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DanishDash


Why do I write? Because it's fun! :D

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Interesting, so Faust only created the Ponies, but the First Born created all other races like Griffons, Dragons,...?
look like he is creative than his "Mom" :rainbowlaugh:

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Haha, well, in a sense. It is of like a child of an artist creating a lump of clay and call it a dog, and then mommy comes and gives it shape beyond a blob of make belief. :rainbowlaugh:

I would suggest the name "Terial", or perhaps "Magnus"

An excellent start, glorious even but I just have one question?, where are the ones whose might can quake mountains, whose wings bring hurricanes, whose breath dry oceans, who scales are the envy of steel, and who's teeth can shatter diamonds, where are the DRAGOMS!! my good Sir :moustache:

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Oh they're coming! And they are going to be huge! :rainbowlaugh:

No but, yes, dragons are there, but I am keeping them in the background for now as I want them to be more mythical in this story than cartoonish like in the show. :moustache:

I think a name like "Storm forger" would suit him because it sounds equestrian

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Oh, please tell me his dad would be the one who makes his hammer.

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You are half correct! His dad does have a hand in it, but you will see in the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

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Magnus might be the perfect name for him. Makes him stand out just like Celestia and Luna. If I don't get any other suggestions before tomorrow, I might pick that one. :twilightsmile:

I would say Bifrost, but Magnus is good too. Thought that naming your guy Bifrost would be creative; as well as a dedication to norse myth. Too bad we can't name him Thor.

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Well, we can it would just be too on the nose

I'm certainly glad you have time to write other stories. But what about High Score? I understand correctly that chapter 8 is ready, but your editor is not going to do it? Or does the chapter not exist at all? Please don't be offended, but if High Score is not a priority, then don't waste your time and don't waste our patience, let us know that you have frozen it. As cool a story as it is, I don't think anyone wants to get one chapter every six months.

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I'm not sure why you write this comment on this story, but to answer your question, the story is not forgotten. I did not lie when I said the chapter is written, I am waiting for my editor to go through it, but he has health problems, and I am not going to pressure him when he is not feeling good, and is going in and out of hospitals.

I understand it is frustrating, I really do, because it is out of my hands, and I can't release it until he has done his part. Until then, I apologize for the inconvenience and delay, but there is nothing more I can do.

If you have further questions, feel free to PM me.

Thank you.

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Thanks for your answer, please give my best wishes to SoloBrony!

Oooh, new story from DanishDash? Immediate read and track.

You should call the lad Storm Magnus.

Comment posted by Imasleep deleted Oct 14th, 2023

I also like the name Magnus, it is powerful and fits the theme of a thunder-user. Perhaps he has the power to control the weather overall?

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Spike better be a legendary dragon, or else I will leave a strongly worded comment displaying my disappointment:pinkiecrazy:.:moustache:

I'm liking the sound of Magnus, and I can definitely see the LotR inspirations.

It also makes me think a little bit of Re:Harmony which I remember was good but I think it never finished.

I'm looking forward to seeing more of this.

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Hey boss man, I just found something interesting, you see in the past of mlp Earth ponies they were shown to have Nordic or a Celtic culture, the pegasi Roman, and the unicorns European, before they came together

Will this story continue?

I have a bad feeling. It's a feeling that he will need a friend (still willing to provide one) and the hammer.

I can't help but feel nervous about what might happen next. Something will happen that will turn Magnus into a destroyer like GoW Thor.

That's quite the omen. Whatever comes next, this hammer will be important for Magnus.

Time for the standard "character development."

any estimates on when we can expect the next chapter?

They are rage; brutal and without mercy.

But you... you will be worse.

Rip and tear until it is done.

Whoa be on to those who enraged the son of Faust

"SOMBRA! CHRYSALIS! STORM KING! I have arrived. I bring the DESTRUCTION OF YOUR EMPIRE!"

"I've been waiting for this! You might not know this, but there is this old tradition called 'Blood Payments'. It means i get a piece of you, for all you took from me! You'll pick it up." - Magnus. Wielder of Mjolnir. God of Thunder.

You know, I knew this was coming. It's par for the course, it is expected to happen with these character archetypes. Still hurts, but lessens the blow when you know it's coming. That said.......

RIP. AND. TEAR.

And now his foes are going to be...

Thunderstruck

Seriøst? Kill off his love interest, will ya?

It was like time itself had slowed down, while he himself could move as normal. His clothes were torn, bloody. What little armor he had left was of no use now. Ahead of him, a fowl growl made Magnus look up. A massive form, made of shadow and flame towered above him like a mountain.

Foul. Fowl refers to birds. Granted, both words are spoken in the exact same way...

It took Magnus a few seconds, maybe a minute, to fully grasp that she was in his room. He wasn't in some battle, he wasn't injured, and he wasn't under attack. He was just at home, in bed, back in Greenwood. As his heart calmed, and the images and sounds of his dream faded into the back of his mind, Magnus let out a sigh.

Typo.

Pinkie finished drinking, wiping her lips with the back of her hand. As she handed the flask back to him, she smiled proudly. "I've not traveled for long, but each place I visit, I find a new song, or story to tell." She said with not a small amount of pride. "Everything I know, I had to learn for myself."

People usually write "no small amount of".

Magnus was surprised. He never knew any pony who owned more than a farm. "Are your family nobility?"

While I understand your reasoning for using "are", I'm fairly certain "is" fits better. Mainly because I've only ever heard it that way...

The farm itself consisted of three buildings, forming a square, with a courtyard in the middle. There was also a barn a little farther away. When Magnus and Pinkie came up to the farm, some of the from the Farfield clan was in the courtyard wokring on a wagon.

I think you accidentally omitted a word or two here, like "members". If you do include "members", I would suggest removing "from the" in the sentence.
Typo in "working".

"I am Pinkie Diane Pie, traveling bard, storyteller, and poet! I've come to offer my songs and stories for you and your house to enjoy!"

Pretty sure whenever she introduces herself by her full name she says Pinkamena Diane Pie. Just food for thought.

The evill will pay for their crimes & murder for innocents lives. They feel the THUNDER through soul get burn painfully.

Get ready for the God of Thunder.

Magnus is like a combination of thor and Herkules looking forward to seeing more

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