I had a, basically, perfect life. Few responsibilities, I lived in a somewhat luxurious environment. The best a middle class family in a kind of peaceful capitalist country could offer.
So how did it come to this? Dragged out of my home and into a strange land by an insane being? And to make things worse, how come I'm suddenly a father to such strange creatures?
Mythical beasts of legend now crawl around me, wailing for food and love. But my own mistakes have lead me into a fight in which I don't belong and until I am able to clean my name and erase my mistakes, I doubt there will be much peace in my life.
I do not believe to be ready for this...
Chapters (14)
This has an interesting premise... tracked!
Seems interisting
good story, the intro was confusing, you didn't add a back story to Iron and
made him just fall into equestria without a explanation. Other than that i liked it.
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Glad you liked it! And don't worry, I've got plans to introduce a little background story, but placing it at the beginning seemed a little too much cliche, all in all thanks for the feedback and enjoy!
1332643 discord... That is all.
1332727 It's not called 'cliche', it's called 'basic story structure'.
not really, the way iron seems to be writing is a actually a harder and better way to write. just think of how LOST was told, this way you can get the back story,without taking so much much time that it bores the reader
Hm, not sure about giving it a rating that's set in stone just yet. But it's going well. Good chance that i'll give it a like. certainly tracked for now.
not bad not bad at all
Enjoying it so far!
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Very glad you do! Thanks a lot for the praise as well, it really makes all the work worth the effort!
This is great! Keep it up!
More please. This is awesome. i.imgur.com/IpPRh.gif
I'm digging it, but I would say to slow things down a little bit. The pacing seems a little rushed, just a thought.
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Thanks! Here, have a Twilight!
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A Pinkie for you good sir.
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Yeah,
That has always been a little problem of mine, tend to grow impatient and rush to the action 
Thanks for the feedback though, I'll make sure to add a little more meat into my chapters 
So how did RD go from interogating/tackling him, to apoligising?
She pretty much saw that she had caused injury, and since she isn't a bad pony, felt bad about it. I think it kind of resembles the first episode of season one, when she barges into twilights house and starts accusing her of being a spy
Alright everypony! Take a seat, I'm almost through with the prologue... What? A four chapter prologue isn't normal? Meh, whatevs... Anyway, chapters have been a bit rushed but these ones are mainly for background structuring, future chapters will include less of a whole dramatic feel and a more slice of life-y feel to them, hence the tag, hope you guys enjoy it! Feel free to leave all the feedback you want, negative, positive I read it all, and take it into consideration
Have a good one!
It is so Fluffy!
Seriously though I like the fic. Good job and keep up the good work.
So, Iron has two sons and a daughter. Why does he refer to all three at once as his "sons"?
Example:
"I stopped trying to reach her and instead glowered at her, my murderous gaze locking with her eyes, slowly and menacingly, driven by the pain and hunger, the humiliation and confusion, but mostly by the worry and fear of what had happened to my three adopted sons, I whispered my threat at her."
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Hehe, sorry for that
English isn't my first language and in Spanish "Hijos" meaning sons, applies for both male and females when referred to as a group. My bad! I'll fix as soon as I find the proper terminology, thanks for the heads up! 
A human parent's urge to protect those it considers to be it's children can be very strong. Consider mother's lifting cars off their kids in times of great stress. Discord probably dumped a tanker full of that urge into Iron and directed it to the three children. Threaten Iron's kids, rage mode activated.
Just saying, the whole forgive and forget shtick is really overused. Try not to make this too cliche. It happens too frequently, a story has good momentum, then the protagonist fights with the Mane 6, he(usually a he) loses and then gets jailed or treated unjustly. The mane 6 apologize and everything is all cool. I feel that something like that can really bring down a fic. Mind you, I like the concept, but, this chapter, was blegh. The protagonist went from raging and death threats to "Oh, its all good.". Frankly, I would've preferred to see some more vindictiveness, maybe have him really mean the "no" to Applejack in the hospital. Try not too make everyone be like "OHAI WELCOME TO OUR TOWN STRANGE LARGE MEAT EATING CREATURE WE'VE NEVER SEEN BEFORE! PLEASE SETTLE DOWN AND STUFF." It would be best in my opinion if your character is at the very least somewhat alienated by Ponyville. Oh, and this is just my guess but as the protagonist raises the children, he comes to deeply love and care for them. By the time they are grown, he won't want to leave them, but Discord will tear him away from his loving new home or will try to at least. That's just my guess though.
