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Queen Chrysalis, disguised as the Notorious B.U.G., has been practicing her free styling skills and feels finally confident enough to challenge the reigning champ, Pinkie P. If she can defeat the champ the crowd will love her and fill her with the love she needs.

It’s the blood moon and the urge to battle brings the contestants to the arena. A third combatant is drawn into the fray that neither expect.

This is more of crack fic I wrote for a BWG prompt. Thought it might be fun to put it out there. Thanks to Xervis and Sleepless for editing. And thanks to Queen Chryssy for the inspiration to publish it.

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Here some love ---->:heart:

Everything about it's fandom and it's works is just amazing. Well done!
Notorious B U G inspires for sure, that is true

can already tell this is a certified Short classic :yay:

The name 'Notorious B.U.G.' is upvote-worthy all on its own.

take my upvote for the premise alone haha

“Seems kind of mean if you ask me. I thought we were supposed to show ponies the joy of friendship, not the fun of insulting them.” Twilight put the letter in her bag for some reason. I think she just likes saving anything she can read.

Hmmmm... nah, doesn't seem like an important plot thing

“Twilight, you’re so uptight. I thought I helped loosen you up! It’s a contest, just for funsies! I don’t like making fun of ponies so normally don’t. It’s why I win so many.” I slid into the black pants that were part of my trademark look. Something about putting on pants made Twilight blush a little. I giggled as I put my sweatshirt on.

Wait... what's going on?

“You’re going tonight then. You can help cheer me on. Most of our friends are in Ponyville and you’re my bestest friend that’s purple, a princess, and lets me kiss them.” I winked, she always got flustered when I did that.

WHAT THE HECK?! NO WAY

“It’s called a marefriend, Pinkie, and yeah I read that a marefriend is supposed to be supportive of her mate’s hobbies and dreams. This is important to you so even if I don’t really get it, I’ll go.” She gave a small smile which I added a nice warm hug to. Then a very special kiss.

Best surprise ship ever, I was honestly not expecting to find this

{HR}

Square brackets, sir/ma'am/non binary fellow, not curly ones

{hr}

What is up with the curly brackets?

“Twilight? Oh.., hi,” MoonDancer, one of Twilight’s old friends ran up with the rest of that crowd. I remember the smile I helped give when Twilight asked me to throw her a party.

The third full-stop/dot/period/point in the ellipses is a comma

“I assure you Captain Squeaks, they are no threat to me. I fear more for their safety.” I tried not to think about the draw of battle. The moon was shadowed considerably and my body yearned for a fight. I could fling the crowd in the air with a mighty blast of my wings if I wished. The Captain had no cause for alarm.

Luna? Okay, I might know who'll win

{Hr}

Why?! Why the curly brackets?! You didn't do this at the start of the story! I'll just stop pointin' them out now

I’m new school and you’re played out I’m cool brewed and you’re straight clown You’re too screwed you better lay down I’ll rule your brood and let your ass drown

Chrysalis! Calm down, we don't need to go around saying the word "ass" (just kidding, keep swearing, I support it)!

‘Friends are food where I’m from My entire crew will eat your chums Bodies gone we’ll leave you crumbs Now stop speaking, you're part’s done.”

Fiesty, are we?

“You’re the Princess. Ok every pony, we have Lady Luna here ready to drop some royal rhymes on us. Give it up.” The crowd cheered in unexpected delight but I held the gaze of the bug in my sight. She knew who I was now and glanced around wildly looking for escape. There was none. I would trap her and expose her in bardic verse.

"Every" and "pony" is one word; "everypony", just like "everybody"

“You really do see the best in everypony,” sighed the Princess of friendship. “That’s why I love you so much.”

What is this? A reminder? Just say "Twilight"


An absurd premise, but I love it. Plus, my favourite ship? That gets extra points from me, but it won't raise the rating; don't be biased, self. The raps were okay, I didn't skip over them like most lyrics in a fic. There is again the whole "nopony knew it was Chrysalis but Twilight was the only one suspicious of it," so yeah.

I give this an OKAY!

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