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Damn...this would have been so hot as a full on clopfic.
Still pretty hot as is, though.
6935763 I approve.
6935799 I hear ya.
And yet he didn't make a move.
6937859 Sex was not what he wanted most, so the move he did make got him what he truly desired.
6937869 But the urges will bottle you up until......
We're proud of you, Spike. Not every dragon can do this.
Good story!
But I still don't get the ending. Why is Fluttershy suddenly crying? Does it have something to do the letter (?) he wrote?
I fond two typos and have two suggestions:
One word too much.
Here are two spaces. (Not really a typo, so I hope I'm not too annoying.)
Sometimes Spike has skin, sometimes scales. Since it's anthro, both could be considered right, but better decide and stay constant.
Also put the letter in a <quote> box. Looks much better that this indentations. If you don't believe me, just try it out.
6947121 I have no issues with people fixing my mistakes, and I'm sorry about the scales bit. I write Spike sooooo little (even though I do like him and see potential in him as a character for stories), that I slipped. Sorry.
As for the crying, yes. The exact contents are up to you, but the general idea is that those are tears of joy from him wanting to be with her too.
I enjoyed this, though I wish it was longer to further expression feelings and flash out more story. But it is good the way it is.
This was just beautiful. A story like this doesn't need sex to be good. I'm honestly glad you veered off that route.