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It's actually quite interesting how your exact same thought passed through my mind as I wrote! I agree that the whole forgive and forget thing has come to be quite overused and expected from this kind of encounters, but keep in mind though! The story is told by one character only! Who knows what crosses the minds of the rest, a simple thought or gesture that is perceived by someone could have a deeper meaning to it. Without revealing too much of the story, let's just say that sometimes, the end justifies the means.
1350707 Kay, just try not to use too many cliches, like have him suddenly start going on adventures with the mane 6, or suddenly becoming the seventh element of harmony, oh, and if you intend to ship your character with somepony, I implore you not to use the insta-love trick, its really annoying and can completely kill a fic.
Don't trust them! Now that they have givin her a Name she is their slave!
Joking
Love the chapter keep up the good work.
Liking it so far.
Hmmm... Interesting.
Good, good. Never seen a story like this. I've seen HIE before, but not this type of them.
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Yeah, it was originally meant to be a regular HIE story but I decided to spice it up
The rough sketch that made me write this was some sort of elements of disharmony gang made from a human and several other races and I guess it kind of evolved from there, glad you like it by the way
That is a unique take on Snowflake.
Clearly there is only one way to handle all this absurdity, leave town and live in the mountains, the absurd is best left alone.
The Fuck?
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Yeah, that's why I like writing about background ponies, since they don't have a cannon personality, I can give them my own! Nothing too far fetched though, I hope...
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Haha, that may be true but a guy living in the mountains wouldn't make for much of a story, aye?
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Totally agree! This must be one of the strangest chapters I have ever written! I still hope that it's strange in a good way, but yeah, 'Dafuq?' kinda sums up the end of this one!
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Nah, it's cliche.
You ever read a story that goes backwards? As in, starting at the end? I fucking love it when books do it.
1398555 Like Master Of The Game? Yeah, but you don't just go out and announce it, like it's this incredible new thing.
You realize that later in the story i expect 'The Talk', right?
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Haha! Don't worry! I have plenty in store just waiting it's turn to appear! In fact the following chapters may give you a different perspective on how a romantic life may work around Ponyville!
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No, by 'The Talk', i meant teaching the children about the Seed and the Egg.
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I know what you mean and don't worry! I've got a really awkward scenario planned for the future.
Two muffins are in a bag. The first muffin says "Man, its hot in here" and the second one says "Oh my Goddes, a talking muffin!"
It's pandora's box!! Nah but it's most likely a gun the gun of the first!!
TAKING BETS HERE!
DASHxOC! ANYPONY?
APPLEJACKxOC! ANYPONY?
TWILIGHTxOC! ANYPONY?
PINKIExOC! ANYPONY?
RARITY! ANYPONY?
FLUTTERSHYxOC! ANYPONY?
FLINTLOCKxOC! ANYPONY?
My vote's for FlintlockxOC.
An interesting pony.
My vote is for Flintlockshipping. Even in a nonsensual way. It shall be so, as I said so.
And stuff.
And the story is good.
And stuff.
But in all seriousness, the story is good. The human doesn't bend to match and fit the ponies, ain't changing his entire being to their whims just to be "like them" and other stuff.
And stuff.
Just keep writing more, will you?
Love,
-Cortex Repository
FUCKING CLIFFHANGERS!!!
Other than that, good chapter.
Nnnnnoooo!! Cliffhangers i hate you very much
More please
First guns then cannons then flame throwers then NUKES MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA