This story is a sequel to Canon Perpetuus, Canon Perpetuus, Canon Perpetuus
Twilight Sparkle, shocked with missing thinking
Sees a thing which did, just now, efface
Itself from all memory and meaning
But just how long has she been in this place?
Twilight Sparkle, shocked with missing thinking
Sees a thing which did, just now, efface
Itself from all memory and meaning
But just how long has she been in this place?
Twilight Sparkle, shocked with missing thinking
Sees a thing which did, just now, efface
Itself from all memory and meaning
But just how long has she been in this place?
Pseudo-experimental literary faffery; a vaguely Gödel, Escher, Bach influenced E-rated horror story in the round.
Created for the Thousand Words II contest in the "Horror" category.
What a fascinating little horror story of being stuck in a loop, I love how the end and beginning just feed into each other like that and we simply don't know how long they've been stuck like this.
So she stuck doing what she loves, with friends at her side? Lucky gal
Nice experimental piece, love it
wow. this was amazing!
Very reminiscent of the deja vu sketch in Monty Python. I can only infer this is what insanity feels like,
If you're in a high-magic environment, don't do archeology. Leave that shit buried in the ground.
Clever of you to mark this story as the sequel to itself, nice touch.
It was a strange sense of deja vu.
It was a strange sense of deja vu.
It was a strange sense of deja vu.
So she stuck doing what she loves, with friends at her side? Lucky gal
Nice experimental piece, love it
Walking down the path I had suddenly been there before. The terrain all at once familiar and foreign and overwhelmingly beyond time and reason. I was incapable of entangling rational facts from the ocean of thought which eroded my foundational reality. My friend, a tether and strength swept away as the moment stretched onward.
- excerpt from the archives
there sure are a lot of metaphors in this!
that this is pretty great! At first, I thought there were some blatant typos. But as I read, it became clear it was intentional. A clever execution of an interesting concept, and all wrapped up in a 1k word bubble. I'm curious, because the thing seems to be "consuming" things, and Twilight is clearly terrified of it once she starts to understand, so I wonder if this loop is degenerating into nothing or if it actually a closed loop at this point. Either way, I think
That first time through, it was just a mysterious little story.
But then you loop back ‘round, and you think you understand.
Then you loop back ‘round, and you start to think deeper.
You loop back ‘round, and you notice things about the story you didn’t before.
You loop back ‘round, and every time the story is the exact same, but the experience is completely new.
You loop back ‘round, and no matter how many times you loop back ‘round, the story contains all the same words, though you will never loop back ‘round to that first time through, when it was just a mysterious little story.
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My goodness, you're right! I hadn't ever seen that one (I don't think I've watched any Python in years) but it is a strikingly similar take. It almost makes one thjnk they've seen it before...
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Indeed. Or perhaps Groundhog Day. Always a good one for repeat viewing,
Lov d the reading
Welcome to the Mindf**k
Isn't this where we came in?
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Oh, no, sorry, that's the next time around. Just take the repeat again.
This story confused me, but in a good way. I still don't know if I understand whats going on in it aside from a time loop.
Um, so she has summoned some type of Elder God that eats time and space.
Ooh, now this is experimental horror!
It's going straight into my favorites list. Well done, good show! I especially love the repeat signs at the beginning and end, they really tickle the musician in me.
This concept--with the story being a sequel to itself--is very similar to another story I've read on this site. It's actually really annoying me that I can't find it or remember its name. I do remember it starred Agent Sweetie Drops in a more sci-fi setting with an exploding spaceship.
Ah, well, still a good story nonetheless. Good luck in the judging!
Beautiful, recursive, perfection.
ooh love the use of this as essentially a very specialized grammatical mark!
ooh i adore this imagery and flow
ooh a great way to describe something unable to be described
love the implications this has for just what unicorns are actually doing when they cast spells
oh lovely way to end, or to start at the beginning anew, in this case. in the face of a horror that can be described as
the endless loop Twilight is subjected to itself has meaning, imparting the weight of tragedy on all this metaphysical horror. and the concept could have been let down by the prose, but you did excellent work with it here. thank you so much for writing!
Outstanding use of the medium, including that fun little wrinkle that lets you tag a story as a sequel of itself. If ever it were appropriate to do so, this is it. Perfectly paced bit of literally existential horror, an unbreakable Möbius strip of recovery and injury, effect and cause. Thank you for it and congrats on the honorable mention.
Absolutely phenomenal work, not only is this written expertly, but it sounds like it comes from experience. I love this kind of psychological horror, it just warps everything and makes nothing makes sense or nonsense.
I think what keeps happening is that somehow, whatever the object is, decided to connect to Twilight, maybe to torment her or something. Maybe this is all a delusion to keep Twilight from doing anything else. Or maybe this is actually happening and she and Starlight keep unleashing some kind of a ancient being of unknown power only so Twilight can slap that prick back to where he came from and the on and on it goes.
Reading fanfics for people with alzheimer's is very cool.
Good story!
Hello! I read all the stories in this contest that won recognition, so here's a review. Marking this as a sequel to itself piqued my interest before even beginning the story. I like E-rated horror, and like all good time loop fics this comes across differently on a second read. Paced well, too. Liked and faved!
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Hey uhhhhh thanks!
I appreciate your interest and your review. I must confess G.E.B. is also really beyond my understanding, but I think the gist I managed to get from it whilst I struggled my way through had something to do with emergent meaning through repetition, particularly multi-layered repetition. I don't think that's exactly applicable to what is happening here, but there's enough of a connection to inspire me for writing at least a thousand words worth of material. Little loops throughout, both in the text itself and in the meta-text. Or something like that.
That was great, now it’s time to read the sequel.