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The Nightmare Moon had, when she was exiled by her sister, Princess Celestia, a secret.

She was only just recently pregnant.

Nightmare Moon may have failed at everything else, but she was not going to fail her child.

A story that will tie into a new, and larger, series of stories that I am working on. Based off of several "bad end" pictures on Derpibooru.

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Well. This was....deep. Woona needs a hug.

To say this story is good, would be an understatement.
To say I didn't cry, would be a lie.:fluttercry:

3641131 Very much, this story was to evoke tears. It's the sort of story that one has to cry about. And, thank you.

Aw man, I know EXACTLY what picture you're referring to...
Now I gotta read this...

Wow...I think Luna might need a hug now. But seriously though, this was a really amazing story, all the feelings I felt, from the love and care Woona felt towards her baby, to the rage and sorrow she felt about losing her, were all very amazing. I thought it was pretty crazy how you had the Daleks, Reapers, and Covenant in this. My only correction would be that at the part where she was able to do the magic and stuff,and it said she was so happy she could dance a jig, it says that part twice. Other than that I think it's good. Also, what were the Borg Queen and the Collective from? Cause I never heard of 'em. Can't wait fo those sequels you promised, keep up the good work :3.

Well congratulations, you made me cry. :fluttercry:

It's true what they said, nothing is fiercer than a mother protecting her young.

3643422 One tries. So long as it's a manly (or womanly) form of tears, it is good. If not...hm...

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It evoked a strong emotional response is all I can say.

The Borg are from Star Trek. The Collective is the Borg hivemind, if I recall correctly.3642733

Holy. Effing. Crap.
Alicorns are effing badass. Seriously. She... annihilated, is the best word... The Covenant, Dalek, Cylon, Borg, Reapers (from ME I'm assuming), and countless others, including angels O.O

I want to be an alicorn.

I love Luna, and Nightmare Moon, too actually.
Luna, Celestia, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy and Derpy are my favorite characters from MLP(in that order).

3652611 Yes.

Personal headcanon-Alicorns move lightly through the world because a "moderate" step moves mountains. A "heavy" step shatters worlds. And, with few exceptions, alicorns know this and are careful in their steps because they want to keep what they have made.

3652588 Oh alright thanks man. I've never watched Star Trek before so I had no idea what that was. Thanks for answering :3.

No problem. Glad I could help.3653072

I'll have to :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry: Come back when Im not bawling my eyes out! BWAHHHHH!!!!!!!!!

I feel sort of split about this. It's pretty well done and it does leave an impact. However the ending just lacked any kind of punch, it was a serious letdown. The whole crossover-things where also kinda gratuitous.
I also rather dislike the stillbirth thing, but that's more because I'm generally a fan of happy endings, and not a flaw in the story. Luna raises a child on the moon would make for a interesting story.

One of the morals of this story: NEVER fuck with a mother by trying to cause harm to their child. If you do, then God, Satan, The Old Ones, Chaos Gods hell every bad guy in real life and in fiction, and even Chuck Norris will run from you in terror of being even in the same universe. Because they don't want to be even near the horror show that will happen when the mother gets her hands on the unlucky bastard.

I did like this story and found it touching... bit I'm not sure all the cross overs really added anything. Luna trying desperately to save Selene, failing and Nightmare's attempts to poison her against Celestia provided plenty of drama and pathos. I also liked that Luna's choice was to not let her heart be poisoned against her sister in memory of her child, she chose love when hate would have been so much easier.

Always fear a mothers wrath. Thoust knows not of what it can do.

I have to admit this was really well written but the few times I read stories like this I never like them. For the saddest thing, a mother can endure is the death of her child especially one that died before birth.:fluttershysad:😭

Does this story have a sequel?

So did this ever actually tie into any other stories?

Alicorn is seriously OP

Great and effective style of writing. Could Do with a toning down of the crossovers, but it does serve in a way of getting across Nighmare Moon's ferocity. Her reluctance to get other ponies involved also nicely explains why she went easy on the mane 6. I mean someone with this much power hardly takes a few barely adult civilians seriously

Luna looked at him, every inch the Princess she was. “I owe my child that much. I would do everything in my power to give her the world that I would have given her, had she lived. And, in three weeks, I will reopen the Court of Night. My sister promised me that we would be equal again-and I will start from here.”

Hate to be the bearer of bad news but Celestia's word is as valuable as a broken plate.

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