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ChaoticHarmony


Hey guys! I write sadfics and sadfic accessories! Oh, and I also do comedy things. Yeah. Feel free to check out my stuff! And I hope you enjoy whichever story of mine you happen to be on! ^^

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If you want a story of epic adventure and war, this isn't the story for you. If you want a tale of intricate romance and betrayal, this also is not for you. This is simply the tale of a less-than-simple unicorn who goes by the name of Twilight Sparkle.

This story is an educational experience... literally.
(No, this isn't a story about schoolwork. Gosh, some people have actually thought that.)
< Temporary Hiatus due to real-life issues>

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 59 )

Awww, that's pretty cute :twilightsmile:
Looking forward to see more.

GIVE ME MOAR!!! Well CH i gotta admit, you're writing is superawesome when you aren't trying to make me sad.

O.o O.o O.o O.o O.o Oo Oo

ITS PERFECT!

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Seriously PERFECT.

Never ever ever leave this story.

I'll proofread it now.

No! School starts in three days! I'm avoiding anything educational as much as ponily possible!

The only assurance I seek is that there will be updates.

:duck:

1152527 Updates there shall be. Though I have no idea when. :twilightsheepish:

1152584

Well, I am content then.

Too many good stories never get finished. :raritycry:

1152625 Something for later... suppose I SHOULD remove it though... at least for now...

What type of horrible human being could possibly dislike this story?

1153008 In the words of Michelle Creeber herself...

"If you aren't getting haters, you're doing it wrong."

Excellent!

Great work, Chaotic. I really enjoyed this.

1153196 Thanks! Coming from you this means a lot :heart:

More is to come, not to mention custom coverart!

ANOTHER DISLIKE!?!? Insane people are insane.

The only thing more adorkable than Twilight is Filly Twilight!
This story is Great! So Mote It Be! :trollestia:

1163971 Aw, thanks!

Chapter 2 is more than halfway done! I'm thinking it's gonna be done tomorrow or the day after. So huzzah for that!

1165159 I have to thank you for not disliking it though. Have a stache for that. :moustache:

Missing romance tag......WHAT DARK MAGIC IS THIS!?

1171548 agreed, no romance tag needed... yet

I was half expecting Twilight to have a magic overload and turn every pony into plants while getting bullied, and is this before or after she has gotten her cutie mark?

1172960 Magic Kindergarten. Waaaaaay before. :twilightsmile:

Don't worry, I'll get to the "magic" part.... Eventually.

“Nothing incinerating yet now is there?”

Broken sentence makes no sense.

Only the one glaring mistake and nothing else. Kudos on the chapter. I love seeing super-smart-genius-god-Twilight show up the world with her smarticles at such a young age.

ALSO

R.I.P. Chance at normal school.

HAI Super advanced schooling of only the most advanced. (I've imagined a few different things that could happen but I want to see what you do with this. I had to completely change the last comment so as not to give away my thoughts. Now. Lets see what comes next.)

GL with school CH. Life comes first of course.

By same quality do you mean pure WIN? Because if so then yes it's the same quality.

I wouldn't mention this one mistake if it didn't jump out at me.

“Oh Twili, your home!”

You can see what's wrong.



Oh yeah also:
FIRST COMMENT!!

Twilight Sparkle going to a young genius competition.....LET THE NERD ON NERD VIOLENCE BEGIN!!!! :pinkiecrazy:


Twilight "Adorkable .. A D O R K A B L E Adorkable" :twilightsmile:

1214321 It's not over yet :pinkiehappy: It's going to be huuuuge.

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faved to track updates. Still formulating my opinion of the story.

Read the story up to this point.

This may sound surprising, but I am actually disgusted by the teacher's immediate reaction to send Twilight to a talent competition.

This may sound odd, but I do not believe that is the appropriate reaction. This is what I have seen as exploitation of genius, not nurturing genius. Schools focus too much on coaching their fame-winner (and depending on how funding works, that fame-winner can easily be a money-earner) and end up actually scarred from the experience. They are pushed to compete at the hindrance of other aspects of their studies and life.

Now, don't get me wrong, I am not saying that Twilight shouldn't compete or something. All I am saying is that there should be a few steps in-between recognising her talents and pushing her into a competition. Like, did Learning Spark actually measure just how smart Twilight Sparkle is? How much Twilight Sparkle know? Is there anything that she is lacking in her knowledge that foals her age know? Does she have a condition that she should be aware of?

I'm also a bit opposed to this character interpretation. Twilight is smart, but she is smart because she reads a lot of books and studies hard. Not because she's a savant. She is talented at magic, has massive potential and can do a lot, but she has to learn and control it. She's good at it because she loves learning about it, not because she knows math well.

Great work again CH. Can't wait for the next update.

1226695 No no, he's right. Like I say in the author's note, his comment brought to my attention some errors that were downright blaring in my face.

1224590 Thanks for that by the way.

1226724

I wasn't saying he was wrong. I was simply saying that I don't care if he's right.

Really nice piece of fiction you got here CH, very well written. I like it.

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P.S. Miss Spark... sounds interesting:ajsmug:

The story is very well done i dont know how it could get better.
so without further ado ...
:yay: have a :moustache:

1227838 Thanks! Well, it's going to be about 300k words long once I've done all 7 years of her schooling..... so yeah... I HOPE it gets better. :rainbowwild:

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300K? Holy Carp!
Good Luck! cause i intend on reading every word of it. :pinkiehappy:

Theatre rules. Enjoy.

As long as you do not delete it, the story and us readers will be here when you have time. :heart:
good luck :twilightsmile:

That's fine with me, as long as you don't quit it FOREVER. Cuz then I would be very sad. :fluttercry:

Acceptable. Glad you finally got around to actually telling people that it was hiatus instead of letting us wait it out.

Thanks for the heads up, and good luck with the acting.

This is absolutely adorable! I know I'm coming in a little bit late but, oh well. The best part is that I can picture filly Twilight acting just like this, she's almost like Fluttershy. I think you're doing a fantastic job on this and I'm a little sad that it is on hiatus. :fluttercry: But real life comes first, I get that and it'll make the upcoming chapters that much better!


Oh, I found one thing. "...whishing she could just become the wood that it was composed of." I'm guessing that should be "wishing"?

I've been liking this story so far. There is one thing in this chapter though that threw me off a bit, this being how quickly Twilight was asked to be in this competition. Usually there is more to it such as additional testing, and figuring how smart you are portraying Twilight to be, wouldn't it make more sense to move her up a grade? This way she is actually challenged and a little bit closer to her level.

One other thing, about the story in general, is I'm noticing a lack of showing rather than telling. I do not mean to come across in a bad way, but there are things that could be elaborated on to give the readers something beyond the superficial.

This is all just my opinion though, you're the author, it's your story, and I am enjoying it so far. :pinkiehappy: So, you can take my advice and buck it to Tartarus, that's cool. :twilightblush:

1386707 Well, this has been told to me. Don't worry, once I finally get back to this whenever I do... I'll be fixing that little issue with some re-writes about how the teacher is... I totally exploded her character into like, thousands of bits, and not the money kind.

However, and yes this is totally advertising my own stuff, I suggest you go and read my other stories. Beware, most of them are sad though. :eeyup:

1387479 Don't get me wrong, I wasn't trying to be a jerk or anything! I really do enjoy the story and I can't wait until you can get back to it.

As far as advertising your own stuff...there's no need. :twilightsmile: I just read 'Fluttershy Learns the The Royal Canterlot Speaking Voice', and I had fun reading that one. :yay:

1387621 Never feel like a jerk. Criticism is always welcome! :pinkiehappy:

Also, not going to read my sad stories are you? :rainbowwild:

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