• Member Since 28th Apr, 2020
  • offline last seen Sep 8th, 2023

Vis-a-Viscera


Now witness the power of this filly armed and operational battlestation.

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...oh. Apparently, I dozed off again. Why does my room look like a total wreck? Why are my eyes streaked with so many tears? And... and where is my girlfriend Lightning Dust?

And why does thinking of her make those tears start up all over again?


Unsubmitted submission for the Quills and Sofas Batponies 2 contest. Thanks to Sunlight Rays and Shaslan for reviewing it.

Pic credit goes to Dragonataxia, from Derpibooru.

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Comments ( 2 )

Interesting concept, pretty good execution. Prose felt a bit purple at times, and a few of the sentences felt a bit too heavy, but overall pretty good.
Also...

Danger pricks at my every never

Typo right there :p

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