This story is a sequel to A Copper Cicada, Underground
✽ Tale III of XXXIII ✽
adapted from Volume I, Track VII
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You can hear the clouds trembling if you listened hard enough.
One day, it'll all come crashing down.
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Will definitely be a quick one! Thanks for the faves!
Haha xD
I like the story so far, good job! :3
I.... I don't know what to say.....
In a good way
Ooh! Exiting!!
The temple has been finally found, I can only imagine their happiness and relief xD
They finally found the temple, FINALLY!!
After all the walking for five days of tiring they finally found it. 
I can olny imagine what is inside the temple. 
loving it my friend, 
and good luck on the next chapters. 
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Glad you guys liked it! Would get a little drearier later on (as per my usual shtick) but hopefully not too much to warrant a 'Dark' tag. See how it goes.
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Ooohh I do mind at all its just getting more daring, awesome, sweet and a little more spicy between them to.
Yeah good luck on it my friend.
Great job on this chapter!
Trouble in paradise…or well, in the temple.
Welp, someone/something wants them to stay down there…not good. Not good at all.
Welp, they're stuck down there... That's not good...
Anyways, great job on this chapter
So far, I don't think it needs a"dark” tag.
So far, not yet. May need a horror tag in the future, because this looks to be delving into some serious psychological horror territory.
This is pretty dark, but this alone doesn't call for a Dark tag yet. If it continues like this, though? I'd definitely add it.
Still, I'm very very intrigued by this. They seem to be losing themselves down there. That's probably not good. ;D
Your writing blends with the situation brilliantly, it's thrilling!
Don't think it needs a dark tag yet, but if it increases, yeah I'd say add it.
Wow.... Just... Wow
I have no idea what to say XD
Cockblocked once again
Oh look! They're gonna make it ou—FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFNEVERMIND
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Oh, they're out of the temple alright. Just not out of the mess yet.
Oh. That happened.
*distant screaming*
Can't wait for more!
Oh come on, you can't end it like this! That's just not fair! :D
So Soarin' finally lost the battle with whatever dark forces he was mentally fighting and has gone over to the dark side? *cue the Darth Vader theme*
Awww, I feel so bad for them...
When I saw the title I almost chocked xD 55 days and still going? Damn wow :O
Things seem to be diving deeper into the eldritch here. Brr.
Getting really psycho now. I like it. :D
And Dash won't be deterred, even though she must seriously be questioning her sanity by now. I know I am. Go, Dash.
Freakin' wow…okay, I'm hyped.
Getting Bill Cipher vibes off this guy- girl? Being? Statue? Spirit?
Entity.
I don't trust them. I'm pretty sure there is a reason why they are stuck in an inescapable prison, and freeing them might be a Really. Bad. Idea.
Spooky chapter. I can't wait for the finale!
This is almost over? What a shame. :(
I liked it a lot, thanks for writing and sharing it.
Genuinely one of, or my favourite chapter in this. The italicised paragraphs were so mysterious and described beautifully. I could easily visualise the situation you were trying to convey and I LOVED it!
How did you type the titles of chapters twelve and thirteen?
Ten out of ten.
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Little bit of copy and pasting.
Defo one of my favourite stories! I loved the ending, seriously amazing job on this!
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Really glad you've enjoyed it! Also, thought I should get it out since it's done: many thanks for the weekly comments! Always never fails to put up a smile on my face, so I'm grateful for that!
Well, this had a surprisingly pleasant end. As things were going, I honestly wasn't expecting a happy-ever-after.
It's a shame about Soarin's wings though. And poor Lightning Dust, she doesn't deserve to end like that. She has so much potential as a character.
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Well, since you've mentioned it, there will be a future story in the series involving Lightning Dust in her little predicament, albeit with a set of differences considering Twilight and Nightingale's interference. It'll be happening chronologically a bit after the events of Cascade. I'm still working out the specifics for it, but I'm planning for it to come out as Tale VI.
You can has review!
I never have any idea what to expect from this series, and I mean that in a good way. You did excellent work with the atmosphere here, and capturing the voices of the characters was a major strong point and their romance was so easy to get invested in. I don't understand why such skilled writing like yours doesn't have more attention; you're by far one of the most underrated writers on this site.
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Aw, thanks for the high praise. Really, I'm just glad that people seem to be enjoying my work, you included.
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Well, any stuff from WritingSpirit sure puts me in the ReadingSpirit.
This story is seriously underrated.. just wow
I keep notching blue light being mentioned in all three of the stories so far. I wonder if they're connected?
Wow, Soarin' came up with a long alliteration on the spot and Dash didn't even compliment him? For shame, Rainbow!