A lyrical Hearth’s Warming

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This story is a sequel to Rap battle of the Blood moon

Pinkie in all her excitement decided to hire the hardest to book rapper in all Equestria, Notorious B.U.G. for their Hearth’s Warming party. Twilight knows that B.U.G. is really Queen Chrysalis in disguise. Will she need to keep her friends safe this season or will Pinkie’s faith in the magic of the holiday and code of performer professionalism win out?

Written for for Visharo for Jinglemas 2023
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Forcalor

Forcalor #1 · January 1st · 1 · ·

“I know! That’s why she was so insanely next-to-impossibly hard to book. Luckily I know a guy.” Pinkie’s face was mischievous and a little scary whenever she mentioned that guy. I suspected it was Cheese.

Good ol' reliable Cheese goes well with Ms. Cheese Legs over here!

She’s coming here to rap battle our very own Zecora!

Oh, they are such great antagonistic characters to each other, which is not explored in fanfiction nearly enough in my opinion

“Why do you think I can perform this feat? I do not rap or keep a beat.” Zecora looked at us like we’d asked her to juggle fire. It threw me a little.

She said, keeping up the beat effortlessly

I could feel ego and vengeful sneer in my bones as she approached.

Seeping in the bone marrow. You can tell that she would've absolutely love to playfully screw with ponies, if she wasn't bent on hating them

I actually felt some sympathy until I remembered she did this to herself.

My wounds are self-inflicted.

Did Pinkie actually bake real love in them? How? I would have to ask her later.

For Pinkie 'making with love' have a literal sense

rap battle ensues

I tried to imagine it in detail. An absolute delight.

This fic is a blast! Kudos!

Visharo

Visharo #2 · January 1st · 3 · ·

Many thanks, Short!
I really appreciate you spending time to write this in such a short amount of time, guess you did your name justice! Really tho, this was sweet and the fic was awesome. Like Forcalor said, kudos!

Herald of Opera

Herald of Opera #3 · January 1st · 3 · ·

I can't help but remember that the real rapper you took her handle from died violently. Of course, Chrysalis wouldn't have it any other way.

Razzy

Razzy #4 · January 2nd · · ·

D'awwww, that was sweet.

howard035

howard035 #5 · January 7th · · ·

What a fun, sweet story. Someday B.U.G. needs to battle comics-canon rapper Starswirl the Bearded. (Li'l Swirly?)

Hyper Star

Hyper Star #6 · February 11th · · ·

“That’s great Pinkie! I didn’t know you were setting up music. I thought we were just having the ponies from the village like we normally do.”

Ponyville... it’s big enough to called a town, "village" is a little too ~~much~~ less.

“A party.” I finished. Pinkie had a party for us for each new milestone in our relationship since we got together. I just wasn’t aware of how many milestones there were. First kiss, first dance, first late night snacks, first… ahem,

What was that last one ?

“I know! That’s why she was so insanely next-to-impossibly hard to book. Luckily I know a guy.” Pinkie’s face was mischievous and a little scary whenever she mentioned that guy. I suspected it was Cheese.

Not that guy!

“Why do you think I can perform this feat? I do not rap or keep a beat.”

Zecora said, keeping the beat.

“Huh?! Oh yeah, tonight’s going to be fun,” I said, redoubling my efforts to find a pony that wasn’t really one.

A pony that wasn’t really... what? Fun?

“Pinkie’s Pinkie Sense can feel into the future, even you admit that. Your sense… well you tend to get a feeling and freak yourself out most of the time. I say if you can’t trust B.U.G. you should at least trust Pinkie. You know, your wife.” Spike dug a claw into my side to emphasize his point playfully.

Spike digging his claws into her doesn’t sound playful, it sounds painful, but maybe I'm getting it wrong.

“Hi I’m Spike! A big fan of yours!” The little dragon shook with excitement.

Comma after "Hi."

Did Pinkie actually bake real love in them? How? I would have to ask her later.

Well, she is married to Twilight, that means she’s the second Princess (consort) of Love!

The crowd roared in delight and I had to admit she knew her craft. I looked over at Pinkie and saw her beaming like a Hearth’s Warming tree. It was worth it to see that look on her face. The crowds began to back off, the set wasn’t supposed to be very long.

"Beaming like a Hearths Warming tree"? What?

“Well, she helped a lot. She knew a guy.” The changeling shrugged. “Besides this holiday isn’t fit to conquer on. I may be a shape shifting, insectoid- horse that eats the love from ponies’ hearts. But I’m not a monster.”

Not that guy! (I’m going to call Cheese Sandwich this from now on)

Also, didn’t Chrysalis like ponies calling her a monster?

Also, there shouldn’t be a gap between the hyphen and "horse"

An uncomfortable smirk appeared on her face but she continued. “Happy Hearth’s Warming Twilight Sparkle. Until we meet again.”

Comma after "Warming."

“I know, and just wait until New Years!”

We passed it already

A fitting sequel, skipped the rap, though, didn’t feel like it, but I’m sure it was good. The characterisation of Twilight and Pinkie was good, Chrysalis' characterisation was... strange, she went from "fear me mruahahaha" to "AH'M NAWT A MAWNSTER, AH'M JUS' MISUNDERSTOOD," maybs it was just strange because we didn’t get to see the character development after the Blood moon rap battle.

Why wasn’t I invited to the wedding?

This gets a "GOOD" from me!

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