With Canterlot's steam-powered upgrade from the Great Innovation, Directors Celestia and Luna thought the upcoming wedding in Canterlot would dazzle everycreature around. But then the cyborg changelings came - and in their wake, the return of Equestria's formerly most prolific usurper. Can Sunset get the truth from Chrysalis in her last Canterlot case? And will she like what she finds - about Chrysalis or herself?
Pic credit goes to Underpable. Commission for PrussiAntique.
Thanks to Steel Quill, SweetBanana, and TCC56 for pre-reading/reviewing!
WARNING: Steampunk Sunset Shimmer Strongarms Sadistic Steel-Swathed Shapeshifters. Say that three times fast.
Chapters (3)
I feel like I'm thrust way too fast into this universe without knowing much. Is there any material you've done in similar universes?
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Well I wanted a fast start, yes, but I'm gonna flesh it out more in the upcoming chapters. Felt explaining the central conflict took precedence.
This seems interesting. I wonder if Chrysalis knows stuff about Sunset?
Ever since I saw that picture I had hoped someone would make a story with a cyborg chrysalis at its center. The description of canterlot and everything was a bit threadbare for my liking, but not a bad start so far.
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Dunno man I'm honestly just confused. I feel like I went in midway through the story. I don't mean the background details either. It's a thousand word start that's not enough. Might be interested but I dunno at this point. I'll fav it just in case? How frequently do you update?
Not gonna lie, I only read this because of the cover page.
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Was the read worth the hook?
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Every Tuesday and Thursday. Shooting for two chapters a day from hereon in.
It was a nice little story with happy ending for sunset and cheeselis.
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Oooh, thanks! Really worked to make that ending all it could be.
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Yeah it was satisfying
Very nice. Coulda been a few minor ways to improve but this is leagues better then versoin 1.
I'll be damned if I understood what happened here. I swear. I'll need to read this again.
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Thank you so much, Jest!
Love the fic, anymore plans involving the cyberlings? I always had my own ideas involving changeling machine race. ^^ Though you have transformers to thank for that lol
So rushed
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Depends on Prus. I would like to do more in this universe, though - maybe something digging deeper into Co-Director Luna.
Good story I guess I understood it now but imho it compacts waaaaaay too much info on three chapters. Btw if I understand correctly you basically had Queen Chrysalis step down as part of her deal?
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Yes.
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I don't quite understand why the cyberlings need serotonin or how the cyberlings came to be in this universe.
Sequal or prequal please ^^
Since the sequel's coming out, decided to read and finally comment on this.
Well, this universe sounds interesting.
Nothing like good ol' pony xenophobia, they really make it work.
Chryssie should totally do the Hannibal Lecter mouth thing.
'Blueblood’s marital law went into effect' - I know it should be martial, but, for Blueblood, this somehow fits too
'Sunset’s sight fog fogged the glass wall between them' - not sure what happened here
Smooth.
Oh, hey, it's the one-pony arsehat brigade!
Well, that sounds dangerous.
"Okay, I know that having a device designed solely to murder your kind on me like bad, but look on the bright side! ... Yeah, I got nothing."
'after I did with you' - after what I did with you
'detector systems - as well as the transformer tech - is still rebooting' - are
'scanning the reset of the room' - rest
'Ye I have been defamed' - Yet
'my children they’re desecrated' - they've desecrated out they're desecrating
'Twilight’s eyes ,relaxed a fraction' - eyes, relaxed
'““I swear' - “I swear
'Neither did Sunset’s invisible as she was' - Sunset's, invisible
D'awwww, happy ending. And Blueblood got whipped as well.
'”.Shining, go get Chrysalis' - "Shining
'bonds -.like our own' - bonds - like our own
I like the short but developed story, good narrative. Felt like you where trying to lean into your inner Agatha Christie. My only issue is the world was very sudden. If there was something that expanded upon it before I read this, well, it would have helped.... I want a prequel
Really, what's about the memory controller? What if memory was encrypted?