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Golden Flare


I love to create stories.

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Idea by Haseo55.


After trying to stop a man forcing himself on a woman, the police arrived at the worst possible time and arrested you instead of the real crook. Now you have a criminal record and got expelled from your school because of it, your parents shipped you off to Canterlot to live with a family friend and attend the only school that will accept you: Crystal Prep Academy. Once you arrived, you learned the only reason their principal, Abacus Cinch, accepted you was to reform you and reintegrate you as a member of society, something that Canterlot High didn't do.

But as your first day began, strange things started occurring; psychotic breakdowns, mental shutdowns, and a disturbing new world that has a link to it all. Soon you and your new friends at CPA will discover that you all have the power to stop this madness and solve the mystery of who's behind it all.

The power of Persona.

Author's Notes:
Tags will be updated as the story continues.

The original idea is from Haseo55 after reading a forum post on Persona: The Group.

EDIT: New cover art provided by TheLannistersBanjoBard.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 69 )

yes i can't wait for this omg

KO awesome already liking this wonder what name the protagonist will have?!

Nice choice!

Nice job!

If you were accepting OCS I'd want to try to make one. But its fine.

Corrupt Cops?

I'm really more into Shin Megami Tensei, but I actually like the story so far.

Cue the music:

I love Persona 5 and I can't wait for more.

Looks interesting so far. My only fear is that this might turn into a retelling of P5 just with EG-characters replacing everyone. Please don't let this fear become reality. :twilightsheepish:

The protagonist is being sent to crystal prep? Why not just give him juvenile detention and make him suffer less? First of all i'm interested that twilight velvet is head prosecutor, was half expecting luna tbh. Im curious to see what roles are given to certain character's. Especially for the palaces and the distorted hearts that make them.

KO awesome chapter, now the fun for him has begun as he'll experience unlike anything he ever felt before and hopefully Shining Armor will join in as well, he's one of my favorite characters! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

This feels like I'm in the actual game. I'm not so sure Shining Armor should join the Phantom Thieves.

Dude good job, only thing is I wish this was longer.

8178029 They will, give it time

I know ms.velvet told us not to be too reclusive, but it doesn't hurt to know what and what not to share....Especially to cops.. If you get what I mean.:ajsmug:

KO awesome chapter, they experience their first time in the inner world known as the Meteverse and get involve of the most dangerous journey ever. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

Curse is an Element in Persona? How come that's not a thing in Shin Megami Tensei?

8188475 Don't know, I looked up the Persona 5 elements

I know it's nitpicking, but the MetaverseNav shouldn't have activated, because Indigo only said name and place but not the distortion.

8188606 Oh? I must've missed that part of the YouTube walkthroughs, could you explain the distortion I forgot to describe?

8188650
Distortion just means what the person sees the place as.
For example for the first dungeon of P5 the key words were Kamoshida (name), school (place) and castle (distortion).
In this case the key words would be Cinch (name), school (place) and as distortion (I assume) army base.
You can asily solve this by giving Indigo an additional line, like "Sometimes it feels more like we're in one of those army drill camps." or something similar. Someone just has to mention the right words.

This was pretty awesome! And I like the picture for Zeus in this! Where is that from? I know it's probably from Yugioh with that design and the other stuff you used, but what's the actual card's name?

8188745 I'm glad you enjoyed it and the card's actual name is "Master Peace, the True Dracoslayer" :twilightsmile:

I'm guessing pride or vanity.
Also aren't they're persona more like ultimate than Primary persona. Also why the change in Morgana's persona.

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Agreed, though I'm curious what role twilight will play as she was introduced so early?

8178083
I have high expectations of you now.

8207342
Different reality, different morgana. Remember that the morgana from the game was made from the hope of humanity, now I don't have any evidence to back this up but I think this one may have been made from the virtue of friendship, either that or the cat's a slider.

8188789
Looking forward to indigo's awakening, I wonder who it will be hmmm????

I can take a good guess at who the girls of Crystal Prep will take after, but maybe they will have aspects of the P5 cast mixed together. Also, I think Sci-Twi should be designated cinnamon roll if Friendship Games was canon. Also, not enough dudes.

Uh, hi Master Peace, Odin. What are you doing here? :rainbowderp:

Gonna send this to Sunny. She's a huge Persona dork

Are you ever going to finish that kingdom hearts story? The one where Sora goes to their world to train for his mrk of mastery exam? If not, then please don't mark it as incomplete, mark it as cancelled. I don't mean to be rude, but it has been one (maybe two) years since you last updated.

8284343 I am going to complete it, I just haven't found the time or inspiration

8284491
Oh, I see. My apologies for being rash. Tho, may I offer a suggestion. When you get to Rainbow Rocks, maybe have Riku go with Sora or instead of Sora. At the time, Sunset is still fighting her Ansem. For someone who's already beat his Ansem, it might be good to have Riku help her get through it. Just my take on it. Take your time.

8285426 It's okay, and besides, that's my plan for Rainbow Rocks

8286150
Cool. I even have art work on the Sirens wearing Vanitas's armor, you just inspire me so much. And Sunset has a lot of potential to become a Keyblade wielder. Keep it up. I'll always stick by ya, man. (thumbs up)

8286150
(Sunset): Demon Me! You're a part of my heart now! Part of the light!

Ooo..~ I really like the persona designs!

8309978
So you mean Yu-Gi-Oh cards? That's literally what they are. "Zeus" is actually Master Peace, The True Dracoslayer. Odin is well actually Odin except in the game he's called Odin father of the Asier. Trust me to know that I made the deck

8262984
Ha I thought the same thing! Mind you i got kinda aggravated that he called Master Peace Zeus when Master Peace isn't really like Zeus in anyway. Especially when you know his card lore and also know all of Zeus's story like me, because last i checked Master Peace doesn't use lightning. Never even went to a lighting themed deck. Only fire, wind, and water. Earth as well if you want to count Amporphage.

8188789
okay thank goodness you know the actual name of the card. And honestly i know this is a very small nitpick but then again it's the small details that really aggravate me, but having "Zeus" look like master peace really aggravated me and the fact you basically had him using lighting when he dint even go to a lightning themed deck. Loved the Odin though! especially because i used to run the deck that he's from! Again i know it's a small nitpick and it doesn't subtract from the story. It only like i said aggravated me. (and damn am i sorry for posting three different things on your story) Again i like the story but just please before you pick the other persona's for everyone else just think a little bit about the card lore that your choosing (assuming of course that your gonna keep using Yugioh card designs.)

8332214 To be honest, the images weren't my choice, someone else recommended them

8342808
Oh well that makes allot of sense then. Like I said I was only irked by the fact you chose master peace as Zeus. Doesn't really subtract from the story at all. I really like the fact you used Yu-Gi-Oh cards for two of your personas? Idk exactly what they are called. I've never played Persona only heard of it. But again that was just my thought on it. Mind you it's a pass seeing as how if you look at pictures of Zeus it mostly shows him without armor or anything except for a toga and a lightning bolt

Why was this cancelled?

8390088 It's not, I just haven't had time to work on it

I hope it's a harem.

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