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Rainbow Dash is thinking about asking out Soarin', and asks Applejack for advice on the matter. Not satisfied with AJ's advice, she is pointed toward Sunset Shimmer, since she actually did manage to get a relationship going with Flash Sentry. But after learning how, Rainbow then gets caught on a more interesting question:
Who broke up with who?
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It was cute and sweet, but the ending was the best.
"Right." Rainbow Dash clapped her fist into her other hand. "Drinking water. Fish. Honey badger. Tango. Talk to Sunset."
Dear god, that sound like something Jeremy Clarkson would say.
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Bravo! One fic where Flash is depicted a strong, honest young man instead of the usual bashing/whimpering for not getting the girl.
While an interesting story, I had a few problems with how you voiced the characters. Rainbow was spot on, but good grief, did you ever lay it on thick with Applejack's countryisms. I nearly quit reading because of them. Also, while Flash is a bit more of a blank slate, I had a hard time picturing him saying any of those lines.
I dunno, maybe I'm just sore because I currently favor the FlashSet ship.
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That's fair. I took the most liberties with AJ and Flash in this. I was going for heavy on the countryisms and an impossibly ideal high school boy. This story was sort of an experiment for me. I can see how I may have dragged out each of those characters' appearances for a bit too long.
Thanks for the critique.
lol great ending line
I was a little off put by the next to saint lines from Flash but the ending line earned a chuckle.
Well this was a fun exercise in absurdity and boy did that ending sting... in a good funny sort of way. Also unexpected as I kinda thought the twist would be there was a huge miscommunication and he only arranged all that charity work because it was what he thought she wanted to do. This works better though.
Still, always was a fan of the idea Sunset wasn't always as bad as she was right at the end and there might have been something genuine about their relationship. Maybe she even had a positive effect on him, albeit unintentionally... damn. I think you've set my writer's itch off.
So, anyway, not my cup of cheese doodles in milk but good anyway~
Now I want to date him.
*on.
OMG, I loved this. Very funny and cute.
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Thank you. I'm surprised I missed that.
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Glad you enjoyed the story!
Look at that, Flash actually got a character trait other than random wingman guy or whatever
That is how I also understood it
That line at the very end though.
meh, cleaning beaches, etc. = it is very inefficient to save the planet