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jmj


I have the heart of a child. I keep it in a jar on my desk.

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When Rainbow Dash wakes up with morning sickness a few weeks after a big party she is forced to make a hard decision of life or death. Darkfic.

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jmj
jmj #1 · Nov 9th, 2012 · · 1 ·

A weird little fic I thought up out of nowhere. A bit of a break from the Pinkamenace II Society series. Darkfics are the entire reason I write. I hope you enjoy it. If you do, please like the story.

Oh, and this is not a stand one way or another about abortion. That issue is just being used as a mechanism for the story.

“extreme post-natal.”

that one really slaps me on the knee

inb4 people downvote/upvote purely on their opinions on the matter.

Hoo, boy. That was a shocker. Well done, writer — take a big, green thumb from me.

This makes me want to hate mlp.

weird twist was weird

I can't thumbs up or down this.. cuz.. What? No, really. What!?

I feel this should really be rated 'Mature' for the very adult theme of abortion. Not going to upvote nor downvote.

I want to kill you and give you green thumbs at the same time.
:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage: For killing off Scoots
:pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::moustache: For the story

your welcome for my well though out comment, but you will not receive anything but a series of lolwats on the count of
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That certainly didn't turn out as I expected. Poor Scoots. :raritydespair:

What the actual fuck.

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My story has a situation that's almost identical to this one, with the same character. Yours is way better, though. :fluttercry::pinkiehappy:

I thought Scootaloo was just a fan...Woah...
Interesting though.

I love how people are downvoting this based solely upon the subject matter.

Its so sad!!! WHY?!?!:fluttercry::fluttershbad::ajsleepy::applecry::raritycry::raritydespair:

Wow. I'm not really into dark fiction, but this was put together well. Cleanly written with an interesting ending--good work.

Thumbs up just for the name.

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agreed. as I am pro-life I just can't even read this:twilightangry2:. however out of the kindness of my heart I will not give it a thumbs down

This is a comment.

What are you doing, trying to put me out of a job?

Why would you post that...? :fluttercry:

The reaction this story has gotten.

Oh my.

No.
No.
Nonononononononononononononono.
*upvote*

Eh.......Eh....Wut? :rainbowderp:

This just blew my mind, for this story earns 3 outta 5 moustaches

:moustache::moustache::moustache:

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Nevermind......I just read the end. :fluttershbad:

Ok, at first I disliked this fic... then I read the end. :rainbowlaugh: I laughed. A lot. I'm so going to hell for this, but you have my vote.

Abortion is killing babies...
Masturbation is killing unborn babies...
FUCK! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Soarin_dayum.png

Post natal abortion. Celestia's magic stem cell factory must be running low on supplies.

I really enjoyed this. But it seems every single story with a twist, I see it coming...Wish I could have experienced the surprise

1590124 If I were a mare that would be really tough for me. I wouldn't want to take care of a child before I was ready, or give it a hard start in an orphanage, but neither would I want to deny something a life. I would probably locate new parents who would be good for it.

Ohsnap.

Holy shit.

This story.

HOLY SHIT.

I loved it.

Very, very dark...

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that's what one of my friends did. a couple that couldn't have kids took it.

as a guy I'll just make sure I don't "play around" outside marriage so something like this won't be my fault.
there are enough broken hearts and fatherless children in this world

Well written. It drew me in and held my attention.
Excellent twist at the end. Very enjoyable story :D

Now, however I have to go mourn scoots.. :fluttercry:

And this is why the stupid thumb rating is all too often useless. This story is fucking brilliant. The one and only complaint I have is that I don't think swings move in a parabola; only a semicircle. :twilightblush:

A dark comedy twist is something very rare and this one was done particularly well. Writing's not too shabby either. (I do think the story deserves a Comedy tag; I can see why the author didn't go for it, but that is the way I interpret this fic; a Dark Comedy.)

This not only gets a thumbs up, but thanks to its originality goes straight into my favourites - where hopefully it will not cause an antimatter explosion by being placed right next to Sanctity of Life.

Really, I love Scootaloo. :scootangel:

thats not really how Abortion works

OP wasn't a faggot.

He was just being a dick.

1590224 You're kidding, right? I read it, and it WAS well written, but the whole... plot... the entire twist... mmh, it hurt... I couldn't....

Dear Luna. What a twist.

Pretty decent writing, horrendously foolish content and idea, overall making it a bad fic. Either way, I seemed to enjoy your pace of writing and the detail you put into the story, so you don't warrant a thumbs up, or a thumbs down. I'd love to give your other stories a shot, though! :twilightsmile:

I can't make myself read this, so I just read the comments. Leave it to the people to ruin the story. As for abortion, I am pro-choice, if for no other reason than that choice should be personal.

Now to this fic....dafuq are you doing bringing a topic like abortion to us ponies?! I get it: originality and weird ideas are common things about life, but seriously. Express your opinion, but at least rate it appropriately!

I won't up/down/fav this story out of respect to your right to share this story without fear of persecution.

OK, I'm actually going to read this before I make a decision about it. That said, there are so many 'X does a Y' fics that are lighthearted insubstantial things that my IMMEDIATE first impression is that this is just a pure shock fic with zero redeeming value, or a troll. So your title is absolutely awful regardless of what your fic actually contains because you've already trivialized getting an abortion.

A few seconds in, your grammar actually appears to be good, although repeatedly referring to RD as 'the multicolored mare' or 'the Rainbow mare' (which shouldn't be capitalized, if it's an adjective) is distracting. There's nothing wrong with just using 'she' or her full name.

I know you want to move on quickly from the party, but the night with the wonderbolts might be something to draw out a bit more, in bits and flashes of memories.

You need to make RD's reactions to her discovery of being pregnant more balanced, because frankly this version of her is a bit heartless. She can be torn about it, and I'm not saying she has to love the idea of being a mom, but she is the Element of Loyalty. A connection to her unborn child wouldn't be inappropriate. And holy shit did you amp up her mild annoyance for Scootaloo into outright hatred quickly.

'Extreme postnatal' is exactly the point you moved from being insensitive to outright insulting. 'Natal' means 'birth' so by any standard an abortion cannot be "postnatal.' Your Rainbow Dash is a hateful bitch by this point.

And I just finished the rest of the story. If you think that this is the mentality of any woman who goes in for an abortion, then frankly I think you should go buy some apples. Buy some apples, you heartless bastard. This is a pretty well written screed on a controversial topic, but as a story it flunks. You want to write an anti-abortion story? Try actually talking to someone who ever had to go through choosing to have an abortion. I guarantee their thought process looked nothing like this. This is either Dark for Dark's sake or an incredibly misguided attempt to discourage real-world abortions.

Frankly, either way you can go buck yourself

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