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FoolAmongTheStars


Sorry for being a Starlight Glimmer apologist

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Five years ago, Starlight left, leaving her old life and a brokenhearted Sunburst behind.

But after an unfortunate accident, she is back and placed into Sunburst's care in the Crystal Empire, who despite everything is ready to do whatever it takes to save her...or at least he thinks he is.

Because it was never a question about if they loved each other, not between the two of them, but it will be a matter of forgiveness—the hardest thing to ask of somepony.

The hardest thing that Sunburst will ever have to do.


A StarBurst romantic drama, with Sleeping Beauty themes thrown in for good measure. Rated Teen for mentions of sex, a make-out scene or two, ponies doing stupid things rather than talking about their feelings, and other things I can't think of at the moment.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 20 )

I’m confused, what did Sunburst do wrong?

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But I made a mistake. Words had never been my strong suit, despite all the reading and writing I do, I couldn’t utter those three little words when she needed to hear them the most. In a day she was gone.

Keep in mind that since this is written in first person Sunburst is somewhat of an unreliable narrator, but that's his version of the events.

New FoolAmongTheStars story? Multi chapter? Ponies? Adventure/Drama? Two best Pones?

Clicks like, track, favorite, and comment faster than Starlight could leave

I think you're doing good with first person! And I like the chapter, it's a very interesting start!

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Thanks! I was worried that the plot would be too strange for MLP but I'm glad you like it.

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It's not too strange at all! You're doing great!

Regarding the author's note: yes, yes you can. You are succeeding. Please stop succeeding, my poor Sunny boy needs some relief.

Oh, you're definitely succeeding! Poor Sunburst though, he's trying his best...

Twilight’s coming…. Oh ~~no~~ Yes!

I really wanna give Sunburst a hug...

Tragic, but beautiful, as usual. I think the first person Sunburst perspective is getting better, and I’m very very intrigued at the choices chosen to continue it this way, especially with that disheartening last line. More FoolAmongTheStars story chapters never hurt anyone (except for you of course, take your time and take care!)

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Thank you, first person is not my strong suit but I'm trying, plus it's fun to experiment with other styles from time to time. There's more to come, don't worry, I just want to write up more chapters before I start posting again.

I must see more!!!! But if you need a break that's okay

I’m hooked. Hooked and ready for more. This was truly astounding

How dare you. You’re making me invested in Starburst. Starburst!

I don’t hate the pairing so that’s probably why.

So Starlight’s awake. Yippee!

The drama has only started.

Aw crud. What goes wrong?

Aw...I can't really tell if old wounds are healing over...but I don't really mind. Also, congratulations Cadence!

I’m gonna say Starlight and Sunburst are both in the wrong here. While Starlight definitely misinterpreted what Sunburst said, Sunburst wasn’t exactly very clear on what he meant either.

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