“There are three things all wise men fear: the sea in storm, a night with no moon, and the anger of a gentle man.” - Patrick Rothfuss
This story is a sequel to The Grass Is Always Greener
Wallflower's life was good - too good, according to her Equestrian double. That's why her pony self crossed the mirror, kidnapped Wallflower and took over her life out of jealousy.
But even as Wallflower lays in the dark tool shed in despair, the Sunset also rises.
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Absolutely fantastic!
I'm unsure about the comedy tag since its only really prominent at the end, but other than that I really like this resolution. And I want to hear more about Twilight and Falseflower
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Yeah, I was torn on just how to tag this story. It ended up being tonally all over the place, which is part of why I spun it off.
Wally's going to die!
Now she's eating flowers?
Oh no she's got a knife!
Oops she's dating Twilight?!
It turned out about how I wanted but it's really swingy.
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The knife scene was great by the way, I love how you handled everyone's feelings during that.
PS: this is the second time you inspire me to put another Wally story in my to do list.
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Yeah, this gave me a major case of tonal whiplash.
And so reality ensues. Wallflower isn't exactly the smoothest operator in the world to begin with. Adapting to a new species on top of that? Yeah, that wasn't going to end well. Though that ending...
Brilliant follow-up. Thank you for it.
Dammit, Twilight.
Head Canon: Wallflower’s actually really into Risk Aware Consensual Kink (RACK) and this is in fact a Damsel in Distress scene.
On a more serious note, somehow I didn’t pick up that this was a sequel, but followed what was happening just fine. Is there anything from the previous story I should know about that would enhance my understanding of this story post reading?
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Good, I did things properly then.
As for the previous - well, it's only 1600 words. But I think the critical points all got alluded to in here and the rest would just be adding a bit more emotional context to Horse Wallflower sad, crazy and bad at being human.
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I mean, same tbh?
The comedy tag put me off this one at first, I've gotta admit, but you really did a great job in turning The Grass Is Always Greener... into this drama-black comedy of errors. Though it came close, it never felt too inconsistent - I was getting a weird dissonance without it feeling like tonal whiplash.
It feels quite "Wallflower" as well: for all the ingenious scheming and careful planning, what is it that gives her away? Bloody eating flowers.i
I gotta say, for all the simplicity of that line, it really did make me burst out laughing. Lovely stuff.
I gotta chime in with some of the other commenters and say that the Comedy tag feels out of place here. I think the Drama tag by itself is just fine. Small nitpick, but I was thrown a little by the tag.
That said, there were some small moments of levity that added to the fic in a positive way. Fake Wallflower eating the carnations with salt was funny, especially when you consider what carnations mean. The ending was also a decent laugh.
However, the best part of this story for me was definitely the knife scene. Fake Wallflower's despair, Sunset's anger and protectiveness, AJ and Twi outsmarting the both of them, all of it was great. I also like the fact that Fake Wallflower was given the help she needs, rather than, as real Wallflower said, being punted to the moon or something.
Great pair of stories!