• Member Since 6th Apr, 2012
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ThatHandsomeDevil


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A story in the same vein as My Little Dashie, but not a carbon copy.
Awoken in the middle of the night by a mythical creature sitting on his doorstep, a man's life is drastically re-arranged by the sudden entrance of Princess Celestia. Struggling to accept things he couldn't ever think possible, he'll have to make a decision about what's worth changing his entire life.
(Note: I added the "Alternate Universe" tag because I imagined this being a reversed-roles universe where Luna is the big sister and banishes Celestia, rather than the other way around.)

Chapters (9)
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Comments ( 315 )

Well then...This...

Well, the set up is incredibly similar to that of My Little Dashie, but I guess I can get behind this...key word 'try'. You've wrote it well, no real grammatical errors anywhere (yeah, I'm one of those people) and you did establish 'why' she was sent there.

Though Chibi-Celestia is adorable. :twilightsmile:

Oh my gosh this is awesome :pinkiehappy: You did a really good job!

when i say this i was like:pinkiegasp: then i was like :pinkiehappy: but then i say it was only one short chapter :fluttercry: and finely i read it and :rainbowkiss::twilightsmile:

you should continue this.

OMG DAWWWWWWW
I didn't spot any mistakes either

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Oh my goodness, three comments that fast? Thank you all so much! :twilightblush: I'm sorry it isn't longer, this is literally a one-shot I wrote in about 30 or 40 minutes, so forgive me for any grammatical errors.
Also, hey, my first dislike!
Can't imagine why.. :rainbowkiss:

Usually, this is the part where I horribly mutilate your fiction with constructive criticism.

However, it appears I truly can't find any errors. Writing seems solid, it wasn't a carbon copy of MLD...

Hell, I actually want an extended version. Not a bad fiction at all, but I wouldn't necessarily call it great. Don't get me wrong, it's a good work but... Perhaps it's because it still has that small little 'MLD' feel. And that feel kinda kills it. Trust me, if this came before MLD, I would rate higher. Now if this could drive me to tears like MLD did (real men shed tears because of ponies)... holy shit, you would've gotten your own box of internets.

Regardless, if it had to be a numerical score, I'd give it 9/10. One point deduction for not really making me feel, nor giving him a damn epilogue! :flutterrage:

D'AAWWWWWWW! THIS IS SO ADORABLE!

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Thank you both! To Skrillex, as much as I would love to make a longer storyline, I just can't think of anything that wouldn't result in it being terribly like My Little Dashie. As much as I love that fanfiction (it's the only fanfic that's ever made me cry), I don't wish to copy it. So, maybe one day, if I can think of anything that will take it in a different direction than MLD. But, to be honest, I don't see that happening.

:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

A story of a filly Celestia in Earth?!!?

*Reads.

1 MOTHERBUCKING CHAPTER?:flutterrage::flutterrage:

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I'm sorry! Please don't kill me :fluttershbad:

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Thanks! :twilightblush:

That was very cute :3

I would urge you to continue but seeing as it stands fine as a one-shot, I don't think you'd want to.

Oh my, that first comment was supposed to go to 733259
Sorry about that.

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Please refer to my answer to Skrillex, which is what made this so short :applecry:

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Thanks, man! I'm sorry it's so short, but that was what it ended up being. If enough people ask for one, though, I guess I really have no choice but to write an epilogue :rainbowderp:

Aru

Hm..hm... i know how this is going to end! Probably.... but... buck it! I'm going to watch this story :trollestia:

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Sir, if I was you, I would consider it. Not just because of me asking you while planning to burn your house down with lemons if you refuse, but because I'm afraid of what others will do if their appetite for an epilogue isn't written.

Think of the children...

This was so incredibly adorable!! :pinkiehappy:

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Na I still gonna kill you.

Sooo America did said the fic?Nice now its closer!

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"Day 5. Rations fading. Can't sleep. My eyes grow weary with fatigue, and my stomach grows emptier still. I promised I'd save the children, but time upon this Earth is now very limited. Tell Fluttershy she'll always be my waifu.
-THD"

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MMmmm children? Better start with them >:D

Sorry for the spam, picture's failing miserably.

HOW IS THIS HAPPENING.
I'VE NEVER HAD A STORY THIS POPULAR.
THANK YOU ALL FOR READING.

SO much win, and i had a dream almost like this fic=)

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Thanks man! :yay: Also, sounds like one heck of a dream.

I am a soldier and I like this story. Update or else.:pinkiecrazy::flutterrage::twilightangry2:

733284 ah, ok. i can respect that:moustache:

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Thank you for your bravery and effort for whatever country you may hail from :pinkiecrazy:
Damn you people, I hadn't planned an epilogue, but I suppose I have no choice.

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13Romeo of the United States Army,:twilightsheepish:

Please my good brony...continue this and may the epicness surpass that of My Little Dashie!!!

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>Surpass the epicness of My Little Dashie
ARE YOU LOCO IN THE COCO? :pinkiegasp:

733748 Very...BUT I SEE POSSIBILITY!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Are you suggesting, perhaps, that I have opportunity in this very community?

This story has so much FREAKING POTENTIAL!!!! I wish you would continue it....... :fluttercry:

This looks promesing, there really isn't to many MLP human fics where Celestia is the main character.

733803 yes...I think...and that rhyme deserves MOUSTACHES!!!:moustache::moustache::moustache:

733803 FLIM FLAM REFERENCE FOR THE WIN!

Adorable? :moustache:
Short? :raritycry:
Complete? :flutterrage:
Vague method of making comments? :eeyup:
This was cute and adorable, I hate to say it cause you said "short one-shot" but I demand more.

True, it is much better than My Little Dashie. This one had the decency to end much sooner.

in my opinion the oly way to this become a lot different story will be;
the way he raised her
the strong possiblity of him go to equestria to help celestia get her throne back
(hint hint)
and the comedy of raising a creature with god like power

I loved this! :pinkiehappy:

I personally think you should continue this. I wold absolutely love that and so would other people :twilightsmile::twilightsheepish:

734127 I completely agree with

the comedy of raising a creature with god like power

That would be some seriously nice story.

Too short but was excellent I wish it was longer with more stuff like how they live and what if Luna goes back to find her to take her back to equestria stuff like that but greak work you deserve my like

Wow... touchy...:fluttercry:
But the ending was a little bit cheesy. But i don't mind it.
Anyway...
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If you haven't given much thought to an epiloge or extended story, or just don't believe you can write anymore, might you adopt it out? Not to me, I would mutilate it.

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