Going to visit Zecora, Fluttershy and Applejack are attacked by timberwolves. The resulting fight and flight leaves Applejack injured and Fluttershy poisoned by a hallucinogenic plant. The good news: they got away, and neither of them are suffering anything life threatening. The bad news?
Now Fluttershy has to survive a night in her cottage. Alone. With the plant's drug pumping through her system, she soon faces horrors of her own imaginings. Worst of them all is that eternal, hot yearning she feels for the mare who will always be there for her.
Review by PresentPerfect!
Written for The Barcast's Halloween in April horror contest.
Pre-read by the ever helpful Wanderer D.
Cover art by OgaraOrCynder.
Chapters (1)
... So. What the frag was the real thing that left those claw marks? Cause I doubt Fluttershy did. Applejack didn't (because fuck you Timberjack, and whatever cesspit you crawled out of).
No I'm not sorry about the language. It's not about the story itself. and I hate when authors use metaporhs and just don't explain it like they're supposed to.
Thanks for posting this for the contest. I'm excited to read it!
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Wow, that's a lot of downvotes.
If this is how you think, you clearly miss some important aspects of writing. One of those aspects is not to explain things to readers so that they can learn to think about and analyze what they are reading. Many beloved classics use metaphor, subtlety, and unreliable perspectives to enhance the experience, leaving things up to reader interpretation. Letting readers create and debate their own theories can be a major part of the fun of literature. You can hate that if you want, that's fine, but you can't say that your preferred way is the way it's 'supposed' to be done.
Anyway, you having no desire to exercise those brain cells doesn't mean I'm unwilling to put down my intentions. So:
It was indeed Timberjack. There's a lot of things coming into play with this story. That Applejack got bit in the first place, the book about a werewolf romance, and Fluttershy's own sexual frustrations all played into her illusion that the thing chasing her was Timberjack, and some of the things she saw that night were indeed hallucinations (although I won't say which parts). The secret, which the story hints at, is that Applejack is going through all the same sexual struggles as Fluttershy. Just as Fluttershy's illusions were her inner desires being given a seemingly tangible image, Applejack's manifestation as the Timberjack was her sexual desires given life. But these are very different things produced by very different ponies: for Fluttershy, it's her intimidation of the concept and fear that acting on her interests will ruin their relationship, whereas for Applejack it's her fear of being aggressive about it and scaring Fluttershy with her deeper desires. So the story is largely about the clash of two different ponies' unvoiced sexual desires towards one another.
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Here's hoping you enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it!
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Your lack of reading comprehension doesn't need to be our problem.
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I don't read stories to think. Unintented consequence maybe, but only then If I got it by the end of the story. I didn't with this one.
And honestly, the responses I get when I say something like this, is why I question why I'm even still in this fandom.
10149007 Given your attitude I wonder that too.
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People have the right to disagree with you, as much as you have the right to say your opinions.
Also, you don't read stories to think? The fuck are you reading for then? I see you in stories commenting all the time, so you must have something to think about when you're reading.
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Alright, everyone, can we please stop dumping on morion87? I get it, but there's a story here, and I would appreciate getting some feedback on that rather than on one disgruntled reader's comment.
So Fluttershy got banged by a Timberwolf.
Hot.
(Derpibooru prolly already has, like, 100 pics of this.... hmmm... I wonder... *1 minutes later*... Yeahhhhh...)
Wow, this fandom is undying, despite the fact the show ended, people still keep writing these fanfics, amazing!
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W- sorry, you need to explain metaphors?
And then you get into the failure loop. You push yourself, you try and it doesn't work out, or it seems to be going okay only to hit a wall. So the next time it gets harder to try, which makes it easier to fail, which makes the next time harder, which make it easier to fail and so on until you decide you've failed even before you start. And of course so you've failed so many times it become useless to even try.
I suppose horror stories have always been about sex, havent they?
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I'm going to assume you're being facetious. That or you've been severely mislead about the nature of serious horror.
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Mostly facetious. I was majorly referring to classic 80s horror that dealt greatly with STD and sex metaphors.
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I figured it might be something like that. Although I admit I have trouble taking a lot of them seriously, so some humor is certainly appropriate in regards to them.
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The story is good they use very high suspense. With some kind of texture that I notced.
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