Of manes, wings and princesses

by Midday Shine

Years Later: Twilight's big day

“There, all done.” Celestia smoothed out the last feathers on the tips of Twilight’s freshly grown wings. “You really look like a princess now.”

“Thank you. I don’t know what I would have done without your help.”

Celestia smiled.

“I seem to remember a time when you ran away from my help as fast as you could,” she remarked with a hint of gentle teasing.

Twilight laughed somewhat uneasily.

“Ye-es… I was weird as a child, wasn’t I?”

“Don’t be so hard on yourself, Twilight; I know I was an unbearable perfectionist…”

“You still are one,” Luna quipped, hiding behind a spell shield, and magically arranging her mane and feathers at the same time. “And I swear to the memory of our parents: you just try to touch my mane or my wings today, and I shall not rest until I find a way to send you to the sun.”

“If you really want to return to the moon, then go ahead,” Celestia retorted.

In response, Luna stuck her tongue out. Cadance, sitting at a dressing table in one corner of the chamber, rolled her eyes and sighed.

“Here we go again,” she muttered. “Really? Today is Twilight’s big day. Can’t you put your quarrels off at least until all the ceremonies are over?”

Celestia and Luna exchanged glances, and after a while, began to laugh.

“I assure you, Cadenza,” Luna said at last, “that until we begin to throw spells at each other, our arguments are completely harmless.”

Cadance raised one eyebrow, but before she could say anything, there was a knock on the door.

“Your Highnesses,” one of Celestia’s personal maids peered inside, “only half an hour is left.”

“Thank you, Sunlit Charm.” Celestia nodded and got up from the rug, on which she’d been sitting with her student. “Luna, Cadance, we’ll see one another in the ballroom, in a quarter. Twilight, do you remember the plan of the ceremony?”

“A speech, the big entrance, putting on the crown, presentation to the rest of Equestria,” Twilight listed in one breath.

Her teacher smiled proudly and gently nuzzled her cheek.

“Then see you in a little over half an hour… Princess Twilight.”

Author's Note:

A bonus chapter, so to speak, added partly to make the story meet the 1000 words requirement, and partly for the cute mental image I got of Momlestia helping the new princess prepare for the big moment.

Like I said earlier, constructive criticism is welcome.

Comments

[JackRipper]

Cute.

[Midday Shine]

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Well, thanks a lot! I just wanted to be on the safe side – I'm not a native speaker, so sometimes I might mess something up and not even notice. But, as I said, thanks for the support!

[SilverStar7]

7578469 It wasn't intentional?

I feel weird about saying this, but that line was my favorite of the story. It seemed to me that Twilight was so excited at the prospect that she couldn't talk properly and I was impressed by the "show-don't-tell" quality of that.

Either way, a good first story.

[Midday Shine]

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Nope, not intentional at all. The thing is, I'm not a native speaker, and in my mother tongue, the verb "want" doesn't need any prepositions, no matter the case. So I just missed this one.

Also, it's not exactly my very first fanfic; just the first for My Little Pony. I do have some experience from another fandom (namely, Scooby-Doo).

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The above said, thank you so much for pointing out the mistakes. I'm gonna fix them right now. Never heard of the "been going through" nuance, actually.

And thank you a lot for the watch. I do hope I won't disappoint you when I (eventually) publish another story!

PS. It is in the Popular section? I didn't even know! Quoth Rainbow: THIS! IS! AWESOME!

[Son of Sanguinius]

That was cute, and quite enjoyable.

I found no grammatical errors in the piece. Your English is quite good.

And kudos on hitting Popular!

[cooldash]

I like the idea that ponies groom each other. It makes them even horsier.

[RainbowSparkle3]

Cute.

[Midday Shine]

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Well, thanks a lot!

[RainbowSparkle3]

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No problem.

[Prane]

Interesting! When I usually think about Celestia being Twilight's (or Sunset's, or anyone's) mentor, I always picture her paying attention to how her little ponies act, speak, behave, what they do in front of others and how they do it etc. Seeing Celestia taking great care of how a pony looks is new, but refreshing.

[Midday Shine]

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I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for commenting!

[PaulAsaran]

You can has review!

[Midday Shine]

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(Just a nervicited author here. Don't mind me).