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PaulAsaran


Technical Writer from the U.S.A.'s Deep South. Writes horsewords and reviews. New reviews posted every Thursday! Writing Motto: "Go Big or Go Home!"

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When teenage Rarity decides to start calling her mother by her first name, Cookie Crumbles is far from thrilled. But Rarity's at that age where she'll do just about anything to get a rise from her, and making it stop always takes a bit of work.

Luckily, Sweetie Belle might just give her the inspiration she needs to fight back.


A little something that popped into my head and had to be written down. Just for fun this time, folks.

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Bonny wee piece, this. Terrible teens Rarity is fantastic, and Cookie's way of getting even especially so. :twilightsmile:

Heh. I remember those comics. Cute and delightfully executed.

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant. I want to see more rebellious teenage Rarity.

thats why you don't mes with your parents they will beat you at your own game

LOL.... all my yes! xD

Applejack probably uses that name to this day when Rarity bothers her.

Ha! Never get on the wrong side of your mother, the revenge will be evil.

Rarity’s distressed scream was probably heard clear across Ponyville.

Cookie chuckled. “Set and match.”

:rainbowlaugh: score!

Well Applejack is here in this fic. And doesn't she call Granny Smith "Granny Smith"? Or does she mean to call her granny Granny Smith every time? :applejackunsure: Hmm...

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I think "Smith" is her last name - Cherry called her "Miss Smith" - so that'd be an honorific

You know what they say about age and treachery...
:raritydespair:

Well done. Made me smile from ear to ear.

I recall that one. I always liked the Sunday strip where Walt danced in response to a complaint of nothing interesting happening.

Couple of little goofs in the writing, but an enjoyable story nonetheless. Good for a chuckle :twilightsmile:

Sweetie Belle: "All according to keikaku"

I feel like this could be expanded to atleast one more chapter with a slice of life moment between Rarity and her mother. Rarity learns that the name Mom is more then just a title. Be it from Applejack or Cookie I think it would ba a nice little addition to the story. It ok as a one shot, I just feel there's potential for more.

Amusing, fun, light hearted, and in ways reminded me of the games my mother would play at my sister when she was being a snob. Bravo, and has made my best story list. :twilightsmile:

I know Rarity and Cookie were the stars of this fic, but for me the best part was reading about baby Sweetie. :unsuresweetie: Good show all around!

I love sassy teen Rarity!

Mothers and Fathers have all the blackmail. Old Age and experience again beat youth and energy.

its like that storyline from 'Zits where Jeremy calls his dad Walt.
.. and the dad wins by cheating. (Threatening to call Jeremy 'Mister Binkey- in public)

Looks like someone's been cooking up a good story!

This was my daughter at sixteen. She was unbearable, but luckily for her life (and my sanity), the phase was short-lived.

Just stepping in to say that Rarity is (mostly) absolutely right that enforced social conventions are stupid, and that petty retaliation makes Cookie just as bad as Rarity, if not worse since she's only doing it to control what Rarity says.

Nice story, though. Not saying anything bad. Just giving my two cents.

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Go call your mom by her first name. See what happens.

Very funny and in character for Rarity. Twilight has too much respect for hierarchy to do this, Fluttershy or Dash's moms would just cry (Pegasi parents are weird), Applejack doesn't seem like she would. Rarity is the perfect choice because she can be petty and a brat, moreso when she was younger as she's mellowed and grown quite a bit.

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I’m a grown man. My mother wouldn’t care. :rainbowlaugh:

Like I said, forced naming conventions are stupid and show a need for control. All I’m saying is, I wouldn’t be opposed to a sequel in which Rarity gets revenge on her sneaky, conniving, underhanded mother by finding out what Daddy calls her in bed.

Just saying . . . .

Ri2

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But what about Pinkie?

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Knew I forgot somepony. Yeah, Pinkie's parents look too, er, traditional for Pinkie to do something like that.

Ri2

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Yeah, she'd never do that to them.

We don’t get enough of Rarity’s family interaction

This strikes so close to home it's scary.

But thank you...

It is kind of nice, now I wish there was more.

From just the Title I can tell she's about to make a big mistake.

This was funny.

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You just had to go and makes things weird didn't you? :unsuresweetie:

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We're grown people writing stories about make-believe horses. We've gone way past "weird". :pinkiecrazy:

I think we all have embarrassing names given to us by our parents.
...
No I'm not telling you mine.

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We are a pretty weird bunch. I won't deny it.
Its just that the comment feels a little out of place under an E rated fic.:derpyderp1:

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It could still work. Think about it: Rarity's baby name gets around town, it humiliates her so badly, she can't even leave the house, and Cookie revels in her victory at the cost of her daughter's reputation and self-image. Then one night, Hondo gets frisky, Rarity overhears, and later, while Cookie is out, everyone starts calling her a name that she's mortified they know about. And it spreads all over town, and when she gets home, Rarity confesses that she overheard them and told everyone, wanting her to feel how humiliation feels and that it was irresponsible to use it as a parental tactic. Cookie understands and they make up and bury the hatchet.

. . . . . . . . . . .

:rainbowderp:

Excuse me, I have some writing to do . . .

Thos was really cute. Wish we could see more of Rarity's parents in the show.

Delightful piece, and it feels a lot more suitable with Rarity's family than Twilight's. Twilight wouldn't have enough of a malicious streak to keep it going. Thank you for it.

Mein gott, this was hilarious. Extra points because poor Cookie rarely sees the light of fanfic day, and often then as just the bad or annoying mother. Seeing her win a power play with her daughter was delicious cake, with implied adorable Rarijack as an equally delicious icing. Marvelous. :pinkiehappy:

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Shtahp, yer makin' me :twilightblush:.

A few years down the road, and this proved a fine work to re-read. Definitely one of my site faves. :)

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