Imma snuggle you
"I’mma snuggle you!" Twilight screeched, suddenly bursting through the doors of Carousel Boutique, purple streaks flying behind her.
Startled, Rarity looked up from her dressmaking, almost stabbing herself in the hoof with a sewing needle. "Huh? What about moi?" Rarity asked, only hearing the last part of Twilight's shriek.
The white mare's confusion quickly faded away to horror when she saw the state Twilight was in. "Goodness, darling! What ever happened to your coiffeur?!" She galloped over to Twilight, who was visibly shaking, and tried smoothing down the frizzy ends of her violet-striped mane. "There, there," Rarity cooed, brushing Twilight's hair with brilliant blue magic," I'm sure we can fix your mane, and whatever is bothering you, but I first need to know—" Rarity abruptly cut off, looking down.
Twilight was affectionately nuzzling the other unicorn against her fuzzy neck, purring like Opal after a warm bowl of milk. "Wha-wha-?" Rarity stammered, feeling her cheeks heat up. The purple mare continued snuggling Rarity, stroking up and down with her head. Admittedly, it wasn't an altogether unpleasant feeling. "D-darling! What in Equestria are you doing?"
Twilight stopped, blinking her dark, pretty eyes. "I'm snuggling you," she replied innocently, her tiny muzzle squished in disbelief. "I told you when I came in, Rarity, remember—I’mma snuggle you!" She yelled again, eyes glazing, as she dived back into Rarity's neck.
"WhhAAA!" The fashionista squirmed as Twilight nosed her sensitive fur. "But-what? Why?" she asked, trying to comprehend exactly what was happening. This didn't make any sense, especially for Twilight. If this had been Pinkie, on the other hoof, it might have been excusable, and just passed off as “Pinkie being Pinkie”—but Twilight?
Absolutely ridiculous! Twilight was Twilight just as much as Pinkie was Pinkie—a smart, beautiful, sophisticated, beautiful, completely logical mare. What would cause Twilight to change, and randomly start cuddling her?
Not that she was asking it to stop.
"Why?" Twilight repeated, retreating her head from Rarity. "Why? Because snuggling. It's very simple. I'd expect you, out of all ponies, to understand this, Rarity!"
Before Rarity could answer back, the snuggling-crazed mare tackled Rarity to the soft, carpeted floor, her attack increasing in bookish cuteness. Laying her back, they were both pushed up against a tall, wooden table, a bouquet of flowers arranged in a glass vase balanced on top.
Goodness. I hope it doesn't fall, Rarity thought, before finding herself laughing—the purple unicorn was sneezing; she was trying so hard. But trying hard so hard to what? Rarity wondered. Snuggle?
Twilight sneezed again, and covered her mouth in Rarity's neck.
"Ewwwwww!" Rarity screeched, sitting up. "Darling? What was that!?"
Twilight wasn't listening and attempted to attack the fashionista once again. She squirmed over Rarity's shoulder, but Rarity quickly blocked her. "Enough!" Rarity bellowed, frightening Twilight. "I will only let you do this if you apologize for sneezing on my gorgeous coat, immediately!"
"I'm sorry." Twilight didn't seem sorry.
"Sorry for what?"
"Sorry for sneezing on your gorgeous coat."
"Oh, well, apology accep-"
Twilight jumped off of Rarity's stomach, comfortably settling while she kneaded like a cat. Apparently conversations didn't last very long with this version of Twilight. Speaking of which…
Rarity cleared her throat, hoping to catch Twilight's attention. Maybe she'd be willing to speak with her while they were snuggling? "Twilight, may I ask what brought on this behavior?"
The purring from Twicat puttered out, and she seemed to be considering Rarity's question. "Well, I think," she began, "I think it started with a potion."
"A potion?"
"Yes, a potion. And I drank it."
"I figured as much, darling."
Twilight frowned, but her eyes stayed happy. "Yes, well, I did. And that's it."
"That's it, darling?" Rarity raised an eyebrow, blowing strands of Twilight’s mane out of her eyes. Without realizing it, Rarity's hooves were absently wrapped tightly around Twilight's barrel, hugging.
"Yeah," Twilight nodded. "I was trying to make a love/honesty potion, but I messed it up, and then Spike accidentally added it to my morning coffee. Pshh. Spike really needs to start paying more attention! I swear, he's so ungrateful for the cat food I feed him! And it's even wet!"
Rarity decided to ignore that last comment about Spike's diet, but somewhere in the back of her head, she decided to sneak him marshmallows at night from then forward.
"Wait, why a love potion, Twilight? Who were you trying to woo?" Her face lit up. "Oh, was it Ma-"
"You." Twilight grinned, fluttering her lashes.
"Wh-what?!" Rarity coughed, sputtering. She stared at Twilight in shock for a moment.
"Mmh," said Twilight, hiccuping in excitement. "I love you."
Rarity smiled, her stomach bursting into Fluttershy-butterflies. Who cared if it was just the spell making Twilight say these things? It was still true, right? Or was it a dream? Did Twilight—cute, amazing, smart, beautiful, clever Twilight really like her? The one pony she had a crush on ever since meeting?
"I-I-" Twilight cut the white unicorn's stutterings off with a swift kiss. Well, it was more like a messy head-butt, but it worked just fine for Rarity, anyway.
But then Twilight began giggling madly half way through, and that made Rarity start to laugh. Rarity pulled back, her beaming face hopeful.
"Do you really mean that, darling? You actually love me? Not just the potion?"
"Oh, Rarity," Twilight snorted, nuzzling her marefriend again. "There was no potion."
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Needs more cat comparisons
7364400
Hmm, definitely
Aww, that was a cute and silly story.
And wow! That plot twist at the end. I did not see that one coming. 
(Suddenly, Pinkie Pie pops out of nowhere)
Urm.... certainly confusing to say the least. I get that you are trying to go for a simple cute fic but the confusion initially from why Twilight's wants to and is snuggling Rarity really put me off from enjoying it. The explanation of why she suddenly wants to snuggle was a little bit acceptable aside for the out of the blue "I love you" at the end. Probably needed more detail in the story overall as it felt lacking in many areas.
No offence to you as an author of course!
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I don't know what you're talking about. She was quite clear to me. Makes perfect sense.
I can only surmise that this story was inspired by this image:
cdn-img.fimfiction.net/story/l5oe-1467141758-335988-full
Despite my general distaste of ships, I will admit to having lol'd.
You got featured!
Front page:
http://imgur.com/kJAU8hx
Upvotes:
http://imgur.com/R64LjU8
Your last 3 stories all had the same number of up and down votes.
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I was gonna ruin it by upvoting this, but 7365163 beat me to it!
7365171
I took the image from what I saw, and it had 67 upvotes. If I clicked on the story earlier, then I would've saw 66 upvotes instead of 67.
#Rekted+MLG-360noscopes. User TwiSNUG has earned the achievement; Surprise Inversion, and Burnt Mallows
Coiffeur means hairdresser in French, silly!
Source for title image?
Utterly adorable in every way. I could feel the fuzziness of cuddling ponies simply by reading this, and that's got to be an impressive achievement!
One or two grammatical nitpicks:
'Altogether' is probably the word needed there, rather than 'all-together' - those two words have altogether different meanings :P
First 'hard' doesn't need to be there, methinks.
But other than that, some truly top-notch fluff! Just what I needed to warm my heart on this cold-ish evening.
Cute and funny. A golden combination. Good job!
7365350
All-together is wrong. Altogether can never mean all together. Most countries accept all together as an alternative form of altogether. Hyphenated is still wrong, though.
7365524
Is that the worst thing you found in this story?
My comment was deleted accidentally? Oh well, I'll just have to say it again!
Plot twist!
There was no potion?
Needs more downvotes.
Hilarious!
Thanks for representing us teenage girls on the featured page! ;)
7365655
Why? We got a cute RariTwi story and Spike has to eat wet cat food. It's perfect.
Random Spike abuse (which is becoming disturbingly frequent again after it went away for a while) almost derails and ruins what is otherwise a very cute bit of fluff.
You you also added some extra instances of words words. A quick editing pass would probably take care of it for such a short fic.
Definitely liked! Love me some RariTwi.
7365274 Hairstyle / [to dress/style] hair. Depends on context.
7365964 Huh...wow it does, looks like we're both right
7365978 Actually, since you corrected the usage all snootylike and were wrong in correcting, only I'm right.
This is so cute! The little plot twist at the end really escalated this from a decent one shot to a really good one shot! At the end I was left thinking "Whaa???.....wow, Twilight's clever!"
Great job author!
7365993 That's a bit harsh, I wasn't that snooty
and coiffeur does mean hairdresser in french (coiffure is the hairstyle, and I'm really trying not to appear snooty but I am French so I know this)
Also here: http://www.thefreedictionary.com/coiffeur
7366014 And? Doesn't change the fact you were wrong.
Heh, nice twist at the end.
Snuggles are awesome.
I wish there were more snuggles, though.
You can never have too many snuggles.
7366031
Nothing makes me think "you don't actually know what you're talking about" like someone straight up saying "You're wrong." without backing it up with evidence.
I don't even speak French, but I am an enormous lit and etymology nerd.
-eur, in this context, is almost always the noun conjugation for a verb.
In this case, coiffeur refers to "one who coiff's," as in someone who styles hair. Otherwise known as a hairdresser. In the particular case of French, after a little bit of research, it is specifically a man who is a hairdresser (oh romance languages and your gendered conjugation). A female hairdresser being a "coiffeuse."
This is backed up by Merriam Webster, Google Translate, and the French localisation of Wikipedia, as well as the aforementioned etymological rules.
So, in point of fact, you are wrong. I just happen to have the facts to prove it.
I'm going to say, for the most part, you were being relatively civil. But just outright saying "you are wrong" without even doing the research to be sure is just foolish and makes you seem very antagonistic. I know, that's me being a hypocrite considering how condescending I'm being. But someone doing that is seriously a pet peeve of mine.
Snuggles
7366230 Shut the fuck up. Nobody asked for your input.
That ending!
Please no swearing in the comments
Thanks
7365655
Sorry you feel that way.
7365926
Oh, sorry, I wasn't trying to make it abusive. Spike eating cat food was just a gag in Mentally Advanced Series, The Star In Yellow
7366230
Perhaps Rarity meant what happened to her hairdresser to make Twilight's hair so bad?
But probably not. I just heard her say it in the show.
7366484
I don't think any reasonable people would get onto you about using a foreign loan-word slightly incorrectly. I went on that rant because the person I replied to was getting very un-reasonable.
Especially considering, if your profile is true and you are 13, you are incredibly articulate and creative. I hope you continue to practice and nurture your writing!
Oh, thank you!
I'm... not really sure what to make of this. Short, cute, bit of fluffness, and shipping. Hmmph. I'll call you back when I have some ideas.
7366598
Oh,ok! My phone number is fluffinessexpress123Friendshipismagic
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7367158
This again?!
7365556
What? Oh. I enjoyed the story! It was cute and silly. I was just elucidating on Konami's point.
Yay! Featured ! Great story! Congrats!
Twilight Snuggle slaver driver confirmed.
WAAAAH, THIS WAS SUPER CUTE!
Though I wish it had gone on for pages and pages, this was short but very sweet ;u; I especially liked Rarity's characterization, and the descriptions were quite nice throughout. There were a few odd sentences here and there, but nothing that really took me out of the reading, and the fluff was doing a really good job at keeping me distracted eeeee
Gosh, it was really cute, though. Especially that last line, I don't know why, but I really loved it
I can just imagine Twilight's tone and I DON'T KNOW I JUST REALLY LIKED IT A+ ENDING SENTENCE
Also, CONGRATS ON THE FEATURE!!! That is super exciting, and it's always nice to see adorkable RariTwi fics up there o:
All in all, this was a super cute fic, and thank you for sharing it with us waaaah
You and your sister are planning a full-scale adorableness invasion of the feature box, aren't you.
Hey, Twilight that's a pretty good idea.
-Few days later-
Twilight it didn't work! I snuggled a woman at a restaurant and I got a slap to the face and a talk with a policeman. Maybe I need a cat?
-Straps cat to chest-
There we go this outta do it.
In all seriousness this was an excellent fic. Freaking adorable.
Rainbow Dash Presents? If so, nice reference o3o
7367158 Twilight seems un phased with the horn being jutted into her neck, nor did Rarity care to put it there.