?

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Yes, lets. Just you wait. The story's just taking off.

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Thanks man! Next chapter's slated for Sunday. See you then.

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Oh no! My point has been seen! *Runs and hides.*

Up already! :twilightsmile: The second chapter's ready, right?

~hannahs98

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Shh. Keep it on the down low...:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

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'S ok...
But if you're going to use my story's comments as a battle ground, at least tell some other people about it.:scootangel:
(Shameless plug is shameless.)

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Thankee Sai.
(Points if you know what this is from (without looking it up.))

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Ok you two, listen up. If you're going to have a comment war on my story at least do it right. Like I did with clearshot01. That was a cool comment war. This though...

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What, the link to the "war" wasn't enough?

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WE ARE IN THE DEMANDING OF THE NEXT CHAPTER!
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Hush my faithful follower, you shall have your fill.
The next chapter is coming out on Sunday. (I plan on weekly updates.)

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DAMN STRAIGHT YOU BETTER UPDATE!!! Because if you don't... :pinkiecrazy:

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Don't worry. It's on it's way. I'll upload it probably on Sunday morning, if all goes according to plan. But it will most certainly be out on Sunday, never fear.
(Also, it feels cool to have someone this interested in my story.)

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Back in the comment the guy's name is a link to his user page. That's where we had the comment war. I'll give it to you again. You'll need to go back a few pages of comments to see the opening shots.

1760599 Oh, I did not know that it is on the user page. You should have said that :moustache:

I’d like to thank my editors/prereaders: Cynewulf, Antiquatedannomaly, hannahs98, Marzipan Gecko, and A Zapping ZapApple. You guys are awesome, and should feel awesome.
This chapter was mainly setting up for the real meat of the story; I’m already hard at work on the interesting part. Thanks for reading, and don’t forget to be awesome.

three little fillies from the three different tribes playing together under their mother's watchful eyes.
“Hello, it’s so nice to see the little ones getting along isn’t it?”
“Ah reckon you’re right and say thankya.”
“Oh yes, Celestia, the three tribes are much better off together; we would have never survived alone.”
“Um, it’s....nice.”
“Well ladies, you have me at a disadvantage. You know my name, but I don’t know yours.”
“Wise Wafer, mah Lady.”
“Trefoil the Thinker, my Lady.”
“I’m Corporal Chrysanthemum.”

I really love the implications of this. That the personalities of the bearers are dominate genetic traits or something. In case you didn't notice the three fillies are Smart Cookie :ajsmug:, Clover the Clever :twilightsmile:, and Private Pansy :yay:.

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Hey, man. Thanks for reading.:twilightsmile:
Comments are always appreciated.
As for

I really love the implications of this. That the personalities of the bearers are dominate genetic traits or something.

Could be...who knows?:ajsmug:

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Combining the dominant trait idea with how much guessing there is of incarnations of the bearers in Paradise will make some brain hurting logic between the two stories with all these Fluttershy running around.

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:yay: Brain hurt! Wait... that's a bad thing. :facehoof:

I’d like to thank my editors/prereaders: Cynewulf, Antiquatedannomaly, SlyWit, and A Zapping ZapApple. You guys are awesome, and should feel awesome. Especially for this chapter.
For any of you that don’t know what negligible senescence is, here’s a great video.
Thanks for reading, and don’t forget to be awesome.

I wondered how you would "patch" the time holes you seemed to create. After readin this, here is my opinion:

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Glad you think so...
Now I get to tell you: You ain't seen nothing yet. I've got plans, yes, big plans.

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*Evil laugh*
I'll make Twilight Celstia's daughter!! Bwahahahaha!

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Not quite... In my head canon she's a great great great.... grand daughter of Starswirl. That won't actually make a difference to the story though.

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don’t forget to be awesome.

Something they say in you'r home town? Hmmm? :raritywink:

Great chapter you worked those last second changes in very smoothly. And it seems like you are in part taking my suggestion. :raritystarry:

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*Sigh Not my home town...
And smoothly? Really?

1818484 Mostly. But over all it was pretty good.

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I'd like to let you know that this is a serious pick-me-up whenever I'm feeling :pinkiesad2:
So thank you.

I’d like to thank my editors/prereaders: Cynewulf, Antiquatedannomaly, and SlyWit. You guys are awesome, and should feel awesome.

Thanks for reading, and don’t forget to be awesome.

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