• Member Since 26th Jan, 2017
  • offline last seen 51 minutes ago

Some Leech


I...I am a monument to all your sins...

Comments ( 27 )

Well, horseapples!!

Things have gotten interesting now that macs done knocked up his little sister.

He better watch out for granny Smith when she catches wind!!


Very exciting start!!

Can't wait for more!! Especially zephyr breeze.

Have a good day to whoever reads this!!

By celestia you just don't stop do you x3

I do hope if a third story comes in, AJ joins her sister and cousin as the third wife!!

11482457
It's my understanding that they release a story every week come hell or high water.

I love things that really get the family together.

Incest is bad, mkay.

Well, another good chapter in the story!!

Things are certainly getting more interesting!!

Can't wait for more!!

A very good third chapter!! Well done!!

Can't wait for more!!

I love the very pony-ish phrase "Ride below the crupper." :heart: Never seen anyone else use it on FimFic, which is a shame.

Just leaving a comment for the algorithm, don't mind me.

Dang!! A good chapter!!!

Can't wait for more!!


Hope to see another gen 5 story from you some time!! Maybe sprout

As he stepped into the tub and kicked at the faucet, he fumbled for the shampoo with his free hand. If he got her cleaned up, back on her feet, and possibly pleaded for her to keep her mouth shut about the ordeal, he might - might just get away with only a guilty conscience. Seeing her stir and look up at him, with water streaming down her face, his spirits momentarily lifted - that was until he saw her reach down and caress her distended belly. Her words sent a chill through him, both on a physical and psychological level, and rang through the washroom like a death knell.

Ah’m gonna be a mom!”

Apple Bloom! (looks around) Would you just... Shut. UP! Jeez!!

11485790
Stick your dick back in her mouth, Mac...that oughta shut her up for a while.

I really like where this is goin

Wow.

Didn't expect that ending!!!

But I loved it!!

Can't wait to see what else you do!!

Great story, I’m just wrestling with my own feelings a bit. If I learned that someone brainwashed me to forget I had a daughter and depraved me from the chance to raise her as my daughter id be soooooo livid. Ik he technically helped raise her anyways but it wasn’t as her dad, AJ got to choose to raise her as a sister, Mac didn’t get a choice.

Good intentions or not they’ve broken a line of trust that if it were me idk if I could forgive. Good thing this is a fantasy story and Mac here is way more forgiving, cause I feel most wouldn’t have been.

Anyways good clop story, only issues I ever saw was that for the most part this story seemed to dunk on Babs a lot. Like in the original Babs story it showed how much he loved her and stuff but here it kindof showed that he prefers Bloom in every way. I feel the heart is large and it has space for both, no need to diminish what he had with Babs to try and inject Bloom into the mix.

In any case very hot story, would definitely be on board with a third story to make it a trilogy. Maybe Mac is mad at AJ and Granny so Babs and Bloom have to help Mac reconnect with them. And maybe it leads to them fooling around and having a second child with AJ. Then end the trilogy with a hot chapter of Mac and his incest herd fooling around together.

we can have AJ next and maybe Granny becomes younger after that.

11486314
Huh. Ya know, I can honestly respect this take. This could be explored if there's a sequel featuring AJ and/or Granny.

11486314
Reasonable take however Big Mac is older now than he was and is better at putting two and two together. Now? He can probably see their point, although with equines IRL inbreeding is nothing uncommon in the real world.

Woof...

The Zecora potion, I thought, was heavy handed and pointless. But, as if reading my mind, you went "Oh, you want heavy handed and pointless?!" and created that 5th chapter. It was like you were on a deadline and had to check off a few more incest boxes before publishing. You had this neat little tease like AJ was wanting "her turn" being the odd one out, but then you go into this convoluted story about how the Apple Family tree is just two snakes consuming each other's tails. If you wanted an ending that roughed up the reader and left them in the dust wondering what just hit them, then you succeeded!

And you didn't even say "molten silk" once! Changeling!

Very hot. Possible threequel with aj getting her turn?

As she lay there upon her sheets,

besides, she hasn’t even gotten her diploma yet!

“Come here, you,” Apple Bloom cooed, pressing the fussy bab’s muzzle to one mountainous tit.

It took everything she had not to cry,

“That’s exactly why we should tell him now,

Ah’m just happy and excited to see ya!”

Login or register to comment