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A little cliche with the big black Dane, a little clumsy with the narration change at the beginning, a little Out of Character for Cadance to fit the narrative, and full of tropes.
But it has pretty darn good grammar, a coherent plot, and solid porn. I'm gonna read this, and it looks like I'm going to enjoy it. Keep up the degeneration!
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Thanks! I felt that there wasn't enough good bestiality fics centered on the princesses so I took it upon myself to rectify such an issue.
Oh and the great dane thing? Yeah it's cliche but what can I say? I like big dogs.
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not necessarily centered on the princesses but the coming chapters of a timberwolf fic of mine well be cadence, luna, and sunbutt getting fucked
"that was close!"
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???
She should have gotten rid of the dog. Oh well, she's gonna get raped and eventually like all the anime girls do, eventually enjoy it. Wonder if Shining Armor will catch them. That dog is a bit rapey.
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I mean, at this point it seems lke she may have accidentally zapped him with her magic whammy, so holding it against Onyx isn't exactly fair.
Super hot already!
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Dog knows what its doing and she didn't ask for it. I get its a Story but she'd really would get rid of it.
I'm excited for the next chapter!
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Someone's grooming efforts are starting to pay off., 😈
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I don't understand.
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It's your story, you'll figure it out. 😇😘
Do you know when the next chapter will be out?
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Working on it as we speak.
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I shall have to send Nux Taku here so he can discuss it with Vtubers and get cancelled on Twitter.
Got a higher than average number of odd comments on this clop story, lol
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Who?
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To be fair it's an odd clop: Princess Cadance cheats on Shining Armor with a Great dane.
I feel like weird responses were almost a given.
Great story! I hope you will continue it soon
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True but usually they're something along the lines of "this makes me moist", or "I hate you, you're going to hell for this", not shaming a dog because he should know better or otherwise reading way too much into the story
Congrats, your featured on the front page!
11420340 Dio's true form, but also Reverse Flash.
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I know! two for two!
Puppies when?
Will do!
One suggestion though: you don't need to directly foreshadow stuff that we, viewing through Cadance's perspective, shouldn't know.
The anticipation from not knowing exactly what's about to happen is part of the enjoyment. Don't tell us what is about to happen; let us suspect but not know for sure, because that builds more excitement. And stories like these are all about the excitement.
(You used this kind of excitement dampening foreshadowing... three or four times in this chapter)
This. I love this. Please continue. Otherwise you get booped with a book.
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would you mind telling me where that foreshadowing popped up so I can correct it and know how to avoid it later on?
I hope that Onex gonna knoch her up and she vecome pregnant with his pups and give birth to his childs maybe like pony dog hybrid kids
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So, there were three times in this chapter:
And:
And:
These do a number of things that interfere with the story. The first is that the story is told firmly from Cadance's point of view - we experience her actions, her outlook, her emtions - but these three paragraphs are not. They're from the perspective of an omniscient narrator who is in the story nowhere else, and the swaps are very jarring. As part of this, they're giving us readers information that Cadance cannot have, which is also jarring because this story is about her experiences. That's not to say you can't use an omniscient narrator - you absolutely can - it's that this story wasn't written with one in mind.
The next thing these paragraphs do is spoil the tension, which is generally a bad thing for a story that is reliant on reader excitement. They let us know in a general sense what is going to happen before those things happen, which kind of spoils the surprise. Let our lack of knowing what is about to happen be a feature! Drive us crazy with not telling us things until the exact moment those things happen! That's exciting!
Third, these paragraphs don't actually tell us much that we don't already know. Anyone who's read the story title and description is going to understand that this story is going to be memorable for Cadance; the story doesn't need to tell us this. We don't need to be told that Cadance is about to encounter Onyx; we suspect it, but it's more exciting to not know for sure. We don't need to know that Onyx is about to pursue Cadance; the story can just have him do so, and we'll find out.
As general writing advice, I hope this helps!
P.S. I don't remember any similar instances in chapter 2.
Can’t wait
This is great 
Kinda hoping she ends up being knocked up by him as well (since they both seem to be under the influence of Cadance’s love magic 
)
The romantic tension is building up nicely. Good job.
I'm now on the puppies train. Give us some puppies.
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Okay I think I fixed them. How do these look?
Heh, why do they go for the mouth?
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That's not how genetics work. Yet again these are magical ponies so buck me what do i know.
I have not missed the irony of Cadence reading a porn story about a wearwolf, which is a canine in a way, and now she's fucking a canine. Also is it me or is Cadence masturbating to an erotic story about a mare being fucked by a canine a bit too meta? Like it feels like a direct reference to...well... us lol. Idk if that was intended or not but it's a nice detail nonetheless.
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I couldn't have said it better myself.
I can pretty much forgive any shortcomings if the author utilizes proper sentence structure and pacing.
I'm ok with the OOC, and this has the "reluctant desire" tension that makes taboo fun
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When I can get around to it. I'm in the middle of my college finals right now
Fun read and interesting fantasy. How far will it go? How deep will they
knotbond?Fun times, yet they are lucky the water heating system seem independent from Castle heating
hope to see more of this
Update when?
hope we get an update soon!
Quite the bonding experience
Guess Cadance is making better connections with the Doggo ♤♡
Great chapter
🤝
The perfect ending. Poor Shining. All hail Prince Onyx!
Also, puppies!
I like the romantic development in the chapter, but I felt the end was a bit too abrupt